Re: New WG/Nerd Ebook: From Nikki to Nerdy
Wow, extremely detailed. A few typos but overall very well-written. Would have liked to see a little more internal conflict, just a little too convenient in terms of Zeke's reaction. Yes, he seems concerned, but not to the point that he explains the situation to her (in non-hypothetical terms), or asks her to take off the ring. You could have delved deeper into his reaction and guilt about what is admittedly pretty awful for Nikki (but of course a dream come true for him)
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