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Originally Posted by godleydemon
I don't much like size transfer and giantess type stories. But the writing in this was amazingly well done, my favorite paragraph in the entire thing.
I loved that paragraph and I loved this style of writing, unfortunately though, I didn't like the end. It just felt.. wrong. Nothing was accomplished, the old Heather seemed like it would appear through the cracks, then disappear again. I get the author wanted to let that bit of Heather shine through, but it gave a hope that just never went anywhere.
He tried his best to wrap things up in the final chapter, unfortunately, it left me thinking. The old Heather, from all that time ago, was lost forever and that our protagonist was going to suffer or learn to love it. I'd have loved to have seen a couple of more chapters, him working with the other character in the story that knows the secret. Devising a way to balance the scale so to speak, to break the spell that Heather had been trapped in, when she had only hoped to help her friend. The entire story is a tragedy when taken in with that context.
Not only that, it's a tragedy without a proper ending. The author says something about an old cartoon, where Wiley finally caught the Roadrunner and held up a sign that said "now what". It's actually a rather famous scene in cartoon history. Because a child wouldn't know what came next, so neither did Wiley. That's not really what happens here though. The author tries to say the protagonist longed for Heather his entire life, but when he had her, he didn't know what to do next. That's not at all what happens in this story though truth be told. Heather is a maniacal super worldly being trapped by dark magic to consume, the more she consumes, the more darkness inside of her grows in strength. The truly tragic part, she didn't want this, she didn't want any of it.
She even mentions at a certain point near the end, she didn't want this, but it's almost like she has two different personalities. Which in truth, she probably does. The one that hungers and the innocent child that doesn't want to hurt anyone.
I hope this author is here somewhere, I'd love to see him follow this up with a proper ending. Ending Heather's suffering in some way or form.
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I definitely agree, it just doesn't feel concluded at all. Heather either needed to double then an actually steal the size from the rest of sorority or figure out away to make amends. It definitely feels unfinished, and it really need a culmination to the tragedy. Hopefully, it will inspire someone to write a story in a similar vein. I think it would be interesting if she drained other attributes as well, explicitly like some of the other popular goddess ascension stories.
This was really fun and interesting because it seems as it was written as a much as psychological horror as much as tragedy. That would be a really interesting approach that I've rarely seen taken in the genre. Sure, some people may swap so many attributes that they can't return to their normal lives, but rarely does the character go on as quite a terrifying power trip as Heather.
Really hope this story inspires someone.
