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Originally Posted by joyce

There's a lot more to come

Just curious - do you mean "editing" like stylistically, or grammatically? I found one typo after I read your comment, but aside from that the grammar seems fine.

Stylistically. Some word choices and sentences here or there. But I'm can be a real Lit. snob, so please don't take my comment as criticism. The whole thing is still easy to read and fun.