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Originally Posted by LK
If I ever swear off shrinking forever, it will be because this passes for writing by the majority.
Dude? Why would you put a profile picture that implies that it is you? Are you so naive to think that someone wouldn't search by image and stumble across your private interests? And why do you write when you make no effort to proofread?
I get that this exercise is probably you indulging in your fantasies, and you're honestly looking for feedback, but I would spend some time in an English and critical thinking course instead of looking to anonymous to give you a credible education.
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I admit, I didn't proofread as much as I should, and that picture isn't me. Its a random guy I found on google images. Thanks for the critism, I'll try to improve myself and well, not make it all about my fantasys.