an old story of mine

[Jake T Catt]

I Found an old story I wrote. It hasn't been seen on the internet in a long time. It's mostly BE, some TF, just a hint of TG at the end. It's very processy. Mostly BE and multiple breasts more than anything else.


I'm guessing there's maybe 10 people here who've ever seen it before. Let me know what you think. I'm working on a big writing project right now and I could use some encouragement.

[Jake T Catt]

Hey guys, I know it's old, but I worked really hard on it. A little feedback would be nice. PM me if for some reason you don't want to post. Is that so much to ask?

[Kerberos]

I thought it was pretty good. A couple of the TF's went a little past my personal human/animal ratio, but not so much as to discourage finishing the story.

All in all, I liked it. Have you done any other stories, or are thinking of writing more?

[Jake T Catt]

Well, I have written one or two episodes for the BEAddventure : )

http://www.bearchive.com/~addventure...jaketcatt.html

A lot of the good ones are at the end of the list, as not surprisingly I got better with practice. Still there's a lot of stuff I like in there.

But to answer your question. Right now I'm working on my own project which is kind of like a choose your own adventure story, only with illustrations and animation in places. At the start of the story you can pick which kind of transformations you like, and then the story will only give you those options.

Wow, as of this post 1,170 or so people have looked at this thread, but only 163 have downloaded the story. I guess I seriously underestimated how many BE fans would dislike the TF elements.

For those few of you who did read the story, was there something you'd like to see more of or less of? I didn't really go nuts with the explicit sex scenes, does that help it or hurt it?

[Kerberos]

Hmph, I wouldn't judge page views to exactly. I myself checked this thread about 9 times between my post and your reply alone. That and I get the feeling that some check new threads and don't read the name, then decide they don't want to read a story. Or they don't have time, I can't say and won't judge either heh.

Personally I thought the number of sex scenes was just find. Not too many, but not brushed over either. As long as it flows well and is written nice, both sides can work fine to me.

From someone such as myself who isn't terribly interested in animalesque TF's, and still found the story interesting, that's pretty good. Anyhoo, goodluck on your upcoming adventure tale, and I hope to see it sometime soon. ;D

[Vengeance1701]

Not too bad, Jake.... I thought the writing was done fairly well.

Not too thrilled about the multiple breasts (which was about the only down side for me).

Everything else was done very satisfactorily

And your BE stuff is good on the ADDVenture.

[Jake T Catt]

Originally Posted by Kerberos

Hmph, I wouldn't judge page views to exactly. I myself checked this thread about 9 times between my post and your reply alone. That and I get the feeling that some check new threads and don't read the name, then decide they don't want to read a story. Or they don't have time, I can't say and won't judge either heh.

Personally I thought the number of sex scenes was just find. Not too many, but not brushed over either. As long as it flows well and is written nice, both sides can work fine to me.

From someone such as myself who isn't terribly interested in animalesque TF's, and still found the story interesting, that's pretty good. Anyhoo, goodluck on your upcoming adventure tale, and I hope to see it sometime soon. ;D

Well even a few days ago a good 20 of the page views were mine. More since then. But I think your comment on the animal TF's says a lot. And by that I mean I must be doing something right! Thanks for that.

[Daichi Azure]

wow...not bad....can we have a sequal for this?

[Jake T Catt]

What would you want to see in a sequel? Just more of the catgirls?

I must admit the story was kind of made to have a sequel or be a series.
Obvious possiblities include

a mostly TG story bout the former boy friend
A pure BE story about other people from the lab
a very TF full story about the whole world being affected by this guy's viruses, could include various furries, centaurs

What would you like to see?