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Process Master
Join Date: May 2005
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Hand Maid May comic
Alright, people over at the GTS Depot forums have been enjoying this day by day as I put up each page, but now that I'm finished with it, I'll post it here for those that don't go to the GTS Depot forums to enjoy.
Oh and you read it right to left. Here's a typed out version of the text bubbles in the latter pages since my handwriting gets to be near unrreadable: Page 12 1 Kazuya: May! voice: Oh man 2 Cyber X: It looks bad.... 3 Kazuya: Wha.... Where'd you come from? 4 Cyber X: Yeah, helloe to you to...It took me some time to get here you know 5 Cyber X: Her condition is worsening. The bio-cells are multiplying too much and her structure can't support the rapid growth... 6 Kazuya: Isn't there something you can do? 7 Cyber X: Wel of course there is. But it won't be easy 8 Cyber X: If this keeps up, she could die.... 9 Cyber X: If I can figure some way to break the code and implement a new one..... 10 Kazuya: Hurry! You've got to save her! Cyber X: Don't worry, I'll get it done. 11 Typety type type 12 Cyber X: (thinking) I hope this works Cyber X: Alright! 13 Cyber X: Here we go! 14 Kazuya: Did it work? 15 Cyber X: Ummmm.........eh..... 16 *May growing ever bigger* 17 Cyber X: Nope 18 Kazuya: Hurry! Hurry! She's dying! 19 Cyber X: Hold on...hold on...I think I may have it this time. 20 *May still growing bigger* Page 13 1 May: Gnnh! 2 May...still growing bigger 3 May...still still growing bigger. Oh so are her boobs.... 4 I think the look of shock and surprise on his face is pretty self-explanatory 5 Cyber X: Let's see...that goes there....and that there....and what's next? 6 Kazuya: RUN!! Cyber X: Run? It's not ready to run yet.. 7 Cyber X: On second thoguht I agree with your idea 8 Runnning like hell 9 Cyber X: (thinking to himself) Almost there Almost there Kazuya: We're gonna get crushed by her leg, hurry up! 10 Kazuya: Is it ready yet!? 11 Cyber X: When you stop pestering me it will be. It's hard to work with you nagging me all the time. 12 Cyber X: Alrightlet's give it a shot! 13 !! Page 14 1 May: Oh, Master Kazuya, I'm so glad you saved me! 2 Kazuya: Well, Actually.... 3 Cyber X: Yeah, no respect for teh guy who did all the work... 4 May: But, ummm......master....ummm... 5 Kazuya: yes, May, what's wrong? You feeling ok? 6 May: Yes, but...is..is this reall necissary? 7 May: It's rather troublesome when doing chores...and everything else.... Kazuya: Well, it does mean that I can save on electric bills....for life... Cyber X: it's teh only energy transfer port you have. But hey, it's just one of the side effects...it'll only be like this for a week or two. 8 Cyber X: You see, matter can't be destroyed. So when I changed the code to make you normal, all that matter had to be converted into energy. So, with some of my high density ultra batteries, you'll bleed off all that excess enrgy. 9 Cyber X: Don't worry, you'll still have enough energy left that you'lll never need recharged again May: hmmmnh Well, ok 10 May: At least I'm happy being a BIG help to Kazuya! Page 14 alt 1 Cyber X: Well it worked....sorta....At least things will be fine for now. 2 Kazuya: Yeah, I guess so.... 3 Kazuya: But will May really be alright? 4 Cyber X: Sure she will. 5 May: Well, it's not easy..... 6 May: but... 7 May: I'm glad I can help Kazuya! (Boy did I draw her weird in this frame...) 8 Cyber X: She's right you know. She's being a huge help. You'll never have to worry about paying a bill ever.... 9 Kazuya: Well, that is good... 10 Cyber X: She boosts all the frequencies making this area the best broadcasting plce for miles. The companies will pay you like crazy. Kazuya: Then, all is good 11 Kazuya: So, how about it May? 12 May: Yes!! 13 May: Today again, I'll do my very best!! |
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01-10-2006
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Very nice. Could stand some cleanup, but very nice.
Looking forward to seeing more of your work. |
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01-10-2006
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Electric Frankfurter
Join Date: May 2005
Location: Frankfurt, darkest Germany
Posts: 1,835
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The idea and the story is very nice. But sadly your drawing abillities need a lot of work.
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01-10-2006
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Crazy Old Brit
Join Date: Oct 2005
Location: United Kingdom
Posts: 1,250
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The drawing isn't THAT bad but not amazing. Also the writing is poor. Its all well and good to have a side script to read but its never the same....
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01-10-2006
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no one
Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: in hell i think
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yes jumba the drawing are not bad but i find it hard to read what was wrote and i thought i had bad hand writing but all and all it is something i look to seeing again
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Process Master
Join Date: May 2005
Posts: 983
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Eh, I know. It was mostly an idea, and that's it. I was drawing these pages in less than an hour and pulling the dialogue out of my ass. I was pretty much doing this thing panel by panel, with no real forward direction. I'll perhaps do more in the near future. Myabe when I do, I'll plan a bit better... Quote:
But yes, practice much, do I need. |
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01-10-2006
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Frequent Poster
Join Date: Oct 2005
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I thought it was fantastic. The art isn't SO bad and I loved the story. ^^ To be honest, I think it's a lot better than some other art out there, and it's certainly not the worst. I think it deserves a little more credit than was given here. This isn't exactly a "crap" piece that is getting too much credit.
I've love to see more of your work in the future. Though I do have to admit, it'd be nice to see it cleaned up and the text made clearer. Other than that it was a great read. ^^ |
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01-10-2006
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4th beasty boy
Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: inside a vagina
Posts: 106
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It was quite a decent piece of work, especially when she first started out small and then grew to human size, but I would have rather preferred that there were more of a slower growth transition when she was human size.
I would rather have seen her height change go unnoticed until she would be about 3 inches taller than her master, then the rapid growth into a giantess. But that's just my opinion. Overall, I'd give it 8.5/10 because I loved the art work, but the writing ws hard to read. |
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01-10-2006
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Bored of being an asshole
Join Date: Jun 2005
Location: Canada
Posts: 693
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It's funny how careful people are now of not over complimenting things. >_<
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01-10-2006
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That's a nice comic, The growth is good and the brief story is nice for the sequence. Although the art could be a little better. But it's decent.
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01-10-2006
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Process Fan
Join Date: Jul 2005
Posts: 32
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I think it's cute.
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05-25-2007
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Just too freakin cool looking!!!Its perfect!!!!very nice job
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