Two page comic like thingie

Kvasir · 01-10-2007

Have you ever put alot of work into something, looked at it, and realized it doesn't look like you've done much work? This is exactly what this makes me feel like. The 6th+7th panels really bug me for some reason (figures it would be the pages with the BE, just my luck) And I really don't like the hand on the 7th (that's were she's falling) otherwise I like it, if I have misspelled something please,let me know. (no spell check, and I really need it. Seroiusly, I've been spelling opinion wrong and it's in my signature.)

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I'm gonna be posting the comic on my DA before the end of the night, so I'm taking them down from here. Yay for saving space for new stuff.

spongebathe83 · 01-10-2007

it's simple and straight to the point. The drawing style could stand some improvement.

Muhznit · 01-10-2007

Yeah, the drawing is the main department. They look stretched a bit.

01-10-2007

woohoo! kerplump! lol
Not bad at all, the story is good and coloring and concept... no not bad.
some practice on some female figures might help
I like the size and the writing for sure; keep at it!

Prophet Tenebrae · 01-11-2007

Yeah, it's a good start... the figures look a bit stretched out but it's a nice fun short comic... and they say practice makes perfect.

You can't be disheartened if things don't turn out so well, just like David Brent said - our greatest triumph is not in never falling but in rising every time we fall.

EchoWing · 01-11-2007

I feel sorry for Sue; apparently, she's immune to this stuff.

The Lord of War · 01-11-2007

lol great comic, I was expecting the other one who was drinking it all day o get up with massive breasts though.

Kvasir · 01-11-2007

heh, Sue is kind of BE immune (much to her dismay) and for the record the other girl's name is Sally. Anyway I strive to improve, so thanks for your comments. I honestly had to leave out some of the joke to help it be readable.

Philcotv · 01-12-2007

Very nicely done. Good expressions, decent pacing and panel layout. Your art will improve with time, but with a good little story like this, much can be forgiven/overlooked.

There's a text error in the first panel of the 2nd page. "Even if it did work I doubt it work in only in one day, ya know?" should probably read, "Even if it did work, I doubt it'd work in only one day, ya know?"

Will we see more adventures of Sue and Sally?

Kvasir · 01-12-2007

*cough* http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/46531297/ *cough*
5 hours of work- free; many many mispellings- free, shameless plug- priceless

edit as of 11 sometime the comic will be up on my DA (thanks for pointing out that text error, Philcotv. I fixed it)

Kvasir · 01-14-2007

Okay, I seroiusly have find better timing to post stuff. BOTH times I posted art work in this thread Memo Pad had posted new artwork (well the black and white stuff isn'tnew but still). I work hard on this stuff, and then I see his stuff and my spirit just breaks. I was feeling pretty good about this one too... Ah well I posted a new comic (like what 7-9 hours of sweat and toil in the coloring booth of my cave) and rather just posting it here. Links!
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/46674259/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/46674631/
and the old one can be found here
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/46537383/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/46537609/
Tell what you think, It may not seem like it but I really do listen. That's why I even bother posting stuff, to improve (and Im done with my little self rant now)

01-10-2007	#1
Kvasir Thinking WAY to much Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: In the middle of nowhere Posts: 162	Two page comic like thingie Have you ever put alot of work into something, looked at it, and realized it doesn't look like you've done much work? This is exactly what this makes me feel like. The 6th+7th panels really bug me for some reason (figures it would be the pages with the BE, just my luck) And I really don't like the hand on the 7th (that's were she's falling) otherwise I like it, if I have misspelled something please,let me know. (no spell check, and I really need it. Seroiusly, I've been spelling opinion wrong and it's in my signature.) edit------------------------------------- I'm gonna be posting the comic on my DA before the end of the night, so I'm taking them down from here. Yay for saving space for new stuff. __________________ His name was Kvasir. He was so steeped in all matters and mysteries of the nine worlds since the fire and ice first met in Ginnungagap that no god nor man nor giant nor dwarf ever regretted putting him a question or asking his opinion. ~Mead of Poetry~ http://golseum.deviantart.com/ "Hey dude you're so uncool, but hey that's alright. Like, there's no need to get up tight. My eyes reflect the stars and smile lights up my face, we're on an amazing flight in space." Last edited by Kvasir; 01-12-2007 at 07:22 PM.

01-10-2007	#2
spongebathe83 DA artist amateur Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Elsewhere Posts: 787	it's simple and straight to the point. The drawing style could stand some improvement. __________________ . . http://havent-slept.deviantart.com http://groups.yahoo.com/group/havent-slept/ -Just remember, you're a pervert too.-

01-11-2007	#5
Prophet Tenebrae Prophet Of Darkness Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: UK Posts: 1,792	Yeah, it's a good start... the figures look a bit stretched out but it's a nice fun short comic... and they say practice makes perfect. You can't be disheartened if things don't turn out so well, just like David Brent said - our greatest triumph is not in never falling but in rising every time we fall. __________________ Female Transformation Chat! Female Transformation Uber Blog BE Story Club

01-11-2007	#8
Kvasir Thinking WAY to much Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: In the middle of nowhere Posts: 162	heh, Sue is kind of BE immune (much to her dismay) and for the record the other girl's name is Sally. Anyway I strive to improve, so thanks for your comments. I honestly had to leave out some of the joke to help it be readable. __________________ His name was Kvasir. He was so steeped in all matters and mysteries of the nine worlds since the fire and ice first met in Ginnungagap that no god nor man nor giant nor dwarf ever regretted putting him a question or asking his opinion. ~Mead of Poetry~ http://golseum.deviantart.com/ "Hey dude you're so uncool, but hey that's alright. Like, there's no need to get up tight. My eyes reflect the stars and smile lights up my face, we're on an amazing flight in space."

01-12-2007	#10
Kvasir Thinking WAY to much Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: In the middle of nowhere Posts: 162	cough http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/46531297/ cough 5 hours of work- free; many many mispellings- free, shameless plug- priceless edit as of 11 sometime the comic will be up on my DA (thanks for pointing out that text error, Philcotv. I fixed it) __________________ His name was Kvasir. He was so steeped in all matters and mysteries of the nine worlds since the fire and ice first met in Ginnungagap that no god nor man nor giant nor dwarf ever regretted putting him a question or asking his opinion. ~Mead of Poetry~ http://golseum.deviantart.com/ "Hey dude you're so uncool, but hey that's alright. Like, there's no need to get up tight. My eyes reflect the stars and smile lights up my face, we're on an amazing flight in space." Last edited by Kvasir; 01-12-2007 at 08:58 PM.

01-10-2007	#3
Muhznit The Magical Mammary Man Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: In my chair. ._. Posts: 1,171	Yeah, the drawing is the main department. They look stretched a bit.

01-10-2007	#4
tsokei Guest Posts: n/a	woohoo! kerplump! lol Not bad at all, the story is good and coloring and concept... no not bad. some practice on some female figures might help I like the size and the writing for sure; keep at it!

01-11-2007	#6
EchoWing Process Master Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 837	I feel sorry for Sue; apparently, she's immune to this stuff.

01-11-2007	#7
The Lord of War Process Master? lol what? Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NYC baby Posts: 902	lol great comic, I was expecting the other one who was drinking it all day o get up with massive breasts though.

01-12-2007	#9
Philcotv Process Fan Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: East coast USA Posts: 55	Very nicely done. Good expressions, decent pacing and panel layout. Your art will improve with time, but with a good little story like this, much can be forgiven/overlooked. There's a text error in the first panel of the 2nd page. "Even if it did work I doubt it work in only in one day, ya know?" should probably read, "Even if it did work, I doubt it'd work in only one day, ya know?" Will we see more adventures of Sue and Sally?

01-14-2007	#11
Kvasir Thinking WAY to much Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: In the middle of nowhere Posts: 162	The day has seen advances, none Miraculous. Okay, I seroiusly have find better timing to post stuff. BOTH times I posted art work in this thread Memo Pad had posted new artwork (well the black and white stuff isn'tnew but still). I work hard on this stuff, and then I see his stuff and my spirit just breaks. I was feeling pretty good about this one too... Ah well I posted a new comic (like what 7-9 hours of sweat and toil in the coloring booth of my cave) and rather just posting it here. Links! http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/46674259/ http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/46674631/ and the old one can be found here http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/46537383/ http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/46537609/ Tell what you think, It may not seem like it but I really do listen. That's why I even bother posting stuff, to improve (and Im done with my little self rant now) __________________ His name was Kvasir. He was so steeped in all matters and mysteries of the nine worlds since the fire and ice first met in Ginnungagap that no god nor man nor giant nor dwarf ever regretted putting him a question or asking his opinion. ~Mead of Poetry~ http://golseum.deviantart.com/ "Hey dude you're so uncool, but hey that's alright. Like, there's no need to get up tight. My eyes reflect the stars and smile lights up my face, we're on an amazing flight in space."

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