Pounds (a BE/WG/BBW/Cliched story)

[superawesome]

all right guys after long years of always hiding in the shadows, remaining a lurker of the internets. i've decided to branch out and somewhat contribute something to the fetishes i know and so dearly love. now i can't draw, it's kinda hard to draw when your left hand is still in the recovery of a six year accident. So since i write i thought it would be 'okay' to write a fantasy for you psychoatic individuals. now for now the story isn't completed yet and doesn't have a process yet (although it will) basically before i put it on deviantart i want the opinion of you guys (and girls) before i crash and burn.
so here it goes.....Pounds

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Pounds
Written by Darkearth
Story by Darkearth
Directed by Dr. (Muthafucka I?m) Dre
Before I begin I?d like to thank Ooze45,CriticalVolume, ready-art,W00t!, Ylandra, Spiraling Staircase, Shy_Dude, Kawaiidebu, Blyzzarde, Suckermouth, Jacques00, JayTeeFA,Hmm!, and any other expansion/inflation/bbw/WG artist for letting me peep their shyte while contributing to the fucked up fetish I have developed a liking to, I love you all??including BedBenders. Now all kidding and ass-kissing aside, make my story into a comic god damn it so you people could further stimulate the part of my brain that makes me drool and bow down to you sick fucks. Comment please, and I hope you enjoy this incursion into ultimate weight gain??and clich?d fantasy writing.And for the love of god please comment be as brutal as you can. I need to know what i need to improve on in my writing arts, so I'm sort of depending on you guys. Also since i love pop-culture (specificly movies, comics, novels. ETC ETC) i left some references inside my little story, for the fun of it try spotting some so you could distract yourself from my horrible writing. (< not exactly the confident type)
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Katrina was the most admired girl on campus; of course the main reason of her popularity came with her smoking hot body. Katrina?s body was perfect: nice big rack, round plump ass, thick juicy lips, and of course if all else failed; she had her blue eyes and her long, brown hair to pull her through. But of course like all things that go up, they must go down. And judging by the title of this story and the way your heart is beating, you know it too.

Our story starts out in the forest where our used to be perfect main heroine, Katrina, roams. She had it all up until a week ago.
Tears running down her round checks, Katrina was gradually becoming obese. If only she had listened to that Estonian, Goth bitch, Lynch. If only she was smarter. But enough of what?s going on presently, in order to fully understand this eccentric story we have to go back to the week it all went down.
Sunday
After getting slammed the night before, Katrina had a wicked case of what we would call a hangover. Her head felt like it was put through a meat grinder, she finally motivated herself to get out of bed. All Katrina had on was a cute little pink underwear, and her bra. So like any other day, Katrina would start hers the same way: looking at herself in the mirror. She appreciated her god given beauty all the time while making life a living hell for those that don?t have the same ?assets?. Katrina then made her way to her closet and took out small portion of lotion; she proceeded to rub the lotion all over her body, smoothing out any wrinkles that were present. She began to get dressed for work, where she worked at was a small rinky-dink Stop n? Shop located right down the street from where she attended school.
After walking a (really) short distance, Katrina arrived at her workplace. While entering, Katrina was greeted by Emma. Emma is a little bit taller than Katrina, but that?s all Emma ever had on her. Other than size, Emma was nothing compared to Katrina.
?Hey, Katrina.? Emma said as she worked the register. ?Last night was fucking wild, huh?? she continued. ?Yeah, sure?.wild.? Katrina answered as she held her head. Katrina walked behind the counter.
?Whoa, what happened to you?? Emma asked.
?Well, isn?t obvious, I got totally shit-faced.? Katrina said as she popped a couple of aspirins.
Emma chuckled; she began to look through her purse. Emma pulled out an icy-hot pad and handed it to Katrina.
?Oh, thanks babe.? Katrina sighed in pain as she place the pad on her forehead.
?So, do you plan on sharing any details about last night?? Emma asked with an eager look on her face.
?Well, nothing really special.? Katrina responded as she scratched her chin.
?Oh, now that you mention it, do you know James??
Emma gasped, ?Shut the fuck up?.James?! 'Hot-Mess' James!??
?Yup, he was actually kind of sweet, although he lacked in that ?specific male reproductive organ?.? Katrina said with a smirk on her face. She licked her lips and went on with counting the money in the safe. ?Wow Katrina, you?re a slut.? Emma added
?Don?t hate bitch, you wish you had my ass n? titties?? Katrina alleged.
Both girls broke out in laughter to the point of tears. Later that night, there came a knock on Katrina?s door. Katrina ignored it, besides she was busy studying for the Language Arts exit exam tomorrow. The knocking persisted, but Katrina acted like she wasn?t hearing it. She even turned on the radio, but the knocking continued.
?Fucking hell, THAT BETTER BE DANTE & BRODIE WITH MY DVD COLLECTION!!? She advised.
Katrina walked to the door, unlocked all 4 locks and opened the door. To her surprise the person at the door was James.
?Well,well,well. What brings you back to this neck of the woods? You want more; if that?s the case then you?re going to be disappointed I am not in the mood, James.? Katrina stated.
(James is older than Katrina, and if you are curious Katrina is 20 and James just turned 22. He is taller than Katrina by about 5 inches. He also wears glasses plus he is skinny.)
?Uh, no thank you?.er.. I mean I just wanted to say that I wanted to ask you something before you left.? James began has he started to blush.
?Well go on, I don?t have all night.?
Katrina suggested in a somewhat annoyed manner.
?Alright, I-I was wondering if you?d?.want to go out with me?? James asked.
An awkward silence filled the area. It took all of Katrina?s being to keep herself from laughing in his poor, pathetic face. The only thing going though her head was how much of a fucking idiot he is.
?Okay.? Katrina said as she clapped her hands. She grabbed James by his shirt and pulled him into her room. She then sat him down on her lips-shaped sofa.
?Alright James, I am gonna break it to you like this. I understand that last night you were probably under the allusion that I had feelings for you.? Katrina affirmed.
?Well, I had assumed?that..you?well?liked me, or else we wouldn?t have..-?
?-Fucked?? Katrina interrupted.
?Yeah.? James said with a glimmer of hope in his eyes. Katrina couldn?t believe that someone on this Earth was that na?ve, but then again he is a guy who just lost his virginity. Katrina couldn?t hold it in anymore, she let go and laughed in his stupid, unknowing face.
?Aww, that?s so sweet?? Katrina snorted as she continued to laugh.
James was a little nervous, he thought she loved him. Maybe she does and is remembering a funny joke right now, thought James. If he only knew what kind of person Katrina was.
?Woo, that was great?.(sigh)?.tell me James, did you honestly think that I?d really love you?? Katrina asked while she wiped tears from her eyes.
?I just?thought-?
?No, don?t answer that. Now, let me explain something to you; I have a better ass than most of those hoes in the music videos you watch. You on the other hand belong in a pro-active commercial. I have no fat or cellulite anywhere on my body. You, well that?s about the only positive thing I can say about you, you?re skinny enough to be one of those snobby models on Project Runway. Plus it didn?t help that you?re cute little toy in between your legs wasn?t exactly fulfilling my needs. ? Katrina explained as she danced around her room, smacking her as ass, grabbing her breast and shaking them. James was disappointed, devastated actually.
?But there freckles, I mean?? James said as he rubbed his face.
Katrina had enough, she amused at first but now it was getting annoying. She pulled him by the arm and walked him to the door.
?Leave, now!? Katrina exclaimed. James just glared at her, ?You fucking bitch.? James left Katrina?s dorm. Katrina observed him as he walked down the hall until he was out of sight.
?THANK YOU HONEY, AND IF YOU EVER WANT ME TO INSULT YOUR FUN SIZED DICK JUST ASK, ALRIGHT!?? Katrina screamed.
She walked back into her room and closed the door behind her. All Katrina could do was laugh, just laugh at the fact that just happened. She turned off her radio, unplugged her lamp, and checked the scale. She weighed about a healthy 115 pounds, after that she climb into bed and drifted away.
Monday
(The Mysterious and Seductive Cassandra Lynch.)
Katrina woke up to the sound of her Blunt-man alarm clock. School time was approaching, and so was something else. She got up, turned the alarm clock off and started her usually morning ritual:
1. Looks in mirror.
2. Brush teeth.
3. Shower.
4. Do her hair.
5. Rub the lotion on the skin.
6. Put on clothes that make her natural curves stick out to the other gender.
Katrina packed up her books and walked out of her room. She made her way down the corridor, noticing all of the boy?s eyes on her?as usual. Katrina basked in the attention, she loved it. She was even getting checked out by a few girls as well, even if it was a little creepy for her, Katrina still loved it. After walking for what seemed like an hour, Katrina finally made it to class. As she entered Katrina noticed a figure right next to the Professor.

?Ah, Katrina Williams, you finally made it to class and right on time too.?
The professor said in a sarcastic tone. Katrina just shot him a glare before sitting down.
As she got ready the professor started to speak.

?Alright class, today I have a surprise for you all.? He began

?You finally contracted HIV and have only 2 more months to live?? One student said.
?You got the part in the sequel to Brokeback Mountain?? Another student said.

The classroom started to fill with laughter, the Professor on the otherhand, not so much.

"Alright,alright, settle your dumbasses down!" The Professor commanded. Soon the students began to calm down and now everyone was noticing the dark figure standing next to him.
"Alright class, we have a new student." The Professor started. "When ever your ready, introduce yourself."
"Hello, My name is Cassandra Lynch, it's a pleasure to meet you all." The new Student said.
Katrina examined Lynch, Lynch (god i love that name) had pale white skin with black eyeliner, her hair was somewhat long and messy and she was kinda tall. What she wore was this black shirt that cut off at the stomach, Lynch also had a bellybutton ring. Around the piercing was a tatoo of the sun, her pants were tight but not like Katrina's. Then when Kat's eyes finally adjusted to the light in the room, she was devastated. Her body figure was crazy, her ass was more round and plump and her breast were practically F cups.
"Alright Ms. Lynch, please take your seat next to Ms.Williams." The Professor said while he pointed at the empty seat next to Katrina.
Katina watched as she walked up to her, Lynch walked up with the grace of a trained supermodel walking down the runway. Her theighs rubbing against each other as she made her way to her seat, her breast looking like big,swollen,parasites trying to escape their host. Similarly, her rear-end was the same. Lynch sat down next to Kat and place her bag next to her chair.
"Hello,Miss Williams." Lynch greeted with a smile and a hand for her to shake.
Katrina was horrified at the sight of this bimbo bitch stealing all of the boys' eyes where ever she went, by next year Kat knew all the status in the world won't save her from falling into a hole of ''used-to-be's."
With the most fake smile she reserved only for her parents when she needed money, is the same smile she used on Lynch. Katrina's face was as stiff as a board, she shook Lynch's warm,soft hand. Kat figured if she could go through today's exit exam then she's home free. Unfortunately Katrina would have to accept the fact that all the boys were eyeing that bitch. As The Professor passed out the exam packets, he accidently knocked over Lynch's bag. Lynch quickly picked the bag up and set it under her seat. She then turned to The Professor,
"You do have eyes, how about you fucking use them." Lynch sneered.
Oh my god,this bitch is crazy!, thought Katrina.
The Exam continued without any further distractions.
('Our Room')
After two and a half hour test, mentally, Kat was exhausted. As she made her way to her dorm all she heard was about how pretty the new student is, how sexy her body is, and how every guy wants to have their way with....IT. Katrina was upset, she was already chop-liver compared to Cassandra Lynch. Then she started to wonder, no one's body is that exagerrated to absurdity. Was it implants? No, those movements were as fluid as water running. They couldn't be natural,those "things" on her chest and hips are just monstrous. Thankfully her room was right around the corn-
"What the fuck!?",Katrina sighed when she noticed the Dean and the fucking bimbo by her door. "Um, Is there a problem sir?" Katrina asked, almost fearful of the answer.
"No problem at all Williams, you see Cassandra here needs a room and all the other dorms are filled up to max capacity (2 in a room) so Miss Lynch will be your new roommate." The Dean informed.
"Am I being Punk'D?" Katrina asked shocked out of her wits.
"I apologize if this is aggrevating you in anyway, we did check before making our way here." Lynch stated with a genuine look of forgiveness on her face.
"It's....alright i wasn't using the top bunk anyway." Kat said with a tone of despair.
"Thank you, truly, thank you."
Katrina watched as a couple of janitors help move Lynch's things into their room.Then one of the janitors picked up a red and white bag from the trolly and walked it into the room, just as the janitor were going to drop it on the floor Lynch snapped.
"Hey, don't you dare drop it on the floor as if it was garbage you fuckwit. They're things in there that are worth more than your life!" Lynch snatched the bag out of his hand and proceeded to search for any potential damage within. As she looked in her bag, Katrina noticed that the Janitor was checking Lynch out, her breast pressed against her purse/bag thing. This is bullshit....
Tuesday(technically it is considering its after midnight)
That night, both girls were getting ready for tomorrow, Lynch was brushing her hair. With each stroke she made;her massive mams shook. Katrina tried not to look but it was just so...grossly hypnotic. She looked down at her pair of D's and just sighed. Lynch smiled as she saw Katrina in the mirror.
"How pathetic, do you really want my breast mass and ass?" She asked while putting her brush away.
"W-wh-what did you say!?" Katrina said with a puzzled look on her face.
Lynch got up and walked to the center of the room with her bag, she set it on the floor and opened it. Lynch then started taking out a series of colored water bottles. Some rad,some black, and some violet, but only one white. Katrina looked on in confusion as Lynch started to load these things inside of the mini-fridge.
"Can you keep a secret Williams?" Lynch asked as she held one of the black bottles in her hand.
"Well, yeah, I'm pretty good." Katrina answered
"Splendid, now watch."
Katrina witnessed Lynch chug the entire bottle and tossed it behind herself into the garbage can. She suddenly started to strip in front of Kat until she was completely naked.
"What the hell are you doing!!?" Katrina yelled.
"Would you kindly keep your voice down? Just watch..." Lynch stated, placing her hands on her big hips.
Katrina calmed down, she didn't understand why she took all her clothes off. Lynch looked like a hourglass. Her tits hung their like Gods, her ass was....gone!??!1!?? Lynch's ass just shrunk down to a normal size.
"Holy shit!" Katrina whispered to herself.
Then Lynch's breast began to jiggle and shake. Soon her F cupped mammories shrank back to what looked like B-cups. Katrina was shocked, but also in some ways satisfied. She was happy that she still retained the hottest body in school, although Lynch could easily give her some competition with her slender body.
"What are you?" Katrina questioned as she made her way a little bit closer to Lynch.
" I know this might sound rediculous but do you believe in witches?" Lynch asked as she tried to make her now outstretched clothes fit on her.
"No, but I think i might be proven wrong." Katrina stated.
"Well let me address a few things before i continue: I don't plan on taking your 'status' away from you. By all means, you can have it for i don't depend on pety attention to make myself feel good. Secondly, yes, I am a witch. But not in the mainstream ways or Umbran ways."Lynch explained
"Wait a minute, Umbran like Bayo-"
"YES, the very same."Lynch interrupted with a tone of annoyance
"Also, I do know how you act to certain people of this enviroment and to be honest, you're an asshole. Just because you think you're hot shit doesn't mean you do have the right to insult others for your own benfit." She continued.
"What, James and Emma? First off, Emma and I just joke around i don't think she is having trouble sleeping at night knowing I am pret-" Katrina stopped talking, she began to see how she could be making Emma hate her so much from behind her back. Lynch smiled as Kat began to realize this.
"Well, James--"
"Are you seriously going to argue that crushing someone's heart is a good thing?" Lynch questioned.
Lynch then sighed and walked over to the fridge and took out two red bottles. Katrina stood up from her bed.


so that concludes the sneek peak i am still hard at work on it and like i said before, COMMENT i need to know where i could improve and where my weaknesses lie, thank you
-Dark (aka superawesome)

[LK]

Spelling, grammar, sentence structure, and writing a narrative.

[Mr GorpThorp]

Pretty good setup, have a good feeling for the characters so far. I'd just say put a couple more breaks in there so it isn't a wall of text. Well done

[superawesome]

thanks guys, the spelling wouldn't have been a problem if my damn office word worked, but i will take heed of your thoughts and try to revise it as best as i can before it gets done, thanks again