Image - Blushing Bride

Enma_Ai · 07-19-2006

I thought I'd hit the ground running with a first post. This wasn't meant to be in comic style when I started it but I was getting some practice in with a new program. I tend to work in sequence style more.

I might continue this, if I do I'll redo it for better quality. And it was done in the right to left format.

Sutibaru · 07-19-2006

First off, welcome to the process forum Enma Ai.

Your sequence is pretty good. It is great to see new artists coming around here. One tip. The last panel where her top bursts, I suggest putting in a sound effect right there. It seems a bit empty (too much white space).

Other than that, very nice job.

Enma_Ai · 07-19-2006

Thanks for the welcome. As for the comic itself, it's unfinished since it was practice and the whole thing wasn't originially fitted to be a comic. I'll probably redo it though and make it look a lot better. I appreciate the tips too.

Lightfoot · 07-19-2006

It's really pretty good. It's nice, tasteful, clean line art. It's a very impressive first showing.

One comment I would have is that on the second page, it seem to me that panels 2 and 3 could be switched. That the second panel chronologically should be beside the first panel, not below it.

I also agree with Suibaru. Dialog isn't required, but it seems odd without sound effects.

Sutibaru · 07-19-2006

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Originally Posted by Lightfoot

One comment I would have is that on the second page, it seem to me that panels 2 and 3 could be switched. That the second panel chronologically should be beside the first panel, not below it.

Well unless the grows was like a pulse growing and deflating and then growing even larger. ^^

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Originally Posted by Lightfoot

I also agree with Suibaru. Dialog isn't required, but it seems odd without sound effects.

Not just the sound effect, just to fill in the empty space.

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BTW, lucky groom.

acme · 07-27-2006

Hey! Welcome to the forums Enmai Ai (1 week late) and great sequence. Nice start off for the forum ^^.

Prophet Tenebrae · 07-27-2006

I agree with LF's assessment, a fine first showing.

Clean, neat and to the point. Dialogue isn't mandatory but it can help add a little background to the story. Dialogue or maybe jus a little text like "The Bride didn't anticipate quite how generous some of her wedding gifts would be."

People eat that up.

07-27-2006

Vundeba frauline, simply vundeba.

ChedPal64 · 07-27-2006

Beautiful lineart!
What a way to start off!

PrBlahBlahtson · 07-27-2006

I anticipate an interesting honeymoon. Excellent work

07-27-2006

I hereby take her to be my lawfully wedded wife! (who wouldn't after that?!)

I DO!

That is some BE-You-TI-Ful- art! Thanks for that baby doll, and welcome to "The Process."

Ninja Jay · 07-27-2006

I think its awesome. Great squence, and welcome to the Process!

07-19-2006	#2
Sutibaru --- Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 5,865	First off, welcome to the process forum Enma Ai. Your sequence is pretty good. It is great to see new artists coming around here. One tip. The last panel where her top bursts, I suggest putting in a sound effect right there. It seems a bit empty (too much white space). Other than that, very nice job. __________________ Deviantart\|FurAffinity\|Tumblr\|Picarto

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Lightfoot Frequent Poster Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 137	It's really pretty good. It's nice, tasteful, clean line art. It's a very impressive first showing. One comment I would have is that on the second page, it seem to me that panels 2 and 3 could be switched. That the second panel chronologically should be beside the first panel, not below it. I also agree with Suibaru. Dialog isn't required, but it seems odd without sound effects. __________________ http://pulse.webcomic.ws/ https://www.deviantart.com/lightfootcomics http://twitter.com/Lightfootadv http://lightfootadv.tumblr.com/ https://lightfootadv.newgrounds.com/

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acme Nodoka~<3 Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: Hinamizawa Village Posts: 883	Hey! Welcome to the forums Enmai Ai (1 week late) and great sequence. Nice start off for the forum ^^. __________________ Avatar a commission done by Cuddlebeam Check out my DA for big boobs and other boob things I commissioned from a variety of awesome artists. http://fatalizer.deviantart.com/

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Prophet Tenebrae Prophet Of Darkness Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: UK Posts: 1,792	I agree with LF's assessment, a fine first showing. Clean, neat and to the point. Dialogue isn't mandatory but it can help add a little background to the story. Dialogue or maybe jus a little text like "The Bride didn't anticipate quite how generous some of her wedding gifts would be." People eat that up. __________________ Female Transformation Chat! Female Transformation Uber Blog BE Story Club

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PrBlahBlahtson is not a mod. Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Northeast USA Posts: 4,188	I anticipate an interesting honeymoon. Excellent work __________________ It's not that I don't like you. I'm just direct.

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Enma_Ai Leecher Join Date: Jun 2006 Posts: 3	Thanks for the welcome. As for the comic itself, it's unfinished since it was practice and the whole thing wasn't originially fitted to be a comic. I'll probably redo it though and make it look a lot better. I appreciate the tips too.

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shadow Guest Posts: n/a	Vundeba frauline, simply vundeba.

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ChedPal64 Process Fan Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 80	Beautiful lineart! What a way to start off!

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TheMoney Guest Posts: n/a	I hereby take her to be my lawfully wedded wife! (who wouldn't after that?!) I DO! That is some BE-You-TI-Ful- art! Thanks for that baby doll, and welcome to "The Process."

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Ninja Jay Very Melon Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: In the dark place in your mind Posts: 437	I think its awesome. Great squence, and welcome to the Process!