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Inches and Dreams (MiniGTS Short Story)
Much like my previous tale, "Super Size Me", I challenged myself to write another short story, this time with 2000 words instead of 1000. I'd just re-read the classic Fay Tall Attraction by Rapscallion and I felt inspired to write a similarly short & sweet tale.
Anyways, here she is: Inches & Dreams by RobClassact |
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03-14-2014
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OhYeah!
Join Date: Jun 2007
Location: Jersey Shore
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Re: Inches and Dreams (MiniGTS Short Story)
mmmm Nice! Thanks for sharing!
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Re: Inches and Dreams (MiniGTS Short Story)
Agreed, very nice!
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03-15-2014
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Re: Inches and Dreams (MiniGTS Short Story)
Great story! I really felt for the character, especially at the end.
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03-15-2014
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The Man~the Myth~the Bat
Join Date: Jan 2006
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Re: Inches and Dreams (MiniGTS Short Story)
Robclassact,
Not bad at all for a preset target number of words to hit. I'm more appealed to clothes rippage, but besides not having as much of that the story overall is quite catchy. Especially the way you made most of it a dream, a technique I am using in a different kind of writing side-project of my own.
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04-10-2014
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Join Date: Jan 2007
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Re: Inches and Dreams (MiniGTS Short Story)
Nice! You use really descriptive language; it's very evocative.
I just about died for this line: "She'd outgrown her life, her job, her concerns. She had wanted this more than she wanted anything." It really brought out the emotional feeling of letting go and slipping away into ecstasy. |
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