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Fetish Writer
Join Date: Mar 2006
Location: New Jersey
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New story: Jordan's Job
Jordan begins working in the office of a very unusual doctor and becomes part of his experiments. This is the first BE story I've written in a while, and I intend to post a second chapter soon. Enjoy!
http://praedatorius.deviantart.com/#/d36kos7 Chapter 2 http://praedatorius.deviantart.com/#/d37sry9 Chapter 3 http://praedatorius.deviantart.com/#/d39ptci
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Re: New story: Jordan's Job
Not bad, good quality tho it was leaning towards poof process, I didn't notice any grammar errors and the story and characters are engaging.
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Chop, Chop, Chop, Chop
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Re: New story: Jordan's Job
I've found a few grammer mistakes here and there but other wise its very good, nicely done
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01-26-2011
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Re: New story: Jordan's Job
Second chapter up! Jordan gets bigger as the experiments continue.
http://praedatorius.deviantart.com/#/d37sry9
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Chop, Chop, Chop, Chop
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Re: New story: Jordan's Job
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Re: New story: Jordan's Job
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Hey, we have a youtube group now. Add your stuff here: http://www.youtube.com/group/theprocess Oh and I've made a little collection of stuff I'm trying to organize here http://grtcaligal.deviantart.com |
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Was it good for you too?
Join Date: Jan 2006
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Re: New story: Jordan's Job
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Grammar >.>
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02-16-2011
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Re: New story: Jordan's Job
Third Chapter!
http://praedatorius.deviantart.com/#/d39ptci
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