Heather's Bad Day

Okay, I'm not so sure I should be posting this since there are much better BE comics such as BE Avenger but I'm going against my better judgment and going to post it anyway.

This is meant to be a comedy kind of BE comic and it will be longer then just 3 pages. After the main BE my character Heather will still slowly grow but they will grow faster as time continues. Also, I could use suggestion to make it funny or funnier.

Also note that I'm still a new artist so please don't be mean and if possible feedback. Yes, I don't know how to draw hand yet but I am getting better ...

[grtcaligal]

Not a bad start...

[SoylentOrange]

If people didn't post stuff just because other people were better at it, there'd be like six people that posted art on here ever. Sure, it's not great, but it won't ever be great unless you draw and practice, and if posting stuff to get comments is a good motivator for you to draw and practice more, then more power to you, man.

Originally Posted by SoylentOrange

If people didn't post stuff just because other people were better at it, there'd be like six people that posted art on here ever. Sure, it's not great, but it won't ever be great unless you draw and practice, and if posting stuff to get comments is a good motivator for you to draw and practice more, then more power to you, man.

I would LOVE comments, more importantly feedback cause DA isn't very good for feedback. I always get "lol thats funny" or "BOOBS!".

Poor bunny girl...






*cracks his bullwhip*
Now do those requests you took from people!

Originally Posted by shadow

*cracks his bullwhip*
Now do those requests you took from people!

>< Kay

[Vengeance1701]

Your art is coming along but two things.

1) What's with the bunny ears?

and

2) I really hope I don't sound mean in asking this but: is English your first language? Your post indicates a decent amount of fluency but the comic loses something in the grammar. It sounds a little stilted, like you took out joining words.

Originally Posted by Vengeance1701

Your art is coming along but two things.

1) What's with the bunny ears?

and

2) I really hope I don't sound mean in asking this but: is English your first language? Your post indicates a decent amount of fluency but the comic loses something in the grammar. It sounds a little stilted, like you took out joining words.

1.) Bunny Girl

2.)English is my main language but thats what happens when someone fails English through out middle and high school. I can't write worth shit to be honest.

::EDIT::
I saw my first typo. In the first page 4th panel I wrote "The B.E. Ray Is Should Double The Size Of My Boobs". I was original going to say "The B.E. Ray Is Going To Double The Size Of My Boobs" so you see how bad it was going to be.
::EDIT2:: I fixed that typo ^^;

[vaxon]

Originally Posted by Flip M

1.) Bunny Girl

2.)English is my main language but thats what happens when someone fails English through out middle and high school. I can't write worth shit to be honest.

::EDIT::
I saw my first typo. In the first page 4th panel I wrote "The B.E. Ray Is Should Double The Size Of My Boobs". I was original going to say "The B.E. Ray Is Going To Double The Size Of My Boobs" so you see how bad it was going to be.
::EDIT2:: I fixed that typo ^^;

i can write pretty efficiently,enough to get me through the imprudent and worthless crap i go through day in day out,so if you ever need help with grammer i'll help

Nice work. Kind of reminds me of Link's first few posts here.
I really like the top of the third page- seeing her body from a slightly different angle like that... that is what tells me you will be able to become a great artist in time.
Keep it up!

Okay, I'm sorry for no comic. I have friends over until Friday that drove all the way from Tennessee. Tomorrow there not going to be over but I've been practicing using the skeleton cause it turns out that I'm okay at it ... I feel a bit foolish =P

Thanks for the comments, hopefully I can bring better art in my comics.

[emil91]

Funny story, I believe you will improve your art with time.