NinjaSonic's Comic: Stacky's little workout

[NinjaSonic]

Hey Guys, This is NinjaSonic here.

Well I wanted to show you guys the rest of my comic that I did of TLink & Stacky comic that I made at the DA & post it here.

I know I"m not the best in giants art like Night & Wolfman Al to name a few but I wanted to give it a shot & see if I have what it takes.

In the story Stacky was jogging in her workout outfit who wanted a drink since she thirth6y from jogging on the hot day. She workout alot to keep her busty body in tuned-up shape since she have giant funbags that TLink likes.

I appear in the comic with my new outfit & wanted her to try my drink called "Diva Fruit Punch" that could make a new bigger woman out of her. After she remembered what happed to her in WonderLand during the flashback, she decided to drink it after I give her a change of clothes.

Let me know what you guys think.

Later!

[SaberWolfX]

I'm sorry, but you do need some work, the biggest problem I see is that I had no idea that she was growing.

No cloth ripping, nothing to compare her size to another thing, except in one page only.

Aside from that, well if I said more I'd be pushing it a bit far

It's pretty good; coloring and shading, and the story is fun. Definately could use a few more comparisons and improved lineart, but there's potential. Keep it up!

[Greenish_Funk]

I kind of have to agree with SaberWolfX

While the idea and story aren't bad (although not incredible original either), the lack of backgrounds and details really killed the whole 'she's growing' feel. There was really nothing to compare her to that showed it.

I also feel that there was waaay too much dialog crammed into really small spaces. It was hard to read and sorta got monotonous. Perhaps more separate frames/more pages could have even things out a little better.

Other then that, your drawings and colourings are really nice and are very clean. Kudos on that.

Keep up the good work

Too much talking.

Too little different poses.

Not enough comparison.

You need a little work. Nice try.

[bacattack]

Not bad, but you do need some backgrounds and find a way to put computerized text in the balloons (handwritten text is hard to read).

[NinjaSonic]

Okay guys thanks.

I did say I'm not tooo good at this. I don't know how to do backgrounds, do growth that well, & make word balloons since I don't have any art programs on my computer. I did everything by hand & use a scanner that cuts my work off a bit.

Anyway I was making this comic funny & silly to make people laugh. Since I did made this TLink & Stacky comic I was hoping to get them just right.

[Prophet Tenebrae]

I absolutely, positively cannot express how necessary backgrounds or references are in growth comics. It doesn't have to be the Sistine Chapel or anything... Hell, even just a ruler would do... here you've no background AND a dearth of rippage... so when I saw this on DA, I really didn't think there was any growth in it. Suffice to say if you have to caption pictures with the height - you've probably done something wrong.

Definitely agree that there was a lot of word bloat. I think it's relatively easy to insert text balloons into comics if you do it on a computer... but I think you'd probably have done better to streamline the dialogue anyway.

I do hope that's constructive criticism and doesn't come off as man bitching. For the record, I really liked the last shot - it had a nice composition and you did a great job of rendering Stacky with a good rack.