Beach Blanket Beauties Part Two

[gladewalker]

I saw the face thing as artistic stylings. I see that in some Japanese comics all the time. *shrugs* Given the rest of the work put in, I can't believe it was simple laziness or lack of editing. That's a huge thing to miss and not much work to add faces.

I had the same questions of continuity and internal story logic.
Ah well.

[Janus Steel]

Originally Posted by Nom Anor

I just assumed Suzy's spent enough time around Frank to pick up a few things about rewiring transformation technology. That or it had something to do with a tachyon emitter.

But see, that's kind of my point. There is no context to believe that these two characters are related to the Suzi & Frank from others. A clear line of Dialogue in the first novel could have solved that.

"I hope Frank doesn't mind us playing in the Little Leagues today," Suzi remarked looking at her youthened face.

I don't want to give away to much because I know folks will read this, and I know I never appreciate it when my friends ruin TV shows (Breaking Bad) or Movies for me.

But if this was going to be a continuation of the first story it should be explained, noted and addressed how Suzi, Marylin, Mandy and Frank all know one another. How the gun came to be in Mandy's possession.

If this is the same Suzi & Maryn from Eeinie Meanie Maryn that would explain the device, but is Frank really the type to let them walk around with a device that potentially fatal in the hands of a novice? Granted this story doesn't deal with this but what would have happened if regression into fetus or progression into dust? We have to assume, as readers, that we don't know these folks from one story to the other unless there's a clear progression from story to story. A reference so to speak.

That's what I was getting at about the story. It just needed a few bits to tighten it up to be a stellar story.

Sorry if I'm over reading this, I've been playing editor for years now and I'm hyper critical of plot gaps and a perfectionist. I don't like leaving my audiences with gaps in the story if they're not meant to be gaps.

Again, nice pictures and regardless I'll be buying the next work. Only works I don't buy from Dreamtales is the GTS, totally not my bag.

--Edit--

I see Captain Ash asked the questions I as a reader were asking. So um... I guess no spoilers from me...

[Dreamtales]

Thanks very much for all the comments! I definitely listen to feedback and, while I can't please everyone, will try to address any criticisms in future comics.

I appreciate the concern over plot holes. There has to be an internal logic, or the suspension of disbelief is broken. Readers have to care about the characters and buy into the plot enough to care if the ?rules? set up for the comic are broken.

[Spoiler]

That said, my thought was that if you can accept that Mandy?s dad invented an AR ray, it?s not that big a leap of the imagination to assume that it can make people shrink as well. Also, a child-sized Suzy might feel less confident about running back to Mandy?s house and grabbing the AR / AP ray. If she?s caught as a child she?s in big trouble. Once she?s an adult, she can fend for herself.

[Captain Ash]

Don't worry, DT.
We don't take this logic stuff that seriously.
But its fun talking about it.

Besides, will there be a third part?

Captain Ash

[MiachelAngelo2]

Nice Stuff! :d

[Nom Anor]

Originally Posted by Captain Ash

Don't worry, DT.
We don't take this logic stuff that seriously.
But its fun talking about it.

Yeah, as these are genre comics, it doesn't really bother me. But I agree with some of the sentiments.

Actually, this was something I noted in the first comic, that Mandy's motivation/plan worked better in the original story because her progression hinged on the years Cindy and Betsy deposited in the machine. It still works in the comic, but the original story was tighter in that respect.

Again, I'm not complaining DT. You still put out the best stuff and I just want to see the high quality continue.

[shrinkdude412]

Dreamtales,

Another awesome comic from you. The logic of the comic doesn't really bother me, but I have to say that I feel like you totally missed out on an awesome AR opportunity.

*spoiler*
When Suzy went to make Mandy apologize to the woman in the purple bikini, I totally thought that she was also going to regress her for not believing her. Then, when she went back to get the ray, I DEFINITELY thought it was coming. Alas, at the end I was a bit disappointed to see no further regression.

But I digress. It was still an amazing comic. Keep up the good work!