Heather's Bad Day

Okay, I'm not so sure I should be posting this since there are much better BE comics such as BE Avenger but I'm going against my better judgment and going to post it anyway.

This is meant to be a comedy kind of BE comic and it will be longer then just 3 pages. After the main BE my character Heather will still slowly grow but they will grow faster as time continues. Also, I could use suggestion to make it funny or funnier.

Also note that I'm still a new artist so please don't be mean and if possible feedback. Yes, I don't know how to draw hand yet but I am getting better ...

[grtcaligal]

Not a bad start...

[SoylentOrange]

If people didn't post stuff just because other people were better at it, there'd be like six people that posted art on here ever. Sure, it's not great, but it won't ever be great unless you draw and practice, and if posting stuff to get comments is a good motivator for you to draw and practice more, then more power to you, man.

Originally Posted by SoylentOrange

If people didn't post stuff just because other people were better at it, there'd be like six people that posted art on here ever. Sure, it's not great, but it won't ever be great unless you draw and practice, and if posting stuff to get comments is a good motivator for you to draw and practice more, then more power to you, man.

I would LOVE comments, more importantly feedback cause DA isn't very good for feedback. I always get "lol thats funny" or "BOOBS!".

Poor bunny girl...






*cracks his bullwhip*
Now do those requests you took from people!

Originally Posted by shadow

*cracks his bullwhip*
Now do those requests you took from people!

>< Kay

[Vengeance1701]

Your art is coming along but two things.

1) What's with the bunny ears?

and

2) I really hope I don't sound mean in asking this but: is English your first language? Your post indicates a decent amount of fluency but the comic loses something in the grammar. It sounds a little stilted, like you took out joining words.

Originally Posted by Vengeance1701

Your art is coming along but two things.

1) What's with the bunny ears?

and

2) I really hope I don't sound mean in asking this but: is English your first language? Your post indicates a decent amount of fluency but the comic loses something in the grammar. It sounds a little stilted, like you took out joining words.

1.) Bunny Girl

2.)English is my main language but thats what happens when someone fails English through out middle and high school. I can't write worth shit to be honest.

::EDIT::
I saw my first typo. In the first page 4th panel I wrote "The B.E. Ray Is Should Double The Size Of My Boobs". I was original going to say "The B.E. Ray Is Going To Double The Size Of My Boobs" so you see how bad it was going to be.
::EDIT2:: I fixed that typo ^^;

[emil91]

Funny story, I believe you will improve your art with time.

[AhziDahaka]

Something that should definitely improve your anatomy in short order would be to start by drawing a "skeleton" of basic shapes, and then "flesh" them out from there.

For instance, if you look at the palm of your hand, you'll notice it's basically a pentagon with fingers sticking out of it.


As for the comic itself, it really helps to have some negative/empty space between the panels. It takes some effort (and maybe a ruler) to make the frames look halfway decent, but it's well worth it.


Lastly, I like the comic thus far. I'm looking forward to its continuation.

I feel bad for the bunny girl.

Not because of the BE. The fire. Love the BE.

[Prophet Tenebrae]

Looks like she'll have to start stripping to rebuild her house...