Short story BE

[tetsumi]

I wrote a little story last night that I thought was appropriate for this section of the forum and thought I'd go ahead and put it up. I've been writing some short stories on the TF board for a little while now, but this is my first ever BE story. It's not long, but it was fun to write. It just deals with a normal girl drinking a midnight glass of milk that may or may not have contributed to the results. There is lactation as well, just to let people know.

Any feedback anyone wants to contribute is very much appreciated, good or bad. Please, let me know what you all think! Enjoy!

[humble.fool]

No title?

[tetsumi]

Ah, well, I suppose I should put one. All of my little stories so far have just been very plainly titled, either X Transformation, or X Tf, so this one was just "Breast Expansion" on my DA.

Hm, title huh? How about "Warm Milk"?

[Belgevain]

Very well written, I really enjoyed it! I hope you're planning on writing more BE

[tetsumi]

Thanks! I hadn't really decided whether to write more BE-only or not. I was kinda waiting to see what kind of response I got. Seems positive so far, so I'll probably have another one up when I get the chance! Might be awhile, but I'll get to it eventually. Thanks for the feedback, also, it's much appreciated.

And I'll try to put a title on them from now on, too.

[Mr GorpThorp]

Very well written, friend. My favorite type of BE story, slow, enjoyable growth to realistic proportions. Have you uploaded it to overflowingbra.com yet?

[tetsumi]

Actually, no, I hadn't really thought much about putting it up on overflowingbra, though that's one of my favorite resources for this type of material. It's just so hard to find what I'm looking for with their search engine! You never really know what you're going to get when until you download something. Think I should put it up? It's just so short!

[blackjack021]

It's short, but it's very good! The only thing I'd like to see is you saying the final size she ends up at the end, but it's also nice if it's left up to the reader's imagination. I'd definitely upload it to OFB, you have a real winner here.

[PrBlahBlahtson]

This is definitely a good story. No reason given for the growth, and she just seems to accept it afterward, but who cares? It's good enough that those facts don't matter.

From a more critique view, you avoided the things that usually make a story annoying. You used a gauge of size beyond "cup size" (filling her hands) and kept things building fairly well. I can't think of anything bad to say about it that isn't just a personal opinion.

[tetsumi]

Thanks everyone! It's always great to hear feedback, of both kinds. Critiques will help me improve, and compliments will keep me fueled for more! I'll be writing more as I have the time and opportunity, I promise, though it might take me a few weeks, as I just started back to school and started a brand-new, full-time job. Nevertheless, porn is motivating.

Thanks for your viewpoints there, Prof. I think I remember you saying in another thread somewhere that you weren't much of a fan of the "fluid" thing, and I'm sorry, but I kinda like it myself. But, if it didn't ruin the story for you, then wonderful!

This was kind of a quick story to test the waters here on this board. I'll try to flesh out the next one a bit better and possibly explore some other options or directions. Who knows, I might even give a hint at a reason for the change! Haha, we'll see.

Thanks again for your support, and if everyone can just hang tight for a little, I'll have another one up whenever I find the time!

[tetsumi]

Ok everyone, here's another one. Sorry it took so long to get one going, but here it is! I went with a librarian this time, mostly because I thought the clothing was interesting. I also kinda like the glasses. Every once in awhile I can go for a chick in glasses.

I struggled for a long time about a trigger, but I couldn't really come up with anything solid. If it's a little hokey, I apologize, and hopefully it doesn't bother you. I also skipped the lactation this time, in an effort to change things up a bit.

Let me know what you guys think! Comments are always appreciated!

Enjoy!

[Lingster]

Nice work!