Vampire Sailormoon

Locofuria · 12-14-2008

my 2? Comission Work

Name: Vampires of the Night
Pages: 8
Designed and Painted by Locofuria
Original Idea by Anthony

http://femaletransformation.mforos.c...-of-the-night/

Dasautosven · 12-14-2008

Very nice. I like your work!

CK01 · 12-15-2008

Nice

Hibiki · 12-15-2008

Cute :P

Locofuria · 12-15-2008

thanks for your comments about my work

ivan11422 · 12-15-2008

I like it!

rb9 · 12-15-2008

awesome! you should totally put this in the evil conversion thread...

Drake G. Reaper · 12-15-2008

I like it you should make it affect the other girls.

TFCommando · 12-16-2008

Quote:

Originally Posted by Locofuria

my 2? Comission Work

Name: Vampires of the Night
Pages: 8
Drawing and Painting by Locofuria
Original Idea by Anthony

http://femaletransformation.mforos.c...-of-the-night/

The art is very nice, I particularly like the eyes and ears. The transition between page 3 and 4 is a bit abrupt. A narration box or thought balloon might have helped.

You should have someone proofread the dialogue... it is very awkward-sounding, enough that it distracts from the visuals.

Locofuria · 12-17-2008

Quote:

Originally Posted by TFCommando

The art is very nice, I particularly like the eyes and ears. The transition between page 3 and 4 is a bit abrupt. A narration box or thought balloon might have helped.

You should have someone proofread the dialogue... it is very awkward-sounding, enough that it distracts from the visuals.

you have the reason

I believe the talks should have been more prepared, but well, that will be for the next

Von Krieger · 12-17-2008

Quite nice, and as mention the dialog is a bit awkward. I'd be willing to proof any dialog you have in future comics.

Locofuria · 12-17-2008

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Originally Posted by Von Krieger

Quite nice, and as mention the dialog is a bit awkward. I'd be willing to proof any dialog you have in future comics.

ok man for my future comics call you to support me with the dialogs

12-14-2008	#1
Locofuria Process Master Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Peru Posts: 778	Vampire Sailormoon my 2? Comission Work Name: Vampires of the Night Pages: 8 Designed and Painted by Locofuria Original Idea by Anthony http://femaletransformation.mforos.c...-of-the-night/ Last edited by Locofuria; 02-14-2009 at 11:14 AM.

12-14-2008	#2
Dasautosven Lurker Join Date: Jan 2007 Posts: 21	Re: Vampire Sailormoon Very nice. I like your work!

12-15-2008	#3
CK01 Process Disciple Join Date: May 2005 Location: Australia Posts: 1,165	Re: Vampire Sailormoon Nice __________________ http://cyckath.deviantart.com/ Cosplay Deviants = Sexy Buy Spinnerette Volume 1 Today!

12-15-2008	#4
Hibiki Process Fan Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 42	Re: Vampire Sailormoon Cute :P

12-15-2008	#5
Locofuria Process Master Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Peru Posts: 778	Re: Vampire Sailormoon thanks for your comments about my work

12-15-2008	#6
ivan11422 Process Disciple Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 1,144	Re: Vampire Sailormoon I like it!

12-15-2008	#7
rb9 Process Master Join Date: Jan 2008 Posts: 589	Re: Vampire Sailormoon awesome! you should totally put this in the evil conversion thread...

12-15-2008	#8
Drake G. Reaper Black_Dragon Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 104	Re: Vampire Sailormoon I like it you should make it affect the other girls.

12-17-2008	#11
Von Krieger Author of Erotica Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Rural Minnesota Posts: 50	Re: Vampire Sailormoon Quite nice, and as mention the dialog is a bit awkward. I'd be willing to proof any dialog you have in future comics.