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shrinking girl
Join Date: Aug 2007
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A start of a webcomic that has breast expansion in it : D <3
hi i wanted to show my new web comic here, it has fun breast expansion in it along with other themes, I just started on it recently so there's a little bit to it just a start, it's like a multi path rpg transformation web comic game, I want to develop it more so I thought I would share it and get people's opinions
it's about a few magical girls and their powers to have fun with others, I still need to do alot to it, I want to add battle parts too so it will be fun : D  http://www.gamerdater.com/DivineMagickEmpire
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The Magical Mammary Man
Join Date: Jul 2006
Location: In my chair. ._.
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Re: A start of a webcomic that has breast expansion in it : D <3
Seems inspired a bit by mspaintadventures.com. You should probably work a bit more on your writing, or get an editor though. My one little nitpick.
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Screwy Neko
Join Date: May 2005
Location: In the deep recessives of my manga mind
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Re: A start of a webcomic that has breast expansion in it : D <3
I think you should make your drawings more complete than rough sketches. Hard to see what details the character have like the tall one, what is that stuff on her head.
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07-19-2011
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Seeker of the bounce
Join Date: Aug 2005
Location: Los Angeles
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Re: A start of a webcomic that has breast expansion in it : D <3
I like it so far.
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07-20-2011
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Process Disciple
Join Date: May 2005
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Re: A start of a webcomic that has breast expansion in it : D <3
I'll second Kojiro's comments.
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07-20-2011
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A Slice of Toast.
Join Date: Jan 2006
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Re: A start of a webcomic that has breast expansion in it : D <3
Thirded, despite the fact that it's still 150% better than I can draw. Keep it up.
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07-20-2011
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Process Disciple
Join Date: May 2005
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Re: A start of a webcomic that has breast expansion in it : D <3
There's always the tug-of-war between speed and quality, it's just this one's tilted too far towards speed. It doesn't have to go all the way to the other direction, but some of the linework is so light and indistinct you can't even tell what's going on...
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07-30-2011
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shrinking girl
Join Date: Aug 2007
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Re: A start of a webcomic that has breast expansion in it : D <3
Thanks for your comments so far, it is something in the works, the line work is rather sketchy and fine, I need to make that look better some pages I think i am going to leave the sketchy look in but I would like more pages to be more refined, a mix some done fully in color and others more pencil.
I do like mspa, it would be nice to have an editor, I've been going though it more making the story easier and more fun to read. I need to add more to it, I'm going to have an update more, I need to get more of the story out for it so people can get used to the world : D
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