Cute Little Comic

[Snowglare]

Originally Posted by CattyN

i'll comment here cuz i can't on DA"

When are people gonna learn to write comics COHERENTLY? I have NO idea what's going on in this story, even WITH the help of the description. I also hate the stupid "nya" that's put on EVERYTHING related to ANIME and CATGIRLS. It's retarded and annoying and pulls me out of the moment. It looks like the artist drew the comic in a clockwise fashion, which doesn't make sense. The drawing is alright, but with all the messed up comic layout, just makes me want to smack em over the head and make them redo it as punishment.

I agree. A good storyteller makes a reasonable attempt at clear storytelling. Arrows could be included to indicate the flow of panels since they so markedly differ from a conventional layout, Western or Eastern.

I think what appears to be "n-nya" is cute. "Gasp-nya" could be considered a satirical joke - included because it's so absurd that no one would seriously write that - but with the artist's poor grasp of English, I'm not so sure.

Her face in the second panel (going down from the top left) is nice, and I like the last panel, where she's "floating." The rest of it's a mess, particularly the "splash" shot in the middle, but to be fair it doesn't look like it's meant to be anywhere near finished. So, um, it's a one page throwaway gag that falls flat due to a failure to communicate.