The Labyrinth Ch. 01 [TF / TG / Cow Woman]

frice2000 · 03-07-2015

A bit too much focus on bodily fluids for me to really like the piece. And I think I'd have enjoyed a bit more time being given to the psychological changes but overall this was a nice transformation piece. You crammed in a lot of detail and it really flowed quite well. I think I'd have preferred if you didn't make the victim actually Theseus and had made it someone else, but I don't mind overly that. I do think the newly created minotaur should have felt a bit more animalistic however. Was too controlled for the mythological representations. Shouldn't have had the transforming Theseus feel lust for the guards escorting him to the cell. Should have been a bit more bloodlust and irrational disgust.

Overall a throughly enjoyable story with a few quirks I didn't care for. Certainly deserves a better response from this community.

03-07-2015	#3
frice2000 "My way of thanking you" Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 401	Re: The Labyrinth Ch. 01 [TF / TG / Cow Woman] A bit too much focus on bodily fluids for me to really like the piece. And I think I'd have enjoyed a bit more time being given to the psychological changes but overall this was a nice transformation piece. You crammed in a lot of detail and it really flowed quite well. I think I'd have preferred if you didn't make the victim actually Theseus and had made it someone else, but I don't mind overly that. I do think the newly created minotaur should have felt a bit more animalistic however. Was too controlled for the mythological representations. Shouldn't have had the transforming Theseus feel lust for the guards escorting him to the cell. Should have been a bit more bloodlust and irrational disgust. Overall a throughly enjoyable story with a few quirks I didn't care for. Certainly deserves a better response from this community.