Need criticism

scarletwhite · 08-05-2015

Hi, I have written with Arania 12 wonderful fairytales, she's a coathor and 100% illustrator and all of the stories I have worked with her are on her site under scarletwhite's fairy tales.

Anyway, I have 6 other stories I want to commision with her in written format, but I'm deciding which one is the best beforehand. I posted the first, Lucky, on fur affinity

https://www.furaffinity.net/view/17314547/

I need criticism

Note: Since the transformation itself is going to be graphical it is not very detailed in the narration, but it's going to be detailed in the comic

08-05-2015	#1
scarletwhite Lurker Join Date: Nov 2007 Posts: 13	Need criticism Hi, I have written with Arania 12 wonderful fairytales, she's a coathor and 100% illustrator and all of the stories I have worked with her are on her site under scarletwhite's fairy tales. Anyway, I have 6 other stories I want to commision with her in written format, but I'm deciding which one is the best beforehand. I posted the first, Lucky, on fur affinity https://www.furaffinity.net/view/17314547/ I need criticism Note: Since the transformation itself is going to be graphical it is not very detailed in the narration, but it's going to be detailed in the comic