Style Mistakes that Weaken TF stories

[TF-Viewer]

Originally Posted by ~Circe~

Second person is tricky though. It's just first person addressing the reader. I usually use it in first person past-tense... telling the story to the reader. Care to elaborate on why that is a bad thing? I would find it enormously helpful and illuminating.

"Your hand stretches into a paw. Your bones shift into a new shape."

That's 2nd person TF, the narrator is telling the reader that they are transforming. I've never liked it, and when I see the story starting out like that I Just immediately close the page and find something else to read. Not everyone with a TF fetish wants to be the subject of the TF themselves.