New artist, looking for critique - Page 2

MageOmega · 08-07-2007

Im not dead!

Well shortly after my last post my computer decided to esplode...but in the meantime i havent been idle drawing...heres a new batch from what i have been up to..i know its rough, not many options on cleaning it up until I get my main comp back up.

Ive been working on the female form and its represented in tf art and other sources. I have been looking alot at Nagas work recently, as you can tell from some of my sketches.

Again, I would highly appreciate any comments and critiques given!

Banana_of_Doom · 08-07-2007

Okay, I'll give ya some more.

The first one- (Wolf, Dog? I can't tell) Another attempt at perspective I suppose? The angles aren't workin out there. Her back half isn't 'connected' to her front half properly, and those feet aren't doin it for me. Though I do like her expression.

Number 2, the frog- I like the pose here. No true glaring problems, either. The bottom leg... I dunno... I'm getting the impression that it's more or less in front of her torso.

Now for the moo moo... I'll say right off her neck is too long, and too thin. Bovines have a thick neck. The udders aren't done properly either. The udders would be hanging down between the legs, though still coming off the front. It just looks like it's tacked on to her. And also, due to the udders, her waist has the appearance of being too long, though the far leg tells me it's not.

The udders don't like like they're hanging down from one point, it looks like they're stuck on her stomach as well as her legs.

I won't critique the plants, not my thing. =P

Sorry if I was a bit forward, the harshness of my own critics probably rubbed off on me.

transfnight · 08-07-2007

I really like the frog (I like the pose). Nice work, don't give up ^_^

Dontino · 08-08-2007

Dog/Wolf - Great work.

Frog - Awesome

Cow - Udder needs some work... and the whole thing is just.. meh.

Mushroom - Frankly, not very good.

Tree - See mushroom.

It looks like you posted in order of drawing them (older = lower) so keep it up and you'll soon be one of the greats.
If you didn't do it in that order, keep it up anyways, but try to make the plant ones... better.

shiesse2003 · 08-08-2007

that artwork is nice

MageOmega · 08-08-2007

Thanks again for the input...its helping immensely on which way I should be going. And the harshness just points out the importance of what priorities should be addressed first. Plus I'm italian, I'm quite thick-headed..it takes alot to get through and offend me =P

As for the Mushroom and the tree.. I guess plant TFs arent my thing... I'll try to stay away from them for now. Still trying perspective and failing apparently..so back to the books! thanks for the frog and cow praise, and I will look at udders more thouroughly!

Off to sketch away some more! I'll have some new works as soon as I find a way to upload some more...stupid Comcast -_-

*edit* Trying something other than uploading...lets see how it works
NEW IMAGES

The frog one has a backstory, zomg!

Michelle was always a party girl, doing anything to impress her friends. She thought she was the life of any gathering. But when she blew up a frog with some fireworks, the swamp spirits didnt find her nature very impressive.. Now it will be her responsibility to BRING life back to the swamp, a hundred-fold of what she took....

This one its just a random catgirl experiment sticking it to the man...did this while on hold with comcast *shrug*

I know the hand is messed up, lets not speak of it lest the anatomy demons come out and kill us all!

MageOmega · 08-10-2007

Trying my hand at coloring/shading...

Lyinginbedmon · 08-10-2007

I never thought "Poorly drawn evil bush" could sound more relevant...

08-10-2007

The frog girl is lovely. You should put her (and the Cargirl too) on your DA account: http://mageomega.deviantart.com/

MageOmega · 08-10-2007

O_O

Holy crap, I forgot I even had that account >_>

Yeah, I guess I'll spare you all with my mediocore spam and just add my works there. Thanks for reminding me, inchide

MageOmega · 08-12-2007

Just an Update for you all!

Just posted my first sequence onf my DA Account!

Some Goth Girls, some Clothing TFs, a little brainwashing, a posessed demonic shirt, and some Cat TFs!

Go take a look and post some comments!

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/62156986/

08-13-2007

Waiting for the end.

08-08-2007	#18
MageOmega Fluffy is scared... Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Coloradodo Posts: 185	Thanks again for the input...its helping immensely on which way I should be going. And the harshness just points out the importance of what priorities should be addressed first. Plus I'm italian, I'm quite thick-headed..it takes alot to get through and offend me =P As for the Mushroom and the tree.. I guess plant TFs arent my thing... I'll try to stay away from them for now. Still trying perspective and failing apparently..so back to the books! thanks for the frog and cow praise, and I will look at udders more thouroughly! Off to sketch away some more! I'll have some new works as soon as I find a way to upload some more...stupid Comcast -_- edit Trying something other than uploading...lets see how it works NEW IMAGES The frog one has a backstory, zomg! Michelle was always a party girl, doing anything to impress her friends. She thought she was the life of any gathering. But when she blew up a frog with some fireworks, the swamp spirits didnt find her nature very impressive.. Now it will be her responsibility to BRING life back to the swamp, a hundred-fold of what she took.... This one its just a random catgirl experiment sticking it to the man...did this while on hold with comcast shrug I know the hand is messed up, lets not speak of it lest the anatomy demons come out and kill us all! Last edited by MageOmega; 08-09-2007 at 03:10 PM.

08-12-2007	#23
MageOmega Fluffy is scared... Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Coloradodo Posts: 185	Just an Update for you all! Just posted my first sequence onf my DA Account! Some Goth Girls, some Clothing TFs, a little brainwashing, a posessed demonic shirt, and some Cat TFs! Go take a look and post some comments! http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/62156986/ __________________ Visit my DA page and give critique! http://mageomega.deviantart.com/

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08-07-2007	#14
Banana_of_Doom What? Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: MI, USA Posts: 152	Okay, I'll give ya some more. The first one- (Wolf, Dog? I can't tell) Another attempt at perspective I suppose? The angles aren't workin out there. Her back half isn't 'connected' to her front half properly, and those feet aren't doin it for me. Though I do like her expression. Number 2, the frog- I like the pose here. No true glaring problems, either. The bottom leg... I dunno... I'm getting the impression that it's more or less in front of her torso. Now for the moo moo... I'll say right off her neck is too long, and too thin. Bovines have a thick neck. The udders aren't done properly either. The udders would be hanging down between the legs, though still coming off the front. It just looks like it's tacked on to her. And also, due to the udders, her waist has the appearance of being too long, though the far leg tells me it's not. The udders don't like like they're hanging down from one point, it looks like they're stuck on her stomach as well as her legs. I won't critique the plants, not my thing. =P Sorry if I was a bit forward, the harshness of my own critics probably rubbed off on me.

08-07-2007	#15
transfnight Frequent Poster Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 238	I really like the frog (I like the pose). Nice work, don't give up ^_^

08-08-2007	#16
Dontino Bored of being an asshole Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Canada Posts: 693	Dog/Wolf - Great work. Frog - Awesome Cow - Udder needs some work... and the whole thing is just.. meh. Mushroom - Frankly, not very good. Tree - See mushroom. It looks like you posted in order of drawing them (older = lower) so keep it up and you'll soon be one of the greats. If you didn't do it in that order, keep it up anyways, but try to make the plant ones... better.

08-08-2007	#17
shiesse2003 Leecher Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Mexico Posts: 7	that artwork is nice

08-10-2007	#19
MageOmega Fluffy is scared... Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Coloradodo Posts: 185	Trying my hand at coloring/shading...

08-10-2007	#20
Lyinginbedmon Frequent Poster Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 115	I never thought "Poorly drawn evil bush" could sound more relevant...

08-10-2007	#21
inchide Guest Posts: n/a	The frog girl is lovely. You should put her (and the Cargirl too) on your DA account: http://mageomega.deviantart.com/