Naruto Doujin (Offsite)

[otaku88]

Not too shabby; can't wait to see how it progresses!

[Styerion]

Hmm... I don't like it.

The artwork is good. It looks like a lot of time was dedicated to the linework. It's the writing that's killing me. Fourth wall breaking in a reality that doesn't constantly see it. Plot rushing. Bad event staging. Akward dialogue, not to mention significant deviations from established character.

It doesn't feel right to me. Good find for those who feel different about it than I do.

I also don't like the author's attitude much. Taking such a hostile, pre-emptive tone towards viewers doesn't exactly convince me to stick with it. I don't agree with the author's intent for conceiving this series, but that alone is hardly a reason for me to back away. You guys know me by now; when it comes to TF, I dislike hostility. I find more error in the composition, though, than the originating idea.

[unkown111]

looks good.