Story: The Worst That Could Happen

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Originally Posted by pseudoclever

Comments, in the form of your thoughts, praise, or criticisms, are as always appreciated - really, it's what makes writing these worth-while. But if you don't mind, there are a few things I'd like to know:

How would you rate the process description in this story? Too much detail, too little? Too long/short?

Same question, regarding the 'adult content.'

How about the writing style? Too flowery or complex? Chapters too short/long?

Until next time~!

It was slow going at first. Like I said before, not "bad" slow, but definitely slow. Still, you milked every inch of her height for all that it was worth.

And then from chapter 7 on it began to snowball. It was very kinetic. She's moving, he's moving, everyone's doing something. And despite that it flowed very well and was never difficult to follow.

Personally, I don't like stories posted in installments, but that's because I'm impatient and want to read the next part now now now. But considering the length of this one (11,000+ words) I'm willing to make an exception. Also, each chapter was an actual chapter, as opposed to some of the stuff I've seen where each "chapter" is merely a couple of paragraphs.

I liked the adult content the way it was. I think it gets distracting when you get too explicit in descriptions.