Why does that spell even exist? (BE story)

[DevonCory]

Originally Posted by Chaos Echo

(...) to the point where it's not even the focus of this chapter.

Honestly, I think you could have done without completely. With a chapter like this, you show that you're no longer writting a BE story. You're writting a story, with BE in it. It might be an important aspect of it, but it's not the focal point of it anymore. The characters, their relationship with one another and the way they interact with the world is the main focus of this story now, IMHO.

Don't get me wrong, I still love BE, I still would like to see plenty of it, and I still hope for one the character to go wow-size one of those days. But I think that your characters are now developed enough that we actually want to know more about them, their background and their story, and not just about the color of their panties.

So yeah, I like this quite a bit.

Oh and, I know that it's been established that Tuica does not love Carline 'that way'. Kinda. But I'm still hoping that they eventually get together 'that way'. Yeah, I'm a softy. Don't tell anyone.

[Chaos Echo]

Originally Posted by DevonCory

Honestly, I think you could have done without completely. With a chapter like this, you show that you're no longer writting a BE story. You're writting a story, with BE in it. It might be an important aspect of it, but it's not the focal point of it anymore. The characters, their relationship with one another and the way they interact with the world is the main focus of this story now, IMHO.

Don't get me wrong, I still love BE, I still would like to see plenty of it, and I still hope for one the character to go wow-size one of those days. But I think that your characters are now developed enough that we actually want to know more about them, their background and their story, and not just about the color of their panties.

So yeah, I like this quite a bit.

Oh and, I know that it's been established that Tuica does not love Carline 'that way'. Kinda. But I'm still hoping that they eventually get together 'that way'. Yeah, I'm a softy. Don't tell anyone.

The first paragraph... is that a good thing or a bad thing? I can't really tell... and I'm not sure what can fly as far as chapters and density of BE content. Like, I still plan on having it every chapter, but it may not be the focus of the chapter as often, like it used to be.


And a side tangent, I'd like to do a TG short within this same story (involving different characters), but is it worth it to make a new topic for it, or should I just... not? I have no plans on doing any more for that one, but then I also had no plans for more chapters of this...

[PyroWildcat]

Originally Posted by Chaos Echo

The first paragraph... is that a good thing or a bad thing?

Very much a good thing. It's easy to get people's attention with big boobs in these circles; it's less easy to make people care more about the story surrounding the girls behind those boobs than the boobs themselves. Especially considering your BE scenes are also quite good, it's a testament to your ability to put together a world for your story and craft characters to populate it.

I don't think it's really necessary to force a really dense level of BE in your stories, and I doubt you absolutely have to have a BE scene in each chapter if you're having a tough time making one fit; as long as it shows up with reasonable regularity, you should be just fine. And for the possible TG, I've seen the same content pop up under both TG and BE at the same time, so I imagine you'll be safe doing either, or even doing both. Some people don't visit one, and some don't visit the other, so putting it in both is ideal for making sure that everyone who would enjoy it has the opportunity to do so.

[DevonCory]

Originally Posted by Chaos Echo

The first paragraph... is that a good thing or a bad thing?

Pretty much what PyroWildcat said. Your last chapter was good enough that it didn't need a BE scene in it. It almost felt forced or out of place. And that's not a bad thing in itself, for it speaks volumes about the quality of your story so far.

Mind you, I still want to see BE in it. I think that you've only scratched at what you can do as far as that aspect of the story is concerned. I think that you can go further in how you can approach it, how you can describe it and how you can make the characters relate to it. But what it means is that, if you want to write something to move the story forward which do not involve or require BE, you can do so.