Transformation story

[Nymic]

Hey, wrote a short scene/story for a friend that I thought I'd share. If anyone is interested.

Contains transformation obviously. Also nudity and sex.. just so you know! Don't want to offend anyone.

I don't want to ruin any of it so you will have to give it a try if you want to know more. Let me know what you think!

-Nymic

[Obsidian Reaver]

Originally Posted by Nymic

Hey, wrote a short scene/story for a friend that I thought I'd share. If anyone is interested.

Contains transformation obviously. Also nudity and sex.. just so you know! Don't want to offend anyone.

I don't want to ruin any of it so you will have to give it a try if you want to know more. Let me know what you think!

-Nymic

This is a good story, though it needs just a bit of work. At times, I was a little confused as to what was going on.

And a little more dialogue would also do wonders in relaying information; thoughts, feelings, ect.

Otherwise this story is a decent one, friend.

[Nymic]

Thanks! Sorry for any confusion. I tend to have to much of the story in my head and don't explain it as well as I think I am.

[Obsidian Reaver]

Originally Posted by Nymic

Thanks! Sorry for any confusion. I tend to have to much of the story in my head and don't explain it as well as I think I am.

No no, you did fine.

Keep up the good work.

[hexen]

Your writing is very good, just felt like there was too much information released at very rapid pace so the story barely had pace. The transformation was nice as well, I'm not a fan of sudden transformations but the "build up til the moment" was very good, I just felt that the transformation itself lacked a bit of description, it felt like in one seccound the lady is shaking on the floor and then she is a male werewolf(?) Again, the choice of detail on a TF is all left to the author so never mind me on that, but I just feel like the narrative lacks an element that grabs me. But misregard my words, I hardly know anything about the English language or writing, so keep up the pace and good work!

[Nymic]

You sound competent in English to me. I agree totally. The change itself was chosen by the girl I was writing for and she, while liking werewolves isn't into the process as much. Most my work is far more detailed in that regard. I plan on posting many more from time to time. Hopefully you will like others better.

[no-name]

Good story. I don't want to repeat what has already been said on this thread, but I really enjoyed reading it. Didn't expect a reversion, but it was a nice touch. I hope we can go back to Shea in the near future.

Originally Posted by Nymic

Most my work is far more detailed in that regard. I plan on posting many more from time to time. Hopefully you will like others better.

There's more? Oh, I can hardly wait!

[hexen]

Originally Posted by no-name

There's more? Oh, I can hardly wait!

Idem. Would love to read more.