Lucky Mallet - Shrink Fan Comics

[qzar9999]

Originally Posted by Raso719

Hey I had desire just not time.... which put the kibosh on effort. Like, I held onto the temple for months staring at it in my documents folder wishing I could put time into it.
:/

Fair enough. Either way, the important point was that I asked for your permission (thanks again!) and that I did the actual writing of the adaptation, which is why I was credited as the writer rather than you. It wasn't meant as a knock against you or anything, just answering the question.

[Tiedefender]

Still don't know how to feel about this comic.

On one hand, both the art and shrinking are nicely done. On the other the ending action is confusing. It is hard to tell what is happening to who for me. The strongest parts of the story are the beginning, history of the mallet and transition to the diner.

[Captain Ash]

The story begins with a very atmospheric introduction.
An ancient shrine. Night. Somewhere in Japan.
This same very shrine is assaulted by a mysteriously half-naked woman. The female guardians, who seem to have expected the intruder, are no match for her, as they immediately shrink into their clothes.
Having so many women not only be shrunken but also in a sexy and creative way in the first few pages of an introduction is record-breaking!
A very successful introduction of the villain and of the story. Those magical girls / shrine maiden reminds of animes like “Devil Hunter Yohko”.

To the female Oni’s dismay (an Oni is in Japanese mythology an evil spirit or demon), the weapon she seeks is already passed to another person.
However, this scene leaves the reader with some open questions.
Why couldn’t the shrine maidens protect this valuable artifact as they seem to be successful in the past?
Why does it have to be Momo?
Is she related to anyone of these shrine maidens?
All those questions vanish, however, if you look at the beautiful artwork of Hmage, the same artist who drew for “The Invisible Girl”. As known from the artist, the backgrounds and little details are awe-inspiring.
The characters like Momo and Karen are well drawn and each one has a unique personality and even Karen feels more like a side-kick but a significance to the story and the main character.

Although this comic has a lot of beautiful shrinking and action scenes, it also has some flaws like the ending.
Sure a complex story cannot be pressed into 15 pages, but there is a difference to end a story to a satisfying point and to create a cliffhanger, as the purpose of a cliffhanger is to create excitement and anticipation for the next issue instead of frustration.
Building a cliffhanger, where the heroes are still in the middle of a fight against a mere minion, is a mistake.

If this fight were against Megiji herself, it would would be justified.
Here the reader is missing the last two pages, how our heroine would defeat Megiji’s minion.
There is nothing wrong to finish one chapter and continue with the story in the next issue.

Summary:
Despite some minor details and the cliffhanger in the ending, I’ve enjoyed reading this comic.
I adored Karen’s shrunken part, which is my favorite part in this story.
I hope that the next issue will reveal some of the unanswered questions of this first issue.

[theangelofdeath1986]

Slightly off topic but who can I speak to about being charged but my account shows as needs to subscribe again? Tried the contact us a couple times but never get a reply

[J Yubari]

Originally Posted by theangelofdeath1986

Slightly off topic but who can I speak to about being charged but my account shows as needs to subscribe again? Tried the contact us a couple times but never get a reply

Yes, I'm able to help you with this. Firstly, did you try to get in touch with us using the contact form (located here: https://www.shrinkfan.com/contact) ? I check the support email regularly and didn't see a message from you...

Please send an email with your username/details to support@interwebcomics.com we'll get it sorted out.

[theangelofdeath1986]

Originally Posted by J Yubari

Yes, I'm able to help you with this. Firstly, did you try to get in touch with us using the contact form (located here: https://www.shrinkfan.com/contact) ? I check the support email regularly and didn't see a message from you...

Please send an email with your username/details to support@interwebcomics.com we'll get it sorted out.

Did the first option straight away. Just sent an email now. Thank you in advance

[J Yubari]

Originally Posted by theangelofdeath1986

Did the first option straight away. Just sent an email now. Thank you in advance

Responded! You should be good to go now.