Curvaceous Cardinal Vices

[SoylentOrange]

Infernal Revenue Service. When Hell said, "how could we make things worse for everyone," and then looked to the American government for ideas. Just saying, I'm enjoying the story, Soylent.

[cyero]

Well now that I actually know this update exists -

Very great! Glad to see you back in the writing game, Soy. The Egyptian's punishment was incredibly devised, I'd suggest reusing it in something if you ever write "professionally". Gluttony continues to be adorable!

[Tindalos60]

Okay I just gave it a read. I do like the concept of Greed's office. Lots of the old punishments that fit the crime kinda stuff.

I did have one question though, is 'where the money's made' something she says just out of habit? Because you have her say that line twice very close together near the start of the chapter.

[SoylentOrange]

Greed frames most of her expressions in relation to money, just as Gluttony frames her speech in terms of food, Wrath in terms of war and fighting, etc. It's just a reflection of who they are and their mindsets.

And what'd you like about the Egyptian, Cyero? Like, specifically, what was it that made that scene work for you?

[cyero]

Originally Posted by SoylentOrange

what was it that made that scene work for you?

It's just brilliantly, well, hellish. Completely fitting with the actual purpose of Hell while still having that delicious demonic spark to it.

[GreatDragon AD]

SoylentOrange, I wanted say that I have following your series here for quite sometime originally through DA from Hmmm!'s posts and I've been enjoying every single chapter but once I found you originally post your stories here with the latest chapters, I was stoke. So far, the series really have its great moments but the one I enjoyed the most so far of how Sid stood up against Pride while standing for Envy. Anyway, keep up the great work.

[AngelusX]

This is great, very interesting character design, a lot of thought went into this and it shows in the details can't wait to see the finished products.

[hmmm!]

I haven't posted in my own thread in over a year. Here, for those who haven't seen these on my deviantart account, I re-drew Lust, Wrath and Sloth a little bit ago.

[SoylentOrange]

Anyone still interested in this? Ready for more hell?

[vincent_richter]

Originally Posted by SoylentOrange

Anyone still interested in this? Ready for more hell?

Yes to this.

[Lessien]

I didn't realise like the Juggalo's story Sid's tale too had more releases here. I'll apologise in advance for cramming my thoughts on the last few chapters into a single post.

Okay from Pride's attempt at corrupting Sid the tale was still following the familiar plot and while the occassional mention of Sid getting increasingly vexed by the repeat encounters and his paranoia raising to new levels the chapter proceeded as expected. Though I only then realised you'd starting having the virtues sneaking in the ever so brief momentary appearance and in Justice's case I quite liked it (Mind you it took me half a minute before I realised it wasn't the Devil himself/herself incognito with how much emphasis you put on her sense of power.) But the crescendo of that chapter was most definitely Pride's defeat. There is nothing so satisfying as seeing the high brought low when it's people with Pride's type of personality.

Then Envy's chapter... Oh where to start? A lot of people seem fondest of Envy of all the vices. Whether this is because of the sense of needing to protect and comfort those weaker than us (Odd considering she's still more powerful than any mortal if Sid's attempts to move her are any indication of her abilities) Maybe people just like her because she's unassuming or easiest to relate to? Regardless I too was looking forward to this chapter and it did not disappoint.

I had a feeling from the start this would be the game changer chapter as she was the last vice to play her hand and at the end of it what would happen? So something had to happen, namely Sid snapping and demanding answers. I did not expect his sudden trip however. Even if it was only a few moments between scrolling down to the next entry the feeling of suspense and joy was enormous as I got to the next hurried onto the next chapter.

A visit to hell... I must say I doubt there is anything a mortal could ever desire less. But I was thoroughly enjoying every moment of this chapter. From the idle observations and covnersation as Envy and Sid descend through the house to the dramatic discovery of the surprise visitor. I loved Sid's little standoff with Pride. He gets some massive points to standing up to a demoness like her, which made her second defeat at his hands all the more sweet to read. He seems to have, whether noticable to himself or not, taken on a bit of a white knight role towards Envy. I don't think this chapter could have gone more ideally though.

Okay Sid now dealing with residing in the vice household? (for however short a time) Loving the concept. From the moment he awoke in Lust's bed with her (which I knew would be a given from her earlier attitude in the previous chapter) to his constant food dodging with Gluttony I enoyed how the vices interacted with him. Even Wrath's actions were interesting, though Envy seems hidden for the time being.

Then we visit Greed's office. Well I'd say I expected something a little more physically torturous but this was the other side of the coin. It seems no matter the story demons and damnation love defeating mortals and imprisoning them in riddles that if only they understood the concept would be so easily solved. I'm wondering if all the offices are so poetic and offer salvation if only they could change their ways? I can't imagine Pride's as anything but a beautiful person twisted ugly and surrounded by mirrors on all sides or similar themes or ridicule with no actual chance for redemption.

Still... More Gluttony in the next chapter it seems. While she's not my favourite of the vices she seems the most amiable of the vices and the second most relaxed in most regards barring of course Sloth. That and I am very curious what her office is like. It's a nice theme of going from the corruption in the mortal realm and then onto the punishment in hell for those who indulge in their choice vice to such a degree.

I look forward to the next chapter, keep up the great work and don't be discouraged by the lack of voiced opinions. I'm sure many people are are looking forward to each installment in the story.