Midna BE Story

Originally Posted by Blooman

I don't know, the narration/dialog feels rather... forced and awkward, like this excerpt

It just doesn't... flow right.

And the character seem to lack their personality, Midna's supposed to be a snarky little bugger, just as one example. (though Illia really didn't have much of one to recall from twilight Princess.)

I see what you mean, but parents and children have forced conversations like this in real life, you should mind.

... Did you beat Twilight Princess? By the end, she doesn't really have that personality.

I actually did my best with personalities, you know...

Anyway, today, I should be writing a new piece.

[geno13]

Originally Posted by theshoelace

I see what you mean, but parents and children have forced conversations like this in real life, you should mind.

... Did you beat Twilight Princess? By the end, she doesn't really have that personality.

I actually did my best with personalities, you know...

Anyway, today, I should be writing a new piece.

Besides, who has time to be snarky when there's an evil body manipulating curse on the loose and you have a pair of huge growing weights hanging from your chest and rear.

[Daichi Azure]

exactly my sentiments Geno...

[cyero]

Setup :'d

Nabooru piece. Sorry if you're disappointed- I hope not- it's hard to do so many storylines. Did my best.


'' The delightful weather over Hyrule was a blessing to many creatures. Many Zoras and humans lay in the sun by the beautiful Lake Hylia. The Gerudo pretended to patrol outside their fort, but in reality they were just enjoying the sun and not paying attention- and with reason, because there was peace throughout Hyrule. The Sages, though they kept a watchful eye on their Temples, were also enjoying the sun outside. One Sage, however, did not. The great Sage of Spirit Nabooru was deep inside her temple, with only the light of a torch.

She had found a very long ( not to mention very old ) scroll about ancient Gerudo queens and was reading through it, until she came to one Queen who’s name was forgotten. An image was drawing on the scroll- portraying a Gerudo with rather large breasts and broad hips. ‘ Very little is known about this Queen. Among historians it is commonly believed that she was made queen because the Gerudos had asked the Godesses for a Queen that represented feminity,’ Nabooru read out loud. She thought it was rather odd.

Nabooru looked at the picture’s face. The woman looked sad- and her face was not of extraordinary beauty. She looked in a mirror on the wall by the torch. Her face was considered beautiful by all Gerudos and all men that had the chance to see her. Her body was considered attractive by the few men that had seen her. Many years of training had made her body like this. ‘How would it be to... represent feminity?’ Nabooru wondered. She chuckled at the thought- she was quite satisfied with her figure, but the idea was interesting.

‘Don’t I already represent it then?’ she asked herself, looking at her curves in the mirror with pride. Behind her, a dark hole had appeared- but in the darkness with only a torch it was hard to see. From it, a dark smoke emerged that quickly moved on the scroll that had been put on the ground a moment ago. She noticed the movement, however slight, and jumped up drawing both her scimitars. There was nothing to be seen, wherever she looked. She was quite alarmed- she was sure she had seen movement.

She picked up the scroll. Something in it made her hand shake- some force in it- though she did not know this. She stowed it in her pocket, and ran out the room. She jumped over a few hazardous spikes with an acrobatic jump, and ran on back to the entrance of her Temple. No enemy that could be there would have been dangerous enough to defeat Nabooru, but she was not in the mood for being startled. Leaving the Spirit Temple, she felt the delightful sun on her face. She decided to go and visit her fortress.

Passing the Haunted Wasteland was not troublesome for such a skilled Gerudo, and especially not for a Sage. She ran over the sands, fending off any curse with her overpowering magic- but little did she know that she had not fended off all curses- and that she had been cursed as well. An hour of travelling had passed, when she came to the large gateway that led the the Gerudo Fortress. She shook the sand out of her long red hair, and walked on at a fast pace. She was greeted with respect by all the guarding Gerudo.

She asked one of them to go and find the second-in-command of the fortress. The Gerudo did not mind leaving her ‘duty’- enjoyable though the sun was, it was also rather boring. Nabooru was led inside the Fortress, and was given a seat by a table. There was a large cauldron in the room also. While she waited she was given fruits and drinks by the Gerudo, who were excited by the visit of their leader ( who was also an honourable Sage ). While biting in an apple, she thought of the scroll again. She wanted to know how that woman had felt.

She even started to like the title, Representative of Feminity, and in peaceful thoughts she almost dared to wish for earning this title herself- It seemed exciting for some reason. Such thoughts whirled through her head uncontrollably when her Second-in-Command came in. ‘Greetings, oh great Nabooru,’ she said, bowing down. ‘Greetings!’ said Nabooru. ‘How are things?’ she asked. ‘Things are going very well. There have been no problems whatsoever, and we are at peace with Hyrule Castle, the Gorons and the Zoras,’ was the answer.

Nabooru nodded. ‘How about we walk around the fortress a bit and talk?’ she suggested. ‘ Very well, oh great Nabooru,’ answered the Second-in-Command. They walked around the castle, and Nabooru was shown many Rupees and items the Gerudo had collected ( not stolen ). A long time ago, a young Gerudo had lost her way on the Haunted Wasteland and many Gerudo had looked for her- but fortunately she had been found. So Nabooru learned about many recent events.

But she started feeling strange. Her white bra, decorated with many symbols, seemed to be uncomfortable. Tight was the best word, but she didn’t use it in her mind. She was led past an empty cell but hardly paid attention to who had been there.''

[Daichi Azure]

nice...nice...seems that the curse is having fun with her vainity

[cyero]

Veeeeery nice.

[Daichi Azure]

Yeah since the curse that is on Nabooru is the one that was on Cremia...

You guys hoping for cow transformation? ...
That was not my intention in principal, but you might change my mind.

[Daichi Azure]

it's your choice but instead of a TF just the increased rate of which the curse works since it's the second dose of milk it has been in per say. Also since the curse is self aware it should at least retain some of the magic properties of the Chateau Romani it had inhabited till Cremia ingested it?

Originally Posted by theshoelace

You guys hoping for cow transformation? ...
That was not my intention in principal, but you might change my mind.

Well, if we're talking full transformations, maybe a transformation into a pig, similar to Gannon might be fitting. Think about it. Gannondorf was a Gerudo leader, and there have been plays on Nabouru's vanity already.

[geno13]

Persanally, I've had enough TF for one BE thread. I think the growth rate should be kinda fast, but not too fast.