The Change - Full Release - Page 4

LycanDope · 07-07-2011

@Arthax - thanks, I really appreciate the kind words

It's definitely been a fun experience and I hope I can do well with the second one, too!

CNash · 08-23-2011

I've just finished reading it myself. Kudos to the illustrator for bringing the story to life in pictures, especially for the multi-page gradual transformation in the middle of the story, and the various depictions of the wolves in mid- or partial transformation.

As for the story itself - I thought it was quite well-written, but did suffer in a few places from "show don't tell" - telling the reader that someone said something, instead of showing it by letting the characters speak for themselves. However, I found that this rarely extends to important conversations used to move the plot along, and aside from that, the dialogue is very good and natural.

I enjoy TFs triggered by sex, or vice-versa, so this story pushed all of my "fetish buttons" while still appealing to my sensibilities as a reader of fantasy fiction. Once again, I'm finding your story universe quite captivating; I assume that your next story will bring the wolves together with Victoria from your other story? Even if you choose to focus on new characters instead, I'm still looking forward to your next story!

LycanDope · 08-23-2011

Thank you! The illustrator is awesome and we worked really hard to find the best positions and best scenes to illustrate. It actually took longer to pick out scenes and work through sketches than it did to write the story. I don't know whether that's good or not...

Do you think Unchained did better on the dialogue? This was the first thing I've written and although I spent more time polishing it, I feel like I did a little better with Unchained for some things. Dialogue and descriptions and story - I mean, there wasn't even any sex and The Change drowned in sex. I was honestly surprised I could write 30,000 words without a sex scene

I think it's safe to say (without spoiling things) that the next story will merge the characters a bit. Unless I do a short unrelated story then the next thing to do will be the sequel to The Change and Unchained set that up a bit. But there will also be new characters introduced as well. Ideas are slowly forming. I should go on more walks, that seems to bring things out.

I'm really glad you're enjoying the world building! It's fun

Did you read Skin->Unchained->The Change? If so then that probably worked out well since that's basically their chronological order.

LK · 08-23-2011

I'm surprised you didn't inquire about selling it on the Process Store!

CNash · 08-24-2011

Quote:

Originally Posted by LycanDope

Do you think Unchained did better on the dialogue? This was the first thing I've written and although I spent more time polishing it, I feel like I did a little better with Unchained for some things. Dialogue and descriptions and story - I mean, there wasn't even any sex and The Change drowned in sex. I was honestly surprised I could write 30,000 words without a sex scene

Yes, I think you did better with dialogue in Unchained. This might be related to the perspective you used, though - The Change is exclusively first person, which forces you to write descriptively from one perspective, rather than the third person perspective of Unchained. Or it could be down to you getting better at writing as you go along...

And yeah, I did read it in the order Skin > Unchained > The Change... mainly because I don't like putting down money on something unless I know that the author/artist is good. I've been burned too many times by paid-for material that was low-quality. Thankfully that's not the case here!

LycanDope · 10-03-2011

FYI - going to be starting on #2 in this series in the next two weeks

Will be traveling on work for a few days so that'll give me the perfect time to just sit and write since I'll be stuck in a hotel anyway. Also might do a couple non-related very short stories in the meantime

Next story in the series will be titled 'Pack'.

rettiroen · 10-03-2011

Quote:

Originally Posted by LycanDope

FYI - going to be starting on #2 in this series in the next two weeks

Will be traveling on work for a few days so that'll give me the perfect time to just sit and write since I'll be stuck in a hotel anyway. Also might do a couple non-related very short stories in the meantime

Next story in the series will be titled 'Pack'.

Look forward to that! Hopefully it's also a picture book. :P

LycanDope · 10-06-2011

Should be. I'm checking in with the original illustrator to see what his schedule is like. Otherwise, I may have to get someone else to do it.

07-07-2011	#37
LycanDope Smutty Lady Join Date: Apr 2008 Posts: 622	Re: The Change - Full Release @Arthax - thanks, I really appreciate the kind words It's definitely been a fun experience and I hope I can do well with the second one, too!

08-23-2011	#38
CNash What would you rather be? Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 714	Re: The Change - Full Release I've just finished reading it myself. Kudos to the illustrator for bringing the story to life in pictures, especially for the multi-page gradual transformation in the middle of the story, and the various depictions of the wolves in mid- or partial transformation. As for the story itself - I thought it was quite well-written, but did suffer in a few places from "show don't tell" - telling the reader that someone said something, instead of showing it by letting the characters speak for themselves. However, I found that this rarely extends to important conversations used to move the plot along, and aside from that, the dialogue is very good and natural. I enjoy TFs triggered by sex, or vice-versa, so this story pushed all of my "fetish buttons" while still appealing to my sensibilities as a reader of fantasy fiction. Once again, I'm finding your story universe quite captivating; I assume that your next story will bring the wolves together with Victoria from your other story? Even if you choose to focus on new characters instead, I'm still looking forward to your next story! __________________ "And the Lord said, 'Come forth and receive eternal life.' But John came fifth and won a toaster." Avatar by Geckz

08-23-2011	#39
LycanDope Smutty Lady Join Date: Apr 2008 Posts: 622	Re: The Change - Full Release Thank you! The illustrator is awesome and we worked really hard to find the best positions and best scenes to illustrate. It actually took longer to pick out scenes and work through sketches than it did to write the story. I don't know whether that's good or not... Do you think Unchained did better on the dialogue? This was the first thing I've written and although I spent more time polishing it, I feel like I did a little better with Unchained for some things. Dialogue and descriptions and story - I mean, there wasn't even any sex and The Change drowned in sex. I was honestly surprised I could write 30,000 words without a sex scene I think it's safe to say (without spoiling things) that the next story will merge the characters a bit. Unless I do a short unrelated story then the next thing to do will be the sequel to The Change and Unchained set that up a bit. But there will also be new characters introduced as well. Ideas are slowly forming. I should go on more walks, that seems to bring things out. I'm really glad you're enjoying the world building! It's fun Did you read Skin->Unchained->The Change? If so then that probably worked out well since that's basically their chronological order.

08-23-2011	#40
LK Process Disciple Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 3,258	Re: The Change - Full Release I'm surprised you didn't inquire about selling it on the Process Store! __________________

10-03-2011	#42
LycanDope Smutty Lady Join Date: Apr 2008 Posts: 622	Re: The Change - Full Release FYI - going to be starting on #2 in this series in the next two weeks Will be traveling on work for a few days so that'll give me the perfect time to just sit and write since I'll be stuck in a hotel anyway. Also might do a couple non-related very short stories in the meantime Next story in the series will be titled 'Pack'. Last edited by LycanDope; 10-03-2011 at 05:26 PM.

10-06-2011	#44
LycanDope Smutty Lady Join Date: Apr 2008 Posts: 622	Re: The Change - Full Release Should be. I'm checking in with the original illustrator to see what his schedule is like. Otherwise, I may have to get someone else to do it.

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