New TF Story

[Tinn]

Originally Posted by SoylentOrange

True, but then it's not "Mary's Story", and that's what the whole thing's focused on. Maybe after this one's done I can maybe do a side-story about another world where two seeds meet.

Oh, do please write us this story, Mr. Orange! When you're not busy, of course.

Actually, assuming Mary's Story doesn't end badly for either us or her, a seed meeting story might be an interesting sequel. Then again, it might be impossible.

Hmm... Actually, I wonder how common alien life is in the Mary's Story universe? Particularly intelligent life. The Body seems to find Mary's thought processes strange, but that might just be the psycological equivilent of human thought being jury-rigged by an amateur electrician.
Come to think of it, maybe the Flesh explains the Fermi paradox.

Ah, I feel sorry for all the previous minds of the body... I imagine most of them would feel trapped in the flesh, immobile, virtually immortal lifeforms stretched over the entire surface of their planets, only the Body for company, waiting out the long eternity 'till death from starvation or supernova... Even for a creature with sub-human intelligence it'd be mind-cracking torture.
Then again... the body seems to have some kind of wierd telepathic (radio?) tentacle control thing going on. Maybe with a large enough (i.e. planet-sized) 'antenna' there could be some communication with other Minds, or something. Or maybe contacting alien brains via the body would be the last straw so far as sanity was concerned...

[oxdaman]

So I just read chapter 11 of Mary's Story!

Not much to say about this chapter. I'm not the best at painting a clear picture in my head sometimes, even when given every last detail, but the forms Mary takes are really wild and otherworldly. I guess it's really hard to imagine what she's going through without having to go through it yourself. Like how Edward Elric described going through the door of truth in FMA (though I don't know if you know that reference ^^. But thinking back to all the forms Mary takes, I feel that she still kinda likes what's she's become, if only a little. If it wasn't for the other being taking control of her whenever it wants and threatening to devour all life on the planet, I'm sure that she'd love what she's become.

Loved the end of the chapter. Some people can't take a hint until it's completely spelled out for them. Just a bit of a "Haha, serves you right" feeling.

On to the next chapter!!

[oxdaman]

And there's chapter 12! Wow, didn't realize that you were trying to add as much transformation and expansion as you could with this one lol.

I imagined Mr T for some reason when Mary turned into a guy lol. And when Katie slugged Mary, I had a sense of Deja Vu. Little story, one time I asked a few guys to smack me for saying something stupid. The first few refused but the last one did. But the way he did it is was what shocked me. I remember the dialogue go like this:

Me: Please smack me!
Boy: Really?
Me: Really?
Boy: Really?
Me: Really?
Boy: Really?
Me: Re- *Thwap!*

I was like he did a quick draw with his hand on my cheek from out of his pocket. Never saw it coming. My friend said that he literally saw my cheek jiggle XD.

Anyway, what surprised me was the Body's response to Shandra's request and what really scared me was it's reaction to Katie's punch. I feel that the trigger that pushes Mary off the deep end will be whatever the Body does to hurt Katie in a way that can't be taken back.

Still reading with great interest!!

If you could do that, I for one would greatly appreciate it. Back to Mary though, things are going to get blown way out of proportion. Military of every sort will try everything in their power to understand or destroy The Flesh. Meanwhile poor Mary runs intelectual loops around the Body to keep it from eating everything. Katie is having a harder time dealing with the Body as it is and Shandra has to be careful not to upset Mary while still trying to escape from her. Mary's stress level will be tested in the near future, no doubt about it. At least I think so.

I've been wondering though. The lair is somewhat mobile, right? Could Mary absorb all the tentacles that make up her lair and move to a secluded place? Away from the eyes of the innocent public. Making her a giant for a short period of time of course.

[Tinn]

Originally Posted by mrcellophane

I've been wondering though. The lair is somewhat mobile, right? Could Mary absorb all the tentacles that make up her lair and move to a secluded place? Away from the eyes of the innocent public. Making her a giant for a short period of time of course.

While it's definitely mobile, I doubt it'd be able to move very stealthily, mainly because it's too damn big. The weight alone would probably put a dent in the pavement. If it's distributed over a wide area, then it becomes harder to hide.

I guess it could split into dozens of tiny creatures, but I doubt Mary'd go for it. THe more complex the body gets the less control she seems to have over minor parts of it... and I doubt she'd want the flesh to drive.

On the other hand, moving to, say, under a large body of water might be sensible. I can just imagine Mary's apartment building crawling its way down the highway to the beach (cue backing vocals)...

[Esquire]

Originally Posted by Tinn

On the other hand, moving to, say, under a large body of water might be sensible. I can just imagine Mary's apartment building crawling its way down the highway to the beach (cue backing vocals)...

Latin chanting. Or would that be best for The Final Battle?

[geneticks]

Or they could move the lair through the sewers, or even live in them !
The Body would love to eat sweet crocodiles...

[bagman1]

Is this story over or just forgoten?

[SoylentOrange]

Forgotten by everyone here, I guess- no one ever comments on it. ^^;

[Tinn]

Originally Posted by SoylentOrange

Forgotten by everyone here, I guess- no one ever comments on it. ^^;

I'd comment on it... but I'm not very creative. I already said a few comments after the last time it updated, and haven't thought of anything new to say since.

I look to see if the thread has been updated... well, once every three days or so. Perhaps more, depending on my mood. It's a great story with interesting character development, and I'm eager to see how things continue to develop.

[EchoWing]

I'm just waiting to see it finish before I give significant commentary. Still, looking forward to more!

[GenYun]

My arse! this is one of the best on-going storys here. More I say! \o/