Amahain's Stories

[frice2000]

These two new additions were OK...just absolutely no resistance at all is kind of blah. Should be more of a struggle, and the damn Rogues should be better fighters. They are kind of known for disarming traps and having mild psychic abilities and they should be able to kill demons far better then this. Pretty much the only reason Andariel successfully took them over was Blood Raven, the Rogue from Diablo 1, betraying them in her death and leading their army with her extreme skill. Otherwise the Rogues would've taken them down. So kind of needs some better balancing as your 'good guys' are way too weak in the context of this story. And while the transformation and fetish value is good would like to see a better story as well.

[Amahain]

Originally Posted by frice2000

These two new additions were OK...just absolutely no resistance at all is kind of blah. Should be more of a struggle, and the damn Rogues should be better fighters. They are kind of known for disarming traps and having mild psychic abilities and they should be able to kill demons far better then this. Pretty much the only reason Andariel successfully took them over was Blood Raven, the Rogue from Diablo 1, betraying them in her death and leading their army with her extreme skill. Otherwise the Rogues would've taken them down. So kind of needs some better balancing as your 'good guys' are way too weak in the context of this story. And while the transformation and fetish value is good would like to see a better story as well.

Fair enough. No doubt I've written better stories than those two. They've been stewing in my computer's memory for several months and it just seemed like a waste if I didn't post them. The next story that I'll be posting has a bit more plot.

Thanks for the feedback. I honestly mean it.

[rick404]

Great to see you are still pushing the stories out. Very excited to see more from the Diablo universe where corruption and dark transformation are so prevalent.

I liked the multiple use of various D2 Act 1 monsters. The Arachne, Goatlings, and Tainted were certainly interesting...(I have toyed around with a Tainted TF in some of my sketches. Might bring that one up to the surface again.)

The only weakness I think is a consequence of the scale. You excel at detailed TF's and that goes to show in your earlier work with groups of 2 and 3 at a time. Here of course you have a much larger cast and much faster pacing along with characters falling to the same 'classes' so there were some more mechanical repetition in the process.

Still a great read and it is great to see new stuff from you.

Plenty of room for more D2 corruption goodness...Personally been interested in working with some sort of TF involving the Wretched Mothers in Act IV...

Course there is also D3 ;-)

[Amahain]

Originally Posted by rick404

Plenty of room for more D2 corruption goodness...Personally been interested in working with some sort of TF involving the Wretched Mothers in Act IV...

Ah, wretched mothers. Glad to see I'm not the only one who saw them in the game and thought "this could be an awesome TF if done well."

The Diablo universe has no shortage of creatures that would work well in a TF story. It's one reason why I'm really looking forward to a complete D3 bestiary.

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The only weakness I think is a consequence of the scale. You excel at detailed TF's and that goes to show in your earlier work with groups of 2 and 3 at a time. Here of course you have a much larger cast and much faster pacing along with characters falling to the same 'classes' so there were some more mechanical repetition in the process.

The faster pacing is, in part, because I want to move the story beyond the Rogue Monastery. I was kind of rushing to get the Sisterhood corrupted so that I can focus on some other places in Sanctuary with thematically appropriate TFs (eg. tentacle beasts in Khejistan). I'll try to pace myself for the next story; still plenty of Act 1 monsters that I haven't touched yet.