Magic Muscle by pokkuti

[amateur]

This idea is freaking epic. I loved the first four pages; they were really expertly done, especially how the "camera" focuses in on specific parts of the girls' frames and really captures the tension and excitement in the scene.

I'll definitely be following this!

[whoknows]

Ah, another lover I see:P. Well, that is all good, but I do need some help ya know?:P Think of how you want to proceed and then turn it into a script

[whoknows]

Hrm need to expand that chapter 4 a bit more:P. Perhaps, after they consume the candies, they obsessed about getting more strength right?:P A dialogue should fit that:P

[Horrorhill99]

Originally Posted by whoknows

Hrm need to expand that chapter 4 a bit more:P. Perhaps, after they consume the candies, they obsessed about getting more strength right?:P A dialogue should fit that:P

Hm, not exactly sure how to right that in. Any suggestions?

[whoknows]

The candies is like a drug right? Well, that certainly will impair them a bit. Plus on top of it, I expect the reactions from Grey who will step in to stop Wendy and the other two from consuming anymore. Plus I think Wendy, will probably get an odd idea that after her 4th consumption of the candy,with the pace that she's growing at, will likely make Natsu into some doll to play around with:P

[whoknows]

Also, if there isn't anymore changes to chapter 2 and 3 I will present this to Pokkuti for sure:P.

[Horrorhill99]

Go ahead and present chapters 2 and 3. I'll revisit chapter 4 and see how I can change it for the better.

[whoknows]

Sure thing thanks

[marthlord54545]

From reading those scripts, I'm really looking forward to the rest of the story to come out

[whoknows]

This is really good! The 4th chapter is EXCELLENT!. Lol, after when Erza and Lucy takes their 2nd pill, they'll be wanting more even more:P. I can just see how Erza will reason herself to gain even more mass while Lucy will be convinced that somehow that she also will have to take more:P

And boy oh boy... Wendy will be surely downing even more after this lol:P. I do hope that Levy, Lisanna, and Juvia will be ENVIOUS as to how they are getting more attention and such:P First 5 and then the entire guild muahahaha!

[whoknows]

I've sort of gotten this inspiration with Horrorhill's scriptwriting from taking a page out of Marknew's story from Diana The Valkyrie to be honest. The main inspiration came from two excellent authors who made a very appealing and compelling story named " Matt and Emma". Authors' name are Nomdreserv and of course Marknew. Without these two, I could have NEVER gotten an outlined idea alongside with Horrorhill again.

[j2k]

Originally Posted by whoknows

story named " Matt and Emma".

One of the best FMG stories around, I totally love it. Marknew is definitely my fav writer