Midna BE Story

Whoa, I'm so sorry I abandoned this. I'm reviving it now, and I'm immediatly continuing the story:

'' Link ran. He saw the figure in the distance much better now. In a few more seconds, he stood right in front of her. Midna slowly stood up and looked Link in the eyes. Link gasped at the beauty of her face. But a detail that could not be missed soon became clear. Though seeming more normal, because Midna had regained her true adult form, her breasts were still incredibly large. On her cheeks, the blue skin turned somewhat pink.

??What? Say something! Am I so beautiful you?ve no words left???, asked Midna. Link?s surprised face turned to a smile but he wondered how the other problem could be solved. The black on Midna?s body covered her breasts only just enough, and both Link and Midna didn?t like the foresight of Midna walking around Hyrule like this. And Midna felt that her breasts hadn?t stopped growing.

Every second felt like wasted time, yet they had no idea what to spend their time on. It all seemed so exceedingly hopeless, when suddenly Midna remembered something. The spell Zant had cast, she knew which book held the secret of this spell, and maybe a way to turn it around. They made haste for Lake Hylia. After running for a few hours, they finally reached the large Lake.

The only way to reach the Gerudo Desert was by cannon. But unfortunately, Fyer wasn?t there. Everything seemed hopeless again, when suddenly Midna felt the energy inside her. She knew she could warp herself and Link to the Twilight Mirror. She concentrated and used the energy inside her, and in seconds they suddenly stood in front of the Mirror of Twilight. Link looked a bit disorientated.

They looked at the gate that would lead them to the Twilight Realm. Midna felt her buttocks touched her cloak more than they had done a while ago. She looked at Link. He was staring at the gate. She quickly put her hands on her buttocks. She sighed. They definitely did stick out more than before, and were a bit broader too. Since Link was still concentrated on the gate, she weighed her breasts on her hands. They, as expected, were a bit heavier too.

She sighed deeply once more. ?? Link, let?s go quickly! ??, she said, walking up the steps quickly. Link followed, and in a second both stood before the Mirror of Twilight. They were teleported to the gloomy Twilight Realm. It always gave Link a somewhat sad feeling, but for Midna it was beautiful. After looking around for a few seconds, Midna realised that her people were here, and she preferred not to be seen like this.

?? Link, let?s run inside the Palace of Twilight, and head quickly for the throne room.??, she said anxiously. Link nodded, and both started running as fast as they could. They encountered several of the Twili who looked at them in surprise, but they ran by hastily. It was torture for Midna to run with her breasts, that bounced as she ran. Her face became a bit pink again, and she hoped Link didn?t look at her.

After several minutes consisting mostly of the same situation, they finally stood before the great gate that lead to the throne room. Midna felt and was sure that her butt was easy to see because her cloak fit tight around it. She tried to stay behind Link for this reason. She hoped that behind these gates would wait a book with a solution to her problem. Would it be possible? ''

Tell me what you think.

[Huzzus]

Getting better but seemed to go by fast. A little more descriptive always helps Add a little flair and make it sound sexy. Describe how her breasts bounced as she ran, what she was thinking and set the mood. This includes the surroundings too.

It's a good story but a little positive advise never hurts. Plus Midna bouncing boobs alone is a smile on my face.

Oh and glad to hear from ya again.

Originally Posted by Huzzus

Getting better but seemed to go by fast. A little more descriptive always helps Add a little flair and make it sound sexy. Describe how her breasts bounced as she ran, what she was thinking and set the mood. This includes the surroundings too.

It's a good story but a little positive advise never hurts. Plus Midna bouncing boobs alone is a smile on my face.

Oh and glad to hear from ya again.

Thanks .

Yes, I tried to slow it at points ( as you might've seen a few times ), but I had no idea exactly where without slowing the whole thing down.

I know what you mean, but there's a certain border I do not want to cross. I never make my art too sexual. However, bouncing doesn't cross the border... but how do I make that better?

Thanks for your advice.

[Huzzus]

If you want to be more descriptive in things not crossing the boarder like breasts jiggles? Try

"As Midna was running through the great halls of the Twilight palace, her massive breasts swayed and bobbed in her cloak. Each stepped sent waves across each breast. Bouncing closer and closer to her face and the sheer weight made it harder for Midna to run. "This is so wrong." Midna thought as she tried to stabilize her wild bouncing breasts, close to the point of pouring out of her skin tight top."

I'm not a story person *I can't even pass a English class* so I'm not the best person to ask but try something like I did but better ^^;

[Daichi Azure]

Actually keep up the work...I have an idea. Illia and Zelda being cursed with the exact same curse. Torn between to women...

I'm considering bringing other Zelda gals into the story. But first I'm waiting for people to rediscover the story a bit...

[Daichi Azure]

i just read it...but one thing you could delve into the relations that were forming a bit more without causing a sex scene...

I'd like some more points I need to improve on. And be clear please.

[spidey0527]

It's great to see the story continuing. I wish I was more of a writer so that I could give you useful tips. The only thing that really comes to mind is to make the writing more detailed. But I also like your writing as it is. Keep up the good work.

[Daichi Azure]

I was thinking since Midna and Zelda are conencted to one another in a sense that when Zant placed the curse on Midna it aslo affected Zelda at the same time but was much. Then Illia coming in contact with Princess Zelda on an errand to bring medicine to her. hope that inspires ya

Well, thanks for your help, guys. If I find the time and right circumstances I'll try to write a piece.

[Daichi Azure]

no problem...whoa a weeks gone by since we poked this thread...