Midna BE Story

[Ninja In The Night]

I've been dealing with moving in real life, but I glance at the forums now and again for about 5 minutes. You've done a great deal with the story "TheShoeLace" and it's got great potential. Your writing style's only flaw is some slight grammar here and there, but otherwise, nothing that doesn't come with repeated writing and experience. The critique your looking for doesn't exist, because honestly, there's nothing to improve on.

[Daichi Azure]

Originally Posted by crazyazn

its not that people are uninterested.



Its the fact that these people were expecting something after you said that. Basically, if you say "Yeah Ill keep writing" and you don't, you can't claim later that people were uninterested, especially given the comments so far, and your own response.

second that

[Murasashi]

If you write it, they will post.
Seriously.

Yeah, guys, you're right, but as I said I had to find a right occasion as well. Sorry for letting you wait, but I wrote another page now! Here:

'' The heavy door opened slowly. This irritated Midna, because she was in a hurry. Her heart beat faster and faster as she and Link walked through the door. The room they entered was dark and long, and all that was there to see was a throne. They walked through the room at a reasonably fast pace. Midna refused to run again. After a short time they reached the throne, but there was nothing there. Not a book or an inscription to help them find what they were looking for.

Link tried pushing the throne from the side. This had helped him before on his previous quests. Midna also pushed the throne, but nothing could move it. Both Midna and Link were starting to lose hope, when suddenly Midna noticed a tiny little scribble on the side of the throne. She couldn’t read what it said, and moved her finger over it. Suddenly, from somewhere else in the room, came a rumbling noise. Midna and Link quickly turned around and saw that a hole had appeared in the wall.

They both walked slowly towards the wall. Midna felt that the top which had fit her so perfectly long ago would burst off within a very short time. She fastened her face a bit, and could not help that her enormous breasts bounced up and down as she walked, and her top weakened by the second. Arriving at the hole, they looked through it expecting a hallway or large dark room, but it was just a small room with a cauldron in the middle. A substance that filled it had become solid completely.

The rest of the room was quite messy. There was no furniture, but there were some books and scrolls lying around the room. Link started to examine the books and scrolls, obviously looking for a way to turn the spell around. Midna didn’t want to bend over, because she feared falling over. She dropped on her knees ( causing her breasts to bounce awfully ). After a deep sigh, started looking through the books and scrolls as well. She felt that her butt was easy to see because her cloak fit tight around it. Her hips were broad.

Suddenly, Link jumped up with a dark coloured scroll. He showed it to Midna, who slowly stood up. It was definitely the curse Zant had used. Midna quickly read through the scroll to find a solution. She lost more and more hope as she reached the bottom of the scroll, when she suddenly found a footnote. ‘‘ To undo the curse, have the victim take some of the potion that was made to destroy. ’’, it said. Both Midna and Link looked at the hardened substance in the cauldron.

‘‘ How can I take some of this potion? Am I supposed to eat it or something? ’’, she said, annoyed. Link wielded his sword, and used it to cut a small piece off the hardened substance. It was grey. He gave it to Midna. ‘‘ Ugh, this doesn’t look tasty. Must I eat this?’’, she wondered out loud, when suddenly her bra creaked. She knew it would not last another minute if her breasts kept growing. ‘‘ Ok, ok...’’, she muttered by herself. She put the piece of potion in her mouth and swallowed it quickly. It had a bitter taste.

The next moment, Midna suddenly felt odd and sleepy. ‘‘ Link, I feel weird...’’, Midna muttered slowly. Link was now very worried. ‘‘ I... have to sit down for a moment. ’’, she said, simply dropping herself on her bigger buttocks. In her sleepiness she wondered if it would’ve hurt more long ago, when her butt was smaller. Then she passed out. ''

Well, comment please.

[Ninja In The Night]

Kinda of curious what a hardened concentration of the potion will do to her.... *Comment left*

[crazyazn]

She should get bigger. Or maybe a growth acceleration sort of thing

[Daichi Azure]

Wonder what's going to happen now to her...heh...

So, I tried to experiment with some weird dream sequence. I may cut it from the story, but tell me what you think first. I'll continue the dream sequence if you like it.

'' Midna sank into confused dreams. It was a cool, nice day and she sat on her throne. Next to her throne lie a plate with all sorts of snacks on it. She tried to bend down to take one of them, when she felt the incredible weight of her breasts. She lost her balance and fell off her throne with her face in the snacks. She wiped the cheese and other things off her face, and stood up slowly. She turned back to her throne to find Zant sitting in it. He had a wicked smile on his face. Suddenly, his face turned somewhat silly. Midna wondered what he was up to.

‘‘ Link, can you go herd the goats for me?’’, he called out. This seemed bizarre to Midna. The whole situation made her dizzy, and she fell flat on her front. The ground changed, and there was grass. It tickled her breasts, and she chuckled- it had been a dream and she was just on Hyrule Field, finding a way to lift up the curse, she thought. But when she looked up she saw goats all around her. It was the Ordon Ranch. She saw Link on his horse, driving the goats. She tried to get up, but realized she could not.

Eventually, she managed to get on her feet and hands. She felt a bit funny, and her head felt heavy. She felt on top of her head. She realised that there were horns on her head. ‘‘ But I’m not a goat! ’’, she said out loud, when Link came running at her on Epona at an alarming speed. She dodged him with difficulty. He was trying to drive her in the barn, she knew. On all fours, she made a run for the barn. It wasn’t pleasant with the huge weight of her chest, but she managed to reach the door and quickly went in there. It closed behind her.

From outside, she heard a conversation. ‘‘ Link, it’s time to go milk the goats. Why don’t you milk your favourite goat first?’’, said a voice. The door opened and Link came in. He stepped right towards Midna and Midna realized where all this bizarre things were going. She tried to scream but all that she could say was ‘‘baahhh’’. Link’s hand moved towards her, and she had nowhere to run, but suddenly he disappeared. The barn closed and all became dark again. She suddenly was able to get up, but there was seemingly nowhere to go. What now? ''

[Daichi Azure]

ooohhh good goood good...milking her in a dream...this could be interesting...

Milking goes a bit far, doesn't it? XD

Anyway, I wrote a big piece. You may not like it, I made it up as I went along. As I said, this dream sequence is an in-between of which removal will not much harm the story.

''The incredible darkness and silence almost made Midna wish that someone would come back. She looked around. She was about to take a step forward when she heard noise. Footsteps. She had no idea whether to be scared or relieved. Suddenly, a door opened. The light made Midna blink. Link stood in the opening. All the goats ran for the door. Suddenly, Midna felt weak in her legs. She sank back on her knees. An irresistable force called her towards the odd, bright room and she started crawling forward with her hands and knees.

She entered a strange room, seemingly made of metal. As she entered it, Link patted her on her big buttocks. She didn’t think of this as pleasant at all- it seemed as though Link thought she was a goat. The goats were driven into a strange machine, made for milking them. Some force drove her toward it. An unpleasant thought occured to her; at Link’s touch, her buttocks had swelled a bit more. She felt it in her cloak. She wondered if this odd dream or whatever it was would end soon.

Link gently pushed Midna toward the machine. Midna was to confused, scared and tired to fight back. She entered a small room in the machine. Two strange pipes were attached to her breasts. She tried to protest, but all she could bring out was a weak ‘‘ Bah... ’’. She was sure it would happen this time, when suddenly a thought occured to her. ‘‘ My bra is still on. ’’, she thought, and somehow that thought seemed significant. Suddenly, all objects around her seemed to disappear, and so did the machine.

She stood up. The area around her changed from grey to orange, with seemingly no horizon. She felt she was able to stand up now. After a quick feel on her head, she concluded that she didn’t have goat horns any more. She suddenly felt she was being looked at. She turned around, and saw a man standing there. He was cloaked in pitch black, and his eyes were not visible under his hood. His skin was dark. Midna kept her guard up for anything bizarre to happen.

‘‘ I am no dream.’’, the man said. It was as though he had felt Midna’s doubt. ‘‘ I am Roal. I was banished to this bizarre realm long ago. I must say, you are lucky to have escaped the bizarre magic hallucinations which one goes through before reaching this place. These hallucinations affect you physically... and mentally.’’, he said. Midna was not sure what so say, or what to do. But suddenly, she became curious. She wondered why he had been banished to such a strange realm.

‘‘ Why... were you banished? ’’, Midna asked. ‘‘ For creating the spell that was cast on you.’’, was his answer. Midna looked at the man. So he was responsible for the creation of such a horrid spell. ‘‘ But... why would you do that?’’, Midna asked after an awkward silence. ‘‘ The spell I made, I called the Customizable Spell. I made it so that anyone could perform a powerful spell with simple ingredients, only depending on the last ingredient. Alas, it was not long before it was used for evil.’’, he said mournfully.

‘‘ It started reasonably innocent. Here and there someone became somewhat stronger, gained some riches, and the like. But soon boys started using it on their girlfriends to do what has been done to you. And then people started attacking eachother. In a short time, many people got ill and were dying. And I noticed one thing I had not anticipated- the more the spell was used, the more it gained in strength. It seemed to have a conscienceness, and every time it was cast it grew in strength. ’’

‘‘ What had been intended as increasing a girlfriend’s bust size by a bit, ended in them having enormous breasts. The spell influenced breasts and buttocks a like, and the spell was cast so many times it’s power on a person never ran out anymore. Their breasts were doomed to keep growing. What had been intended as a joke or a bit of revenge, ended in deaths because of the strength of the spell. And of course I got blamed for it and I got banished here with my own magic.’’, he sighed deeply.

‘‘ But how can I stop the magic that is doing this to me?’’, Midna asked. ‘‘ I might have a solution, but this will not be easy. Having affected you for a long time, the magic has grown and grown in strength. It’s impossible to destroy now, but perhaps we can force it to leave you.’’, he said, half in thought. ‘‘ We must communicate with it. I cannot force it to go, only you can, though. It’s inside you. Don’t fall for any illusion or trick- though my magic is not evil, having been cast by one with an evil heart it may do evil things.’’

‘‘ One thing I should notify you of. The magic might listen if you explain why it should leave you. But be careful, when it leaves you that will not feel pleasant and may even affect you strongly for a few moments. Good luck.’’, he said. Midna wondered how she could communicate with the magic, but suddenly all around her became black. Suddenly, Zant stood in front of her. ‘‘ Are you... the Magic Spell that resides in me?’’, she asked. The image of Zant slowly nodded.

‘‘ I would like to ask you to leave.’’, Midna said. The image stood still for a long time. Suddenly, the image transformed into Midna herself. Midna thought it was strange to look at herself. She looked at the enormous breasts on the image’s chest. ‘‘ But aren’t you very attractive now?’’, the image said. ‘‘ Most guys would fall for you now.’’. ‘‘ Everyone considered me beautiful before you were cast. By the way, enormous breasts are irritating when trying to do... anything.’’, Midna defended.

The image was silent again. It then turned into Link. ‘‘ But doesn’t Link like you this way?’’, asked the image. ‘‘ Link wants the best for me, and he likes me for who I am.’’, Midna said, quite confident she could defeat this magic spell. The image seemed puzzled. ‘‘ OK... so, you truly wish that I leave you alone?’’, it said. ‘‘ Fine, but I’ll have to warn you. I can’t help but strongly affect you as I leave you, and I’m afraid that what is done cannot be undone.’’ It turned into smoke and whirled around her. Suddenly, a weird feeling went through her.

The feeling is hardly declarable, but you’ll know how it feels if you drink ten big cups of coffee. Her heart raced, she was itchy everywhere, and it seemed as though occasionally people pushed needles in her skin. Then she felt her heart race faster, and she could see her breasts swell. This time, her trusty bra would fail it’s duty. And so it did. In seconds it burst off and Midna shrieked. They swelled more and just as Midna wished they would stop immediatly, they did. Her breasts now reached a bit below her belly.

She sighed, but her heart didn’t stop racing. She felt her buttocks swell this time. It felt strange and she felt them fit tightly in her once loose cloak. Bigger and bigger they became, and she heard her cloak creaking a bit. Then, they stopped. She was sweaty all over. She quickly wiped the sweat of her forehead. Her heartbeat returned to normal in a minute, and exhausted, she fell backwards and all became black once more. ''

[Daichi Azure]

nice...wonder what happens next...

[Huzzus]

Getting much better, not much to say but to keep it up and just progress from there.