New schoolgirl TG sequence - Page 3

12-20-2007

Very nice contribution, emphasin. It's clear that you put a good amount of time and effort into it.

As a niggling criticism, I'd point out that teenage girls tend not to refer to their mothers as 'Mommy' (or be on speaking terms with them in the first place :P).

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Originally Posted by Very_Good_Karma

In the 5th and 6th panels, did his clothes just disappear?

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Originally Posted by bacattack

You do need to make the sudden loss and reappearance of clothes more apparent though. You almost lost me and I needed to go back and see what you meant by that.

I'm pretty sure that we're supposed to be seeing through the clothes, given that it doesn't make any sense whatsoever for the pants to disappear, reappear, and then change into something else.

reptileking · 12-21-2007

Excellent sequence. I can tell that alot of us will be expecting great work from you in the future.

AbdiKun · 12-21-2007

awesome! o/

Captain Ash · 12-21-2007

LOL.
Thank you for this comic. It is reallyawesome.

Captain Ash

emphasin · 12-22-2007

I'm working on a new sequence. I'm doing a tg catgirl sequence, it's about 40% done now...

It's weird, it starts off cartoony and gets more and more realistic as it goes on, heh heh

transformative · 12-22-2007

looking foward 2 it

No-Man · 12-22-2007

I could have sworn I commented on this... but I guess I didn't.

Excellent work, especially for something "thrown together". I wish to express a non-"gimme gimme gimme" sentiment. Basically, I want to say "good job and if you do decide to do more pieces, then I rejoice inside.

Maybe that's a more polite gimme gimme, but I would be lying if I said I didn't want to see more art of this quality.

Adriss · 12-22-2007

Wow, that's an amazing sequence. Thanks so much for sharing it with the boards ^^

The only criticism I have is minor and that is that some kind of effect to clarify that the images at the bottom of the first page are under the outer clothes (as it is a little uncertain until you read through the rest of the sequence). That said, its a lovely sequence, and she looks adorable at the end ^_^

Sailordolly · 12-22-2007

I love how the mother says "girls are easy" when she has a boy and "boys are easy" when she has a girl. ^_^

Mitchell · 12-22-2007

Extremely good comic, please post more work!

Do you have a webpage?

mikewolfskin · 12-23-2007

Oh bravo well done I love the art style, I very much look forward to your next piece!

LostHopeOfDusk · 12-23-2007

This is good and in color, this is the season to give, not the season to ask for more

*Gives the artist a hug and then runs away

12-21-2007	#26
reptileking Santa's sexy helper Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: virginia Posts: 70	Excellent sequence. I can tell that alot of us will be expecting great work from you in the future. __________________ Future story writer My Deviant Art: http://goten99100.deviantart.com/ Where it all happens....again.

12-21-2007	#28
Captain Ash Adventurer Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 778	LOL. Thank you for this comic. It is reallyawesome. Captain Ash __________________ ~ The Shrink-Crystal ~_~The Enchanted Sorceress~ >> DeviantArt

12-22-2007	#31
No-Man Process Disciple Join Date: Apr 2007 Posts: 2,197	I could have sworn I commented on this... but I guess I didn't. Excellent work, especially for something "thrown together". I wish to express a non-"gimme gimme gimme" sentiment. Basically, I want to say "good job and if you do decide to do more pieces, then I rejoice inside. Maybe that's a more polite gimme gimme, but I would be lying if I said I didn't want to see more art of this quality. __________________ "Because we're made out of wishful thinking and puppy farts!" -- Jack on why banality is bad for changelings

12-22-2007	#32
Adriss Perpetual lurker Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: the UK Posts: 32	Wow, that's an amazing sequence. Thanks so much for sharing it with the boards ^^ The only criticism I have is minor and that is that some kind of effect to clarify that the images at the bottom of the first page are under the outer clothes (as it is a little uncertain until you read through the rest of the sequence). That said, its a lovely sequence, and she looks adorable at the end ^_^ __________________ Power corrupts, absolute power is kinda nice.

12-22-2007	#33
Sailordolly The Tiny Sailor Senshi Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 360	I love how the mother says "girls are easy" when she has a boy and "boys are easy" when she has a girl. ^_^ __________________ I am Sailor Dolly, and I'm going to shrink you! ^_^ I said shrink YOU, not ME! >_<

12-21-2007	#27
AbdiKun Banned Join Date: May 2007 Location: brazil the land of...stuff...yeah thats more like it... Posts: 27	awesome! o/

12-22-2007	#29
emphasin Lurker Join Date: Dec 2007 Posts: 18	I'm working on a new sequence. I'm doing a tg catgirl sequence, it's about 40% done now... It's weird, it starts off cartoony and gets more and more realistic as it goes on, heh heh

12-22-2007	#30
transformative skrew ball Join Date: Jun 2006 Posts: 870	looking foward 2 it

12-22-2007	#34
Mitchell Process Disciple Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 1,107	Extremely good comic, please post more work! Do you have a webpage? __________________ http://schismgalaxy.freeforums.net/

12-23-2007	#35
mikewolfskin AR Process Time! Join Date: Jun 2007 Posts: 685	Oh bravo well done I love the art style, I very much look forward to your next piece!

12-23-2007	#36
LostHopeOfDusk Do not pet the kitty Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Argentina Posts: 2,002	This is good and in color, this is the season to give, not the season to ask for more *Gives the artist a hug and then runs away