Angela's first day (My new series.)

[Kevin_Generic]

I recently began working on a new series which involves some shrinking. So far it is about 4 pages in, with quite a bit more to go. I don't really get much opportunity to work with SW so I hope you all don't mind my inexperience.

Page 1: http://fav.me/d7d8lb5
Page 2: http://fav.me/d7e3d9t
Page 3: http://fav.me/d7f7613
Page 4: http://fav.me/d7f76j2

6/21/14 Update:
Page 5: http://fav.me/d7e3das

6/22/14 Update:
Page 6: http://fav.me/d7lf7ij

6/30/14 Update:
Page 7: http://fav.me/d7eiit5
Page 8: http://fav.me/d7f75k9

7/14/14 Update:
Page 9: http://fav.me/d7f7ig2
Page 10: http://fav.me/d7fczun
Page 11: http://fav.me/d7fmc2p
Page 12: http://fav.me/d7qdn30

[OhZone]

mmmm Not bad!

[LK]

Your skill with 3D shrinking encourages commissioning!

[HD1000]

Great!

[Prof_Sai]

nice!

[Kevin_Generic]

Originally Posted by OhZone

mmmm Not bad!

Thanks!

Originally Posted by LK

Your skill with 3D shrinking encourages commissioning!

Well here is hoping I get lots more excuses to make more SW content.

Originally Posted by HD1000

Great!

I try. xP

Originally Posted by Prof_Sai

nice!

Thank you.

[zdarkness]

Is this made exclusively in MMD, or do you use photoshop or other image manipulation tools at all? I mean, barring the text of course.

[Kevin_Generic]

Originally Posted by zdarkness

Is this made exclusively in MMD, or do you use photoshop or other image manipulation tools at all? I mean, barring the text of course.

There is a bit of photoshop used to smooth out certain jaggedy parts like elbows when the arm is bent a certain way or things like that. No major editing.

[zdarkness]

Ah, alright then. And I noticed from the tags that this is apparently actually 3DCG and not MMD. Apparently the program has changed a lot since I tinkered with it last a couple years back. I don't recall there being model scaling.

[Captain Ash]

That is a really nice comic.
Maybe you could work a little bit more on the face expression but I like it how she loosens into her uniform.

Captain Ash

[Kevin_Generic]

Originally Posted by zdarkness

Ah, alright then. And I noticed from the tags that this is apparently actually 3DCG and not MMD. Apparently the program has changed a lot since I tinkered with it last a couple years back. I don't recall there being model scaling.

There still isn't, I do that stuff custom outside the program by messing around with proportion files hah.

Originally Posted by Captain Ash

That is a really nice comic.
Maybe you could work a little bit more on the face expression but I like it how she loosens into her uniform.

Captain Ash

Thanks, glad you like the clothing effects. And can you be a little but more specific on what it is about the expressions you think need more work?

[Captain Ash]

Originally Posted by Kevin_Generic

Thanks, glad you like the clothing effects. And can you be a little but more specific on what it is about the expressions you think need more work?

Page 1 &2 are good!
Page 2 where the shrinking starts she has the face expression between "noticed that she is shrinking" and worrying.
So far so good!

Page 3 ,however, has just the "okay, I'm shrinking" face expression.
Someone who is shrinking and who never experienced something like that before, should be worried, confused, puzzled, or a a mix of all these feelings.
She knows its happening but know that she can't do anything about it.
Or she is not capable to understand the situation.

At page 3 bottom pic, her eyes are shut.
For me it looks like that she is pissed off rather than being embarrassed.

These are my suggestions what could be improved.
Hope it was helpful.

Greetings

Captain Ash