Locked Heart (Incomplete)

[Magical_TG]

I've been working on a new story baring similarities to the Course of the Heart. My attempt is not only to inject sex, but a good story as well. I've submitted a sampling of the work I've written so far. It's not bad in my opinion. Of course, I'm relying on your thoughts as well.

I believe I've found a fair balance in Chapter One. Take a read why don't you? I've submitted it in .PDF format. You'll need Acrobat Reader in order to read it.

Intro: Elliot finds a job, but after his first day he undergoes enigmatic changes.

Edit: Added .TXT for those who can't read PDFs.