To Bake a Christmas Cake (Complete)

[Reif]

I appreciate all the feedback, I'm glad that people are enjoying the stories.

[frice2000]

Originally Posted by Reif

If you liked this but were put off by the length of my first story "The succubus' wedding night" give it a try.

I read your other story...I don't know I think this was a lot better. Might have to do with me loving succubus transformations and being sad to have not seen one ...It was false advertising damn it .

My problem with the other one in seriousness wasn't its length or lack of hot demonic chicks...That was fine, I don't mind long stories...Its just after the initial bar scene a lot of the temptation and feeling stuff he was experiencing to me seemed way too long. I understand you were trying to convey a great struggle and all there it just dragged on and kept repeating itself in my opinion...It could have been shorter, or the lust could have felt different each time, too often I felt like I was re-reading the story over and over. And now for the sacrilege: What I DID think was too long even though it was masterfully written in the other story was the transformation sequence...I know that's why most of us are here and you definitely did an awesome process scene in that story I just felt that again it got repetitive even though it was well written. However, I did like the two characters little cameo in this story showing that they are definitely happy. Interesting that the witch seemingly knows that she wasn't born in that form...You creating your own story universe? You are off to a good start if you are .

In contrast this story was superbly balanced. You introduced the main characters well and dealt with the transformation at a much better clip all without being repetitive. Its for that reason that I commented on this story, the other story was good for the pure fetish value that many come here for, but this story was good as both a transformation story and a story within itself. All in all I enjoyed this one better by far, but it had nothing to do with length. Good writing and story is what gets me into a TF story and makes me enjoy a read. All in all I thought your second story here was on par with the best transformation stories I've ever read. I would definitely say your second story was comparable to my favorite TG authors from old Fictionmania Anon Allsop and Deane Christopher. It was excellent, huge step up in quality of work in my opinion.

[JONJONAUG]

Holy shit...is this some good new original content I see?

Never thought I'd see the day. Excellent work.

[Apsm]

A truly arousing and well written story. When mentioning certain parts of the transformation, mostly the groin, I found it hard to picture. Also, I didn't get the final part of the transformation, involving the heart shaped pin (what did that do exactly?)but I like this idea a lot!

Also, is 'Holly' speaking in an Irish accent? The witch did say she was thinking of making her Irish, but you never confirmed what accent she was speaking.

Good work!

[Reif]

I was going pretty fast in this story as a result of me trying to get it done before the seasonal event it was based on passed. So I didn't put near the detail in to this one that I put into the Succubus' Wedding Night, for that I apologize if things got unclear.

The idea was that two long bubbles formed along his crotch and then swelled outward until they effectively enveloped his manhood. Then the whole arrangment effectively 'swallowed' and then deflated leaving him a woman between his legs. If youre still having trouble visualizing, the closest piece of graphic art that I've seen would be one by DPRagan which I've attached. Keep in mind though that his picture is a 'goo' situation while mine isn't and the pose and face would be completely different.

The navel piercing doesn't actually do anything in the story, its just garnish. Basically Mirabel adding that last extra 'oomph.'

I never did say if Holly had an accent, if you want to mentally give her a gentle brogue I wouldn't mind.

I'm about 33% done with my third story. It would be going faster if I would stop having great ideas which naturally have to be included.

[Reif]

Shameless Bump...see edit added on original post.

[frice2000]

Such a tease >.>...I look forward to January then.

[Bloodyred]

great holiday story

Originally Posted by frice2000

Such a tease >.>...I look forward to January then.

look at the date of the post

[Reif]

No, my statment is currently accurate. Above the added line is what I just added. The Succubus Bride Part 2 should be released in either very late December or early January (depends on how much time I get to work on it).

I know its a long wait, but I can tell you that Zoe is getting significantly more screen time in part 2. It may not reach the epic proportions of Robin and Marion's arc but it will be signficantly longer than The Succubus' Wedding Night.

Also as a bonus (and partly because I needed to make continuity corrections) I will be releasing The Succubus Wedding Night v 2.0 at the same time. While the core of TSWN will be unchanged it has gotten a fresh coat of polish and a few paragraphs added in here or there.

[frice2000]

<Reads date of post. Reads last post by author. Shrugs and chuckles.> So looking forward to January .

[zdarkness]

Ah, yes. I read that last year.

It was pretty good, but something about the witch woman bugged me. Went a little overboard with the cheesecake lines I guess. Hard to explain.

[Reif]

Last shameless bump I promise...I have now added a PDF version.