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Here's another! "Bloodlust in Gotham" (See the edited first post).
It's another one that I've been sitting on for a while. I was feeling a bit embarrassed about posting it since it's basically fan fiction with a fetishistic twist. Oh well! |
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I think it's because fan fiction falls into one of three categories: sexual fetishism, wish fulfilment, and original work. The fetishism is there because human sexuality is a freakish little midgit that's always hiding behind some furnature and saying 'Dude, what if octopussy was a literal name? Huh? Huh?'. You can't understand him, you just have to learn how to live with him and clean out his litter bin from time to time.
The wish fulfilment is basically the same time, except it's the author that's enjoying everything. They're masturbating onto the screen and expecting you to watch. The last kind, original work, is fairly rare since most of the people with the talent to write good fiction are smart enough to take their scenario and just create original characters for it so that they own, and can sell, the entire work.
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The mental imagery I got from your description of the human sexuality midget was priceless. Such an adorable little freak hiding behind the couch, coming up with ridiculous porn ideas.
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I liked the first story the most. It has lots of potential for sequels too *hint hint*
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First story was good, but the second story kinda fell flat for me. I dunno, it seems that having the heroine automatically be submissive to the villain, and seem pretty much 'drugged' at the end fell flat. It turned the whole thing into a shaggy dog story. Plus, having connor get killed off-screen...*sighs*. You pretty much turned being a werewolf into 'person has lost all mind/personality'. The story builds her up quite a bit, only for a character who's not on screen much to be victorious. Her lack of, well, character in the last scene really kills a lot of potential, and causes the ending to fall flat. (She's a cop! She saves lives. Now, she has no problem with being a mindless killer because she gets snu-snu.)
Bloodlust in Gotham is good, but I wonder how Batgirl plans to deal with it...she's a very competant, powerful woman, and it would be a shame for her to end up like Laura.
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Thanks, Mitchell. I didn't really like the conclusion of the cop story either, admitedly. I really only put it in there because I don't like ending a story with "and then she ran off into the night" or something to that effect.
Just to clarify, though, there was supposed to be a mental change at the end of that story - she didn't just decide to trade in her moral principles for sex. Rather, her moral principles evaporated after her first transformation. |
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Which I dislike, finding it a bit...cheap. It would have been more reasonable if, at the least, she was capable of understanding her new lack of inhibition. Instead, she's just kinda, well, out of it.
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Ah, I see what you mean. Fair enough, then.
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If you're dissatisfied, why not rewrite it? I'm working as a prereader for Nekollx on Deviantart, and did some work for Wraith on his Legion book. I could help.
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