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Re: The Big Splash Two (AP / AR / GTS /SM)
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I'm all for subtle shifts in the story, if it needs it. But if you're working on a particular narrative it seems weird to throw in a fetish just to throw it in. I understand you enjoy fetishes and you want to make the stories interesting for yourself, and I tend to purchase most of your work, I really don't like GTS so I try not to buy those, because I want to support you, but when the change in the narrative seems to happen for no reasons just to fit your own "niche" it's jarring to some of us. When I write a story and I've found something has shifted out of focus, like how the roles of Monica and Tiffany ended up in A Goddess's Gifts, I go back through and reevaluate everything that led to that and make sure it's a logical progression. Sometimes it can't be helped without a fresh set of eyes, no one can catch everything. My general rule of thumb, granted I've only provided a few pieces here on the process, but I like to think my narratives are pretty tight, is if you write the rules to something saying it does XYZ and then it suddenly does ABC without a valid explanation it just bad story telling. If you're looking for test readers for scripts I'm sure there are dozens of us here who would help. With a little judicious rereading, trust me after publishing True Blue Alien: Digital Memories rereading and editing never hurt a story, everyone will start to think less and less about Squirt and more about your latest story. Personally I'm a fan of Booby Battle... but that's just me. Not meaning to be harsh, I'm a big supporter and I just want to help make all the stories memorable.
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03-28-2016 | #14 |
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Re: The Big Splash Two (AP / AR / GTS /SM)
If you ever do a poll again on the Dream Tales website, I think it would indeed be interesting to have in it a question along the line of "Do you dislike it when AR/AP and Shrinking/GTS are mixed in a comic or do you not mind ? Some may be fine if some comics have it, while other prefer the themes to be separated in their own different comics.
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03-29-2016 | #15 | |
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Like Janus though, I noticed a TON of the glaring holes in the yard work series. I think that's when the community as a whole started seeing the drop off in quality somewhat. certain story aspects just threw us completely off and left a lot of us scratching our heads. I know I've listed some of my complaints on those forum threads, in panels not being colored right. To mom's glasses disappearing from one panel to only appear in another (please feel free to correct me if I'm wrong here, it's been a while since I've looked at those lol). Then there was inconsistencies on what the formula's actually did in context to the beginning of the story line. The beginning of that series was setup in SUCH a great way and then it sort of, failed to meet expectations on what we thought the story would actually go.
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03-29-2016 | #16 |
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Re: The Big Splash Two (AP / AR / GTS /SM)
Thanks, really appreciate all the comments. I know you want the comics to be as good as they can be. I do too.
I'm definitely open to having proofreaders, and I do have some already. It really helps to have another pair of eyes, as otherwise I'm the only one to review it before it goes out. However I'd like to think the standard is already pretty high for these comics. Part of the issue is that people want different things from the stories. I like mixing SW and AR, others hate it. Also working with any artist is going to result in a slightly different story than what I envisioned. They each have their own way of interpreting things, and sometimes that makes the story better. I think you can also get overly focused on the small details, although I try to be as accurate as possible. A lot of readers preferred this version of Big Splash. Personally I liked the art of the first one, which was done with pen and ink. Part Two was all digital, which I like less, and I've asked the Pepper Pair to go back to inks for future comics. [Any other thoughts on this?] Crafting a good story is really difficult. I go through multiple drafts and often throw out ideas if they don't pan out. It's a lot of work, and often a simple-seeming story is the most difficult to write. So they might seem simple, but that's because there is a lot of editing done already. |
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03-30-2016 | #18 |
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Re: The Big Splash Two (AP / AR / GTS /SM)
Yes, it's very slow and detailed AR and AP. Hope you'll enjoy it!
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03-30-2016 | #19 |
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Re: The Big Splash Two (AP / AR / GTS /SM)
could there be one where the 'rivals' don't hate each other, specifically how the 'big'one finds the 'little' one annoying? A friendly/excited AR-AP where they are having fun with it would be nice to see. The typical (I hate how my sister is now more developed than me even though we is younger) is getting old. Pun intended. For that, the rivalry for a plot device is becoming stale in my opinion. It's a great thing, but most of these stories are centered around that and more often than not, around a boy the two leads are after. what about slipping a girl between the mix instead of a boy or something other than rivalry. Just a thought for upcoming ideas, would LOVE to see some of us Lesbians get a piece in. ^.^
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03-30-2016 | #21 |
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Re: The Big Splash Two (AP / AR / GTS /SM)
instead of conflict with rivals where they are competeing for affection, why not experimentation gone wrong, two scientists making new formulas, a wave of genetic mutation where they are 'caring' for each other but both struggling in their new roles.
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04-04-2016 | #22 |
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Re: The Big Splash Two (AP / AR / GTS /SM)
I'm really happy to see my favorite comic from you guys get a sequel. But quite frank... it wasn't nearly as good as the first one and plus the girl didn't get that big, while the Male Shrinkage was a big turn off. I know everyone has there own taste, but could have dealt with out it. But it does seem insulting they shrink really small, but the only Giantess only grows to mini-giantess size? And just like a few others mentioned, the lack of nipples was really off putting. Maybe it was the age issue, but come on. It just looks weird ^^;
Now with all that said, it was a good comic. But doesn't live up to the original at all I'm sorry to say. Which is such a huge disappointment. I hope their will be a third with just girls only and more process in all of it. Even though I don't care for AR at all, it fits well with this story's plot line of causing shrinking and AR in one lake, and causing AP and GTS in the other. So that is perfectly fine. I just wished the GTS wasn't as fast and she grew a LOT more than what she did in this one. Yes I know the first one was fast too, but it didn't feel as fast as this one did. Overall, it's a nice comic and honestly a take or leave in purchasing it. Now that is just my opinion everyone! So I don't want to hear it! Thank you Dreamtales for your hard work and we hope you can improve in the 2nd sequel if one is to be made of this series. Keep up the hard work. |
04-16-2016 | #23 |
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Re: The Big Splash Two (AP / AR / GTS /SM)
Bought it! It was great! But somehow I seem to prefer the first ones original ending better! Nice job anyways! Love the coloring!
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04-17-2016 | #24 |
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Re: The Big Splash Two (AP / AR / GTS /SM)
Thanks, really glad you enjoyed it!
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