"Sailor Moon: The Bachelorette Party" **NEW COMIC**

[LK]

For all the people that are buying this, this thread is surprisingly quiet. :P

[Jitensha]

Thanks Nom, and I was thinking that too o.O

Lots of people are really excited over it on deviantart and giantesscity.
So, what did you guys think?

[LOD]

I love how you are giving us so many different angles than in your previous works. I think the part I loved the most was when Usagi entered the room with all the girls already shrunk. I could just imagine being in there with them feeling the floor slightly tremble as she approached ^_^

[Jitensha]

OMG I loved that scene too!!!! I'm glad I got to share with you what I meant to portray. That means I did good!!! YAY!!! *takes a cookie from the jar*

[Silver Spoon]

Time for a fairly length review.

Art-wise, it looks great. Nice colors, cute clothes (especially for shrunken Rei, who is dressed as probably my favorite SW in anime), and the characters most of the time stay on-model. I notice Usagi's breasts have grown quite a bit since the end of the series. XD

Story-wise, I liked how you work in a way to explain how the girls shrunk. I always did wonder when watching any season but the first if Naru was annoyed that she was more or less replaced as Usagi's best friend by four other girls and her daughter from the future.

However, I thought the shrinking came in a little late, as well as went by fairly quickly. I originally thought all four girls would shrink one at a time, but then Makoto and Minako shrink near simultaneously. I also thought that Minako's bow in her hair would stay on as she shrunk like Makoto's hair accessory, but it didn't. I thought it would've been cute. ^^;

Dialogue-wise, it was a little confusing how you sometimes didn't use honorifics and sometimes did. In the anime, the girls almost always refer to each other with the -chan honorific (except Rei to Usagi). At first I thought you purposely dropped it since the girls are older now, but then it came up again. It didn't affect the story or anything - just wanted to let you know. ^^;

Overall, though, I liked it. The scene where Ami is grabbing on to Rei's nipple was (in my opinion) funny, as well as Ami's comment when she shrinks: "Please be the booze." Love how you worked in delayed shrinking for Rei, too. More than worth the money, at any rate.

One question, though - who are shrunken Ami and Makoto supposed to be dressed as? I got Rei and Minako, but not them..

[TF-Viewer]

I liked it. But I feel like the ratio of sex to shrinking is always leaning towards sex. Don't get me wrong, I love the work you guys are doing, I just prefer a longer shrinking sequence, with less orgy. Maybe I'm alone in that.

[Mercurius]

Originally Posted by Silver Spoon

One question, though - who are shrunken Ami and Makoto supposed to be dressed as? I got Rei and Minako, but not them..

Ami's was Jitensha's custom-made one, version 2, this one's similar to DC Mikiko's first doll clothes, except for the color and buttons. Version 1 was the Ami's First Kiss pic she did for me a few years ago.

Makoto's was from The Incredible Shrinking Woman movie, during the parts where Lily's character is doll-sized and the only clothes she could wear are doll clothes, such as that.

[Silver Spoon]

Originally Posted by TF-Viewer

I liked it. But I feel like the ratio of sex to shrinking is always leaning towards sex. Don't get me wrong, I love the work you guys are doing, I just prefer a longer shrinking sequence, with less orgy. Maybe I'm alone in that.

You're not alone. I didn't point it out earlier since that's how most of Jitensha's comics progress. I'd rather have a bit more shrinking myself.

[qzar9999]

Originally Posted by Silver Spoon

However, I thought the shrinking came in a little late, as well as went by fairly quickly. I originally thought all four girls would shrink one at a time, but then Makoto and Minako shrink near simultaneously.

Originally Posted by TF-Viewer

I liked it. But I feel like the ratio of sex to shrinking is always leaning towards sex. Don't get me wrong, I love the work you guys are doing, I just prefer a longer shrinking sequence, with less orgy. Maybe I'm alone in that.

I agree with both of these. Having said that, it's the only criticism I have for a comic that was otherwise very well done. Drawing quality was top-notch, what shrinking process was there was great (love the panel of Ami looking up at Mina while her skirt's falling off). Overall an excellent job, Jit. *applause*

[Jitensha]

Hey guys, thanks so much for your feedback (^^);

>>Silver Spoon
In normal Japanese sometimes people choose to use or not use honorifics. A lot of the time it depends with the situation and what mood the speakers wants to give. I used it mostly when the girls wanted to come off as worried or speak sweetly to each other. Chan is also used very openly amongst friends, even at their age. But thanks for the feedback, I'll try to either use it more consistently or not at all. I don't want people to be confused D:

As for the shrinking sequences, we'll keep that in mind for the next comic. Merc and I will be discussing the next comic together and creating the story as partners. I feel this, being the first comic Merc wrote was supposed to be more of a nostalgic look for SW fans in general. We had those scenes in the comic that captivated us as kids. Usagi stomping into the room, "where is everyone?", a doll house, a giant eye peering in, doll clothes, media references, etc. This comic was meant IMO to reach out to readers on a different level that was part of the beginning of our fetishes. That and sex of course >.>;

Obviously we can't please everyone, so it always helps for you guys to tell us what it is you would like to see.

[easton]

Great job on the comic.

[Jitensha]

Glad you liked it