My short stories - transformation

[tetsumi]

Here's another one. I did another cat tf this time, as per a suggestion of someone on DA. I'm rather proud of this one, though I think there is still something missing from the actual TF. Either way, I feel like it has a more realistic feel to it than some others, and that it is sexier than others. I'd really like to hear what you guys think.

I haven't been getting many comments from people here on my last few, should I stop posting them? I'll just post them on DA if people would prefer, though if you guys are enjoying them, I'll more than gladly continue putting them up here. Just don't want to be a nuisance.

As always, let me know what you think! I'd love to hear comments/criticism!

And also, Enjoy!

[LostHopeOfDusk]

Well, first of all, txt is not a good format to read a story, try with rtf that is smaller than a .doc and cant be infected by evil macros. Second, people here pays more atencion to pics, and third, stories take more time that just looking at a pic or reading a comic. Try to be patient and fourth: If the thread is a bit old and you have next stuff, just make a new one.

[geneticks]

Stories are fine to me, txt is perfect.
If people don't want to see stories, they'll just skip the thread.
Don't refrain from posting because of them.

[blackvelvetrpg]

Originally Posted by tetsumi

As always, let me know what you think! !

Quikkies good for a quick rise but not commentworthy for the intelectuals
who visit this place.

[Amahain]

Originally Posted by blackvelvetrpg

Quikkies good for a quick rise but not commentworthy for the intelectuals
who visit this place.

I thought this whole forum was about quick rises.

Anyway, nice story Tetsumi.

[blackvelvetrpg]

Originally Posted by Amahain

I thought this whole forum was about quick rises.

Perhaps but since the writer keeps asking for reader response,am I supposed
to provide commentary on the "quick rise' that presumably went with the
story?

If the forum is all about the quick rise," nice story","write mooore","OMG purrfect" etc take on entirely new meanings not related to
grammar,spelling ,plot,setting and character development
and probably have more to do with
pistle length,orgasm,etc

We'd be dealing with Devil Donkey's
"Jerk Off" Meter of years past that was supposed to be used to
rate new transformation literature

[Amahain]

Correct me if I'm wrong (and I don't mean that in a patronising way - I really might be wrong here), but you seemed to imply that erotic stories and well written stories are mutually exclussive, and so it makes no sense to critique an erotic story for its style. I don't think this is the case. A well written erotic story is going to have more of an effect on its readers than a poorly written one, and so style is still important, and it makes sense that a writer like Tetsumi would be asking for constructive criticism.

[tetsumi]

Quite right, there, Amahain. Just want to know if people enjoy the stories (and not in that way BlackVelvet). I want to know if the emotions seem realistic, if the TF has the right pace and feel, or if it seems like I left something out, if the descriptions seem accurate or off base, that kind of stuff. And just, is it well written? For that matter, just let me know if people are enjoying the stories! If people aren't really liking them, then I won't worry about posting them anymore. I can't really see if I've got an audience over here or not. Tons of people seem to read them on DA, so I was just trying to get a handle on whether or not they were being enjoyed over here.

And for those of you who have said you liked this one or others, thanks. I appreciate it.

[Nothingman]

Thanks for all the great stories, tetsumi!