Midna BE Story

[NinjArt]

The spurts method mentioned above has a nice sound to it, tho thats just my two cents.

[Forze]

Originally Posted by geno13

I'd say fast as in a growth spurt every few hours or so. Maybe an added increase in sensitivity, if you're comfortable with that?

These two items don't sound like bad ideas, if only to shake things up a little. Maybe you should give it a shot!

[geno13]

Hair and nail growth (not overly long nails, but long enough to show age and maturity) may also be a nice subtle touch.

Also, are we still doing that "Midna expands a little more each time a new girl gets cursed" thing?

[MagicWritings]

Originally Posted by geno13

I'd say fast as in a growth spurt every few hours or so. Maybe an added increase in sensitivity, if you're comfortable with that?

Hmm... every few hours or so... I'll try, but it's not something I've done before. Thanks for your suggestion.

Sensitivity... like, physical sensitivity-ish? And in what context could I best bring that forward?

Originally Posted by NinjArt

The spurts method mentioned above has a nice sound to it, tho thats just my two cents.

Alright. Your opinion is appreciated.

Originally Posted by Forze

These two items don't sound like bad ideas, if only to shake things up a little. Maybe you should give it a shot!

Thanks for your opinion as well. I better get to writing and see if I can make something of this. I suppose that the instant she'll get cursed, we will begin with a growth spurt? :P

Originally Posted by geno13

Hair and nail growth (not overly long nails, but long enough to show age and maturity) may also be a nice subtle touch.

Also, are we still doing that "Midna expands a little more each time a new girl gets cursed" thing?

Ah, thanks for another good suggestion.

I believe we are, since Midna's basically the source of the curse... well, where it first appeared. So she has a strong connection to it, even though she's not under the influence anymore.

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Originally Posted by Forze
These two items don't sound like bad ideas, if only to shake things up a little. Maybe you should give it a shot!

Thanks for your opinion as well. I better get to writing and see if I can make something of this. I suppose that the instant she'll get cursed, we will begin with a growth spurt? :P

..Yes, yes we should.

[geno13]

Originally Posted by MagicWritings

Hmm... every few hours or so... I'll try, but it's not something I've done before. Thanks for your suggestion.

Sensitivity... like, physical sensitivity-ish? And in what context could I best bring that forward?

Hm... I was thinking physical sensitivity, as in she feels gradually more and more pleasure from her assets from anything touching them. Since maybe the curse wants to prey on one of her inner desires (probably not one she wishes out loud, but one a part of her wants) to 'be with link, like they were years ago' and like a mischievous djin, it'll 'grant' that secret inner desire by taking it completely out of context and twisting it to that she wants to grow up like him and be as, or even more appealing to Link as Zelda (physically, of course).

So, as it ages her to an unnatural adulthood, it also messes with her hormones to add even more malice to the process, making her more fertile, maybe.

[MagicWritings]

Originally Posted by geno13

Hm... I was thinking physical sensitivity, as in she feels gradually more and more pleasure from her assets from anything touching them. Since maybe the curse wants to prey on one of her inner desires (probably not one she wishes out loud, but one a part of her wants) to 'be with link, like they were years ago' and like a mischievous djin, it'll 'grant' that secret inner desire by taking it completely out of context and twisting it to that she wants to grow up like him and be as, or even more appealing to Link as Zelda (physically, of course).

So, as it ages her to an unnatural adulthood, it also messes with her hormones to add even more malice to the process, making her more fertile, maybe.

Hmm, I'll think about your suggestions. I've begun the transformation RELATIVELY mildly, to get into the groove... it's my first AP, you know.

The curse’s physical form faded, but its conscience did not. It decided it needed a new plan, and it needed it fast. It almost fell into desperation when an opportunity suddenly arose. It felt Nabooru called upon her power as a sage to teleport.

‘Silly girl… has she forgotten that my magic is still within her?’ the curse thought as it realized it had one chance. As the curse within Nabooru was quite powerful, it could break in two and send one half of the curse elsewhere.

The curse only had the few seconds Nabooru was teleporting to decide… a dense forest, a volcano, a lake or a graveyard. The choices considered, it decided the forest was the most favorable option, and it quickly teleported there.

In its separated, broken state, the curse knew it had to act quickly or it would fade out of existence. It had to find an object to curse that would most certainly be touched by a female. But it found that the area it had teleported to held a nasty surprise.

‘Children? Children?!’ the curse thought to itself as it saw Kokiri Village, wishing it had a mouth to yell with. It felt its last seconds to choose an object fade away. It gave up its temporarily restored hope, and placed itself in a tree trunk near an old temple.

‘At least there’s no way anyone will destroy me here,’ the curse thought. ‘I’ll just keep working on the girl from the desert. I will get my strength back eventually, and if I lay low, I can take her free will from her by surprise at a later time.’

The curse considered its plan to spread a failure, but an event occurred that it could not have anticipated.

_

Saria felt lonely. She would often go and talk to her friends in Kokiri Village, but she hadn’t seen her childhood friend Link in months. She wondered how much he would change. She had seen him grow older, taller… but she would never change, as she was a Kokiri.

She felt she wanted to reminisce about the past, so she walked to the Lost Woods. The path was familiar and pleasant to her, and soon she came upon the Forest Temple. There was the old familiar tree trunk she always used to sit on as she he played her very own tune.

She took out her precious Fairy Ocarina and sat down.
_

At that moment, the curse felt something remarkable. A touch. By a female. It observed the person, and although she had the physical state of a child, it noticed she was far older than any other person it had come across.

The curse decided it could work with this person, and put its magic to work on her.
_

Saria put the Fairy Ocarina to her lips when she felt something strange. The area suddenly seemed extremely stuffy and sweatdrops began to form on her forehead. She put her ocarina down for a moment, and stood up.
As she stood, she suddenly felt very light in her head as though she could faint at any moment. She quickly sat back down. Her clothes seemed to become somewhat tight. She carefully stood back up again, and looked at herself.

As she looked down, she saw the ground seemed to move further away very slowly. She put one hand on the side of her head in confusion, when she felt something was off with her hair. She stroked her hair all the way down to her neck. ‘My hair’s grown longer,’ she whispered.

‘And still going!’ she said out loud, as she felt her hair was gradually growing in length. And her hair wasn’t the only thing. She looked down at her body again. Her legs were significantly longer than they had been, and seemed to still be growing at a slow pace.

She was rather disturbed to observe that she felt pleasant all over her body. ‘What’s happening to me?’ she asked some invisible force. She wiped the sweat off her forehead when she scratched herself by accident. ‘Ow! My nails are not that long, are they…?’

She looked at her hands. Her fingers looked different, somewhat more distinguishably feminine than they had been. And her nails had grown just a bit longer. She still felt oddly comfortable, when she was suddenly struck with an intense sensation.

Looking down, she saw two hills rise from her chest gradually. Her hips also felt odd and tight in her clothes. It had been apparent for some time, but the fact finally struck her completely. ‘I’m growing up…’ Saria said in horror.

She panicked and looked around, hyperventilating. ‘Stop! Stop! This has to stop!’ she shouted, aimlessly running through the forest.
_

The curse noticed that complications arose in its new host. It observed she was mentally increasingly more shocked and her heart raced. ‘Hmm… If this gets worse, my new host might get damaged,’ the curse decided.

With that fact noted, it stopped temporarily.

_

Saria stopped running and breathed in deeply as the odd feelings faded. She looked at herself again. She had indeed grown, but not by much. She estimated it’d be just some years for a Hylian girl growing up.

She wondered if anyone would notice her small, but now clearly present breasts. She imagined that her increased length might be an even worse problem. And she didn’t understand why her clothes fit so tightly around her hips.

‘All in all, though, it could be worse,’ Saria said to herself. She decided she’d go back, and play a few tunes to reminisce about the past anyway. And so, Saria’s Song was heard throughout the entire Lost Woods again after all.


And my questions for today are...

- Is the AP good so far?
- Do we actually want to hear what the curse thinks and do we want the perspective to switch to its point of view occasionally? It's somewhat important to the plot, but might break the focus.

[geno13]

Originally Posted by MagicWritings

- Is the AP good so far?
- Do we actually want to hear what the curse thinks and do we want the perspective to switch to its point of view occasionally? It's somewhat important to the plot, but might break the focus.

- Very very good
- That sounds interesting, though it may take away a little bit of the mystery surrounding it if we know too much about what it thinks.

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Well done, Magic my boy! Bravo!

[DarkSage8]

*walks out of the shadows applauding* Bravo, Magic, Bravo! This is precisely the quality of AP I had hoped to see with Saria. Keep it going man!

Man...if only I wasn't so poor, I could afford a commission to go with this. A man can dream though...a man can dream.

[Daichi Azure]

A) yes it was nice and drawn out for added effect
B) of course, every good story needs to have the villians input every once and a while to add the dark side into it....oh wait did i make a small star wars joke?

[HC-911]

Awesome work, Magic. Love how the Saria arc is looking. Going with the tree stump, novel idea.

What I'm wondering is . . . if these are other worlds.. are there other Links? Other Zeldas? To include them would be confusing, but how would you not? Other than just avoiding Hyrule Castle Town in (Ocarina of Time World)?

I'm merely curious what your take on that is, really.

All in all, I'm impressed.

Those Ruto ideas going around... I've never been a fan of TF ideas myself, but moreso I agree with Magic, I can't see a way to link it together.

I like Ruto as a character though, second only to Midna really, I thought the whole tomboy sprouting into one foxy fish and suddenly coming onto her fiance, the dumbfounded adult Link, was a neat twist.

But... how would you apply it to this story? That... I can't figure out. But truth be told (and since you mentioned the other Sage locations) I'd rather Ruto over Impa. AHAHAHAHA. *ahem!*

So . . . Cremia, Anju, Ilia and Lulu have been all wrapped up huh? Leaving only Nabooru and Saria correct?

Forgive me if I seem out of bounds, but although the story's kinda wrapping up, you just got back . . . so, it kinda leaves me wondering how much is left of this story. I'm just curious.

BTW, ya recognize my name, Magic?



Anyways, glad you decided to resume this story!