Midna BE Story

[MagicWritings]

Originally Posted by geno13

True, as interesting as it would be, there doesn't really seem to be a real clear reason for TF in this situation that I can see, since the curse was meant to enhance beauty.

But keep in mind these are just suggestions, in the end it's all up to you what you do with this story.

Oh of course, but asking suggestions and then altogether ignoring them is kind of... arrogant, isn't it? That's why I'm trying my best to explain why this particular suggestion would make for an excellent story by itself, but not fit in this particular story. It's still a concept to write down and store, though.

[DarkSage8]

Ah, a refreshing and awesome continuation of this Magic! Or should I call you shoe? I kinda like your new name better Anyways, I agree that the Ruto TF would be a rather interesting story on its own, as much as it wouldn't play on any of my fetishes either, but one thing I would definitely like to see is an AP of Saria. I mean, isn't that something we've all wanted to see happen since OOT? xD Something with Tetra would be pretty neat too if done right, but I'm not sure how you could fit that one in.

Great work and keep it up!

[DarkSage8]

Sorry for the double post, my internet kinda went screwy on me and I wasn't sure it posted^^;

[Daichi Azure]

here's the idea for the Ruto idea....one of the fish she catches for Lord JabuJabu, yes that giant fish/whale thing, being cursed and when she catches the fish it passes it onto her, but with the fish being a live object this time instead of an inanimate object might give Link/Midna a bit more trouble as you mentioned earlier and through the story that the curse is becoming more aware of it's surroundings and more powerful. SO it wouldn't be that far off to say that it would be able to lay dormant in a living creature till it finds a suitable target.

[Lock]

Daichi..Good point. As for the Ruto thing, I say either have her slowly become Hylian or just do the usual stuff.

[MagicWritings]

Originally Posted by DarkSage8

Ah, a refreshing and awesome continuation of this Magic! Or should I call you shoe? I kinda like your new name better Anyways, I agree that the Ruto TF would be a rather interesting story on its own, as much as it wouldn't play on any of my fetishes either, but one thing I would definitely like to see is an AP of Saria. I mean, isn't that something we've all wanted to see happen since OOT? xD Something with Tetra would be pretty neat too if done right, but I'm not sure how you could fit that one in.

Great work and keep it up!

Thank you. Don't call me shoe! Name me however you wish... but not shoe. Magic is fine.

Right now, the Saria AP is the thing I see most promise in. Definately expect that to happen at some point.

Originally Posted by Daichi Azure

here's the idea for the Ruto idea....one of the fish she catches for Lord JabuJabu, yes that giant fish/whale thing, being cursed and when she catches the fish it passes it onto her, but with the fish being a live object this time instead of an inanimate object might give Link/Midna a bit more trouble as you mentioned earlier and through the story that the curse is becoming more aware of it's surroundings and more powerful. SO it wouldn't be that far off to say that it would be able to lay dormant in a living creature till it finds a suitable target.

That would be a good means of the curse to be placed on her, but I'm still somewhat worried about the transformation itself and how I'll do that. I'm keeping it on the 'will do when I feel more confident' list.

Now, I should be working on continueing the Nabooru subplot. It has gone into a more complicated direction than the other two had, but I'll see what I can do.

By the by... when I wrote the old story, I was, well, in no state to write about excessively sexual things.
I've progressed slightly in that respect, incorporating things like pleasure, sexual desire, mind control and in a single case lactation in the few works I've found it in myself to write in my long 'break'.
The question is, do you guys want that stuff in the story? Or would you rather keep the innocence in?

[geno13]

That sounds really interesting actually. It's always nice to try new things.

[MagicWritings]

Originally Posted by geno13

That sounds really interesting actually. It's always nice to try new things.

I see. Well, I might take a few small steps in that direction if no one objects to it.

This next chapter has a lot of dialogue, which I'm pretty poor at. Please don't be too harsh on poor old me.

Nabooru sincerely hoped the group of rogues were concentrated on the oasis at this point, because one concentrated glance and they would say their ?Desert Queen,? naked. Nabooru reached the messenger, and without a word, took the incredibly large bra from her.

She put it on quickly. Just moments later, the messenger yelled, quite alarmed. Nabooru turned and saw the group of rogues coming in her direction. They had spotted her. She should?ve guessed it- naked women are hard to miss in a desert.

The messenger took out a small spear, and jumped in front of Nabooru. The rogues, now only about fifteen yards away, stopped and looked at each other for a few moments before bursting into laughter. They took out their various weapons- ranging from swords to bows to axes.

They walked on and soon, they stood right in front of Nabooru and her messenger-gone-bodyguard. There were ten of them. A young man wearing only a ragged cape and muddy pants stepped forward.

?Hello there, Missy,? he said. Some of his mates laughed. ?We?ve been told to look for and capture a desert queen of sorts. Have you or your bodyguard seen anyone that might fit this description?? Nabooru wasn?t sure if she wanted to play along to this game.

?A desert queen? I do not know anyone who controls the sand or carves the rocks,? she answered. ?Really? But if I might be so bold, you don?t lack feminine beauty. You could be a queen for all we know,? the apparent group leader said back, now with a grin.

?And if you weren?t of any importance, then why are you in this sacred, forsaken place? With a bodyguard, no less,? he went on, certain he had won the little game he had set up. ?And if I were to answer I was of some importance, and am here on an important errand?? she went on.

?Then we?d think that the title of queen is close enough for you, Your Majesty,? he said. His friends laughed again. Nabooru figured she shouldn?t have even tried to play along to this game. They had been informed of her location and even been given a description of her.

?Now just a while back, this cloaked figure walks up to our little group was we were just taking a walk. And he says to us to bring him a desert queen with obvious feminine characteristics in the desert! Would you believe it?? the man continued.

Nabooru had enough of this nonsense, and interrupted. ?Indeed. There is a demon who wants nothing less than misery for me and my people. And I suppose you?ll give it just that, take your money and wave your deeds with another one of your ignorant jokes??

The man?s amused grin faded from his face, and the scattered chuckles from his group fell silent. ?A demon? Now what would a demon want with a gorgeous woman like yourself?? asked a dim looking fellow with an axe standing behind the group leader.

?Didn?t I tell you before? This demon has cursed me, and seeks to curse others. But for that, it will need a perfect grasp on me. To control me. A bright looking man stepped forward. ?I did think that cloaked figure smelled foul. It were dark intentions I smelled,? he said.

The group began arguing amongst each other. Nabooru wasn?t sure what direction this would go in. She only caught bits and pieces of the chaotic conversations. About two people seemed convinced they should let her go, but the rest varied in opinion.

?Why don?t we keep her for ourselves? Beats boring old money,? one man suggested. ?But how do we know the guy was evil? Maybe he just doesn?t wash often?? ?We?ve taken this assignment, we should deliver her!? ?We made no promises, we said we?d see about it.?

?Silence,? said a dark voice. The group all turned to see the dark cloaked figure stand behind them. ?I see you caught the Desert Queen. Give her to me and I will give you your payment,? he continued as he slowly walked in Nabooru?s direction.

Nabooru turned, and ran. No one seemed to make any attempt to stop or help her although they seemed focused on the way her backside moved as she ran. The bodyguard held her ground, determined to stop anyone trying to follow Nabooru.

The dark cloaked figure simply passed through her as though he were a ghost, saying ?you?re not worth my time.? He seemed to float rather than run, catching up to Nabooru fast. The bright man from the rogue?s group shot an arrow at him, but it went right through him.

Nabooru fled into the Spirit Temple, and hid behind one of the snake?s statues. The cloaked figure followed. He walked straight in her direction although he shouldn?t have been able to see her. ?My magic is inside you? I myself am. Think you can escape me?? he said.

Nabooru began throwing pottery at him in a last effort to escape. He laughed coldly for some time, but then, a breathless gasp came from under the hood. The cloaked figure fell to its knees. ?The? the diamond?? he gasped. ?What?? Nabooru asked in surprise.

?Without two under the curse, I can? can?t? no?p-physical? form?? as his words faded, so did the figure itself. Nabooru got out of her hiding place carefully, wondering if it was a trick. It didn?t look that way, as the figure did not return even after some minutes.

She sighed in relief. Somehow, she had escaped the worst possible fate. She realized that inside this temple, she could call upon her power as a Sage to teleport herself. ?I?ll send someone to get my messenger later,? she thought to herself.

?For now, it?s time to return home.?

[HC-911]

This is great!

Haven't had a chance to read the new additions, but I will as soon as I am able to. (It's late and I was just heading off.)

Glad to have you back, Magic.

[Lock]

Wasn't bad at all. As for the Ruto choice, go with having her become a Hylian; IMO, it may give her a better shot at catching Link.

[MagicWritings]

Originally Posted by HC-911

This is great!

Haven't had a chance to read the new additions, but I will as soon as I am able to. (It's late and I was just heading off.)

Glad to have you back, Magic.

Thank you. I hope you like the new additions when you read 'em!

Originally Posted by Lock

Wasn't bad at all. As for the Ruto choice, go with having her become a Hylian; IMO, it may give her a better shot at catching Link.

Thanks. I'll see about Ruto later.

I was just trying to write a start to the Saria AP bit when I realized I hadn't asked you guys; should the AP/BE occur fast? Or slow?

[geno13]

I'd say fast as in a growth spurt every few hours or so. Maybe an added increase in sensitivity, if you're comfortable with that?