A little growth story I wrote

burnman · 11-27-2005

Hey it is not the best story. I was my first attempt at writing a growth story and the people over at overflowingbra.com shot it down and depressed me. Well I fixed it a little bit and I am even working on a sequal to the story I would love it if I could get your ideas and input I can take critics and praisers. Well here it is.

Prof. Frink313 · 11-27-2005

Interesting first story. It had a Tromaesc style to it. I liked it and would be interested in seeing what the next strand of the story may lead.

11-27-2005

long i will let you know how it is when i get done with it

11-27-2005

not bad only took me about 2 hours but it is good i would like to see more so keep up the great work and hope not to long untill the next one is out

burnman · 11-27-2005

Thank you all the story was written about 3 years ago and over at theoverflowingbra.com tore it apart saying it was bad. You know the type instead of helping a new writer along they instead bash your work. When the ones who bashed it never even tried to write something like this argh makes me mad anyway I am going to start writing the sequal to "The Experment" called "The Experment: Gentent Alteration". It will be kinda like a sequal staring Professor Stein and a whole new group of ladies. There will be all sorts of changes to come.

fri2219 · 11-27-2005

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Originally Posted by burnman

Thank you all the story was written about 3 years ago and over at theoverflowingbra.com tore it apart saying it was bad. You know the type instead of helping a new writer along they instead bash your work. When the ones who bashed it never even tried to write something like this argh makes me mad anyway I am going to start writing the sequal to "The Experment" called "The Experment: Gentent Alteration". It will be kinda like a sequal staring Professor Stein and a whole new group of ladies. There will be all sorts of changes to come.

Don't take comments personally, they're about your writing, NOT you as a person.

I'm sorry you thought reviewers were too hard on your writing, but you probably shouldn't ask for people's opinions on your writing if you don't want to hear what they have to say.

I haven't read the story you've posted here, but judging from your posts in this thread, my guess is that people probably couldn't look past your spelling and word use- things like that are absolutely deadly to any audience.

At any rate, stick with what you're doing- you'll get better with practice. 90% of writing is editing and rewriting, the more you do of those two, the better your writing will get.

burnman · 12-01-2005

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Originally Posted by fri2219

Don't take comments personally, they're about your writing, NOT you as a person.

I'm sorry you thought reviewers were too hard on your writing, but you probably shouldn't ask for people's opinions on your writing if you don't want to hear what they have to say.

I haven't read the story you've posted here, but judging from your posts in this thread, my guess is that people probably couldn't look past your spelling and word use- things like that are absolutely deadly to any audience.

At any rate, stick with what you're doing- you'll get better with practice. 90% of writing is editing and rewriting, the more you do of those two, the better your writing will get.

The thing was that it was not that they were bashing my spelling and grammer as it was they were personaly attacking me. I don't mind the comments about spelling I know my spelling and grammer sucks that is why microsoft invented the spell check software.

burnman · 12-05-2005

Part 2 will be coming out soon. It is a GTS, BE, and TG story. The only question is which fourm to post it in.

Mordenheim · 12-30-2005

Not a bad first story at all. Interesting plot and some fun situations. It just needs cleaned up a bit. little punctuation fixing here, a little rewording there and it would be very nice indeed.

I'm looking forward to part two.

burnman · 12-31-2005

I am pleased to present the second installment of The Experment.

Part 2 Warning This story contains BE, TG, and GTS.

Jumba · 01-01-2006

I have watched the forums on overflowingbra.com.

I'll agree they are harsh but fair. Sometimes you have to take the worst of it and grab the best.

I'll get to reading both stories sometime soon

who · 01-11-2006

i what just think about the story and i would like to know if number three is coming out some or if that was your last one

11-27-2005	#2
Prof. Frink313 I like Three-head Monkey Join Date: May 2005 Location: Elgin, Ill. Posts: 237	Interesting first story. It had a Tromaesc style to it. I liked it and would be interested in seeing what the next strand of the story may lead. __________________ Self-entitled Fake Shemp.

11-27-2005	#5
burnman The Burnman Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 99	Thank you Thank you all the story was written about 3 years ago and over at theoverflowingbra.com tore it apart saying it was bad. You know the type instead of helping a new writer along they instead bash your work. When the ones who bashed it never even tried to write something like this argh makes me mad anyway I am going to start writing the sequal to "The Experment" called "The Experment: Gentent Alteration". It will be kinda like a sequal staring Professor Stein and a whole new group of ladies. There will be all sorts of changes to come.

12-05-2005	#8
burnman The Burnman Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 99	The Experment Eposode II Part 2 will be coming out soon. It is a GTS, BE, and TG story. The only question is which fourm to post it in.

12-30-2005	#9
Mordenheim Resident Mad Scientist Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 49	Not a bad first story at all. Interesting plot and some fun situations. It just needs cleaned up a bit. little punctuation fixing here, a little rewording there and it would be very nice indeed. I'm looking forward to part two. __________________ In other words, there must inevitably be unholy business here, just as there will be sacred, but I cannot guarantee to tell you -or even sometimes to know- which is which... All I want now is time to enchant you. {Clive Barker, Galilee}

01-11-2006	#12
who no one Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: in hell i think Posts: 82	i what just think about the story and i would like to know if number three is coming out some or if that was your last one __________________ the bigger the better and there is no such thing as TOO BIG!!!

11-27-2005	#3
theone Guest Posts: n/a	long i will let you know how it is when i get done with it

01-01-2006	#11
Jumba Crazy Old Brit Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: United Kingdom Posts: 1,250	I have watched the forums on overflowingbra.com. I'll agree they are harsh but fair. Sometimes you have to take the worst of it and grab the best. I'll get to reading both stories sometime soon