Midna BE Story - Page 10

04-16-2008

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Originally Posted by Ninja In The Night

As nice as it was to see you finish up with the story, looking back at the votes, it didn't seem like what anyone really wanted. You took your own route, and as great as the story began, people wanted to see it continued. None-the-less, it was a Grade A story, and I hope your next one goes well...

I'm afraid I was confused. But people in particular seemed to want more concentration on true form Midna, so I got the feeling the story had to end. I could make a sequel to THIS particular story later of course, so if you guys really liked it that much... by the way, thanks for the compliment!

EDIT: Maybe you simply misunderstood. The story is not OVER. A part of it is over, but I can always continue it- but for now, people preferred to read some more about a true form Midna BE. And to do that, it would require an alternate timeline, which I tried to explain in the epilogue. I can write thousands of pages more.

GLaDOS · 04-17-2008

It was a good way to end this section/timeline.
I like it my own self.
Hope the next stuff goes well.

04-19-2008

Okay

.

Hey, how's this for a small prologue?

'' PROLOGUE

?? When time shatters, the pieces go on by themselves, they say. Sometimes they merge again, sometimes they do not. Sometimes there are great differences and sometimes there are not. Let us look at one of those other timelines... one that broke off from the other pieces when Ganondorf was defeated.??

?? The history of light and shadow shall be written in blood!??, said Ganondorf. A moment later he had a vision of Zant breaking his neck. It was at that moment that Ganondorf died. Link was victorious. Link looked around, as he heard a noise. A blinding light was seen in the distance, and then a dark figure. Link?s hope returned, and he ran towards the dark shape, which he identified as Midna... ''

cyero · 04-19-2008

Yippekyeay.

HungryHobo · 04-21-2008

i know this isnt BE but there is an option to choose the size of her bust. it just came out so zone-archive released a Midna demo. i think we all know the website.

http://www.zone-archive.com/

but if you dont see it heres a website that took it and put it on their website

http://www.funny-games.biz/midna-demo.html

04-22-2008

Quote:

Originally Posted by HungryHobo

i know this isnt BE but there is an option to choose the size of her bust. it just came out so zone-archive released a Midna demo. i think we all know the website.

http://www.zone-archive.com/

but if you dont see it heres a website that took it and put it on their website

http://www.funny-games.biz/midna-demo.html

I can't open it for some reason. Can you please post the file right here?

Murasashi · 04-22-2008

Hey, they also have it at newgrounds....Already.
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/435312
By the way, excellent story.

05-26-2008

Whoa, I'm so sorry I abandoned this. I'm reviving it now, and I'm immediatly continuing the story:

'' Link ran. He saw the figure in the distance much better now. In a few more seconds, he stood right in front of her. Midna slowly stood up and looked Link in the eyes. Link gasped at the beauty of her face. But a detail that could not be missed soon became clear. Though seeming more normal, because Midna had regained her true adult form, her breasts were still incredibly large. On her cheeks, the blue skin turned somewhat pink.

??What? Say something! Am I so beautiful you?ve no words left???, asked Midna. Link?s surprised face turned to a smile but he wondered how the other problem could be solved. The black on Midna?s body covered her breasts only just enough, and both Link and Midna didn?t like the foresight of Midna walking around Hyrule like this. And Midna felt that her breasts hadn?t stopped growing.

Every second felt like wasted time, yet they had no idea what to spend their time on. It all seemed so exceedingly hopeless, when suddenly Midna remembered something. The spell Zant had cast, she knew which book held the secret of this spell, and maybe a way to turn it around. They made haste for Lake Hylia. After running for a few hours, they finally reached the large Lake.

The only way to reach the Gerudo Desert was by cannon. But unfortunately, Fyer wasn?t there. Everything seemed hopeless again, when suddenly Midna felt the energy inside her. She knew she could warp herself and Link to the Twilight Mirror. She concentrated and used the energy inside her, and in seconds they suddenly stood in front of the Mirror of Twilight. Link looked a bit disorientated.

They looked at the gate that would lead them to the Twilight Realm. Midna felt her buttocks touched her cloak more than they had done a while ago. She looked at Link. He was staring at the gate. She quickly put her hands on her buttocks. She sighed. They definitely did stick out more than before, and were a bit broader too. Since Link was still concentrated on the gate, she weighed her breasts on her hands. They, as expected, were a bit heavier too.

She sighed deeply once more. ?? Link, let?s go quickly! ??, she said, walking up the steps quickly. Link followed, and in a second both stood before the Mirror of Twilight. They were teleported to the gloomy Twilight Realm. It always gave Link a somewhat sad feeling, but for Midna it was beautiful. After looking around for a few seconds, Midna realised that her people were here, and she preferred not to be seen like this.

?? Link, let?s run inside the Palace of Twilight, and head quickly for the throne room.??, she said anxiously. Link nodded, and both started running as fast as they could. They encountered several of the Twili who looked at them in surprise, but they ran by hastily. It was torture for Midna to run with her breasts, that bounced as she ran. Her face became a bit pink again, and she hoped Link didn?t look at her.

After several minutes consisting mostly of the same situation, they finally stood before the great gate that lead to the throne room. Midna felt and was sure that her butt was easy to see because her cloak fit tight around it. She tried to stay behind Link for this reason. She hoped that behind these gates would wait a book with a solution to her problem. Would it be possible? ''

Tell me what you think.

Huzzus · 05-26-2008

Getting better but seemed to go by fast. A little more descriptive always helps

Add a little flair and make it sound sexy. Describe how her breasts bounced as she ran, what she was thinking and set the mood. This includes the surroundings too.

It's a good story but a little positive advise never hurts. Plus Midna bouncing boobs alone is a smile on my face.

Oh and glad to hear from ya again.

05-26-2008

Quote:

Originally Posted by Huzzus

Getting better but seemed to go by fast. A little more descriptive always helps

Add a little flair and make it sound sexy. Describe how her breasts bounced as she ran, what she was thinking and set the mood. This includes the surroundings too.

It's a good story but a little positive advise never hurts. Plus Midna bouncing boobs alone is a smile on my face.

Oh and glad to hear from ya again.

Thanks

.

Yes, I tried to slow it at points ( as you might've seen a few times ), but I had no idea exactly where without slowing the whole thing down.

I know what you mean, but there's a certain border I do not want to cross. I never make my art too sexual. However, bouncing doesn't cross the border... but how do I make that better?

Thanks for your advice.

Huzzus · 05-27-2008

If you want to be more descriptive in things not crossing the boarder like breasts jiggles? Try

"As Midna was running through the great halls of the Twilight palace, her massive breasts swayed and bobbed in her cloak. Each stepped sent waves across each breast. Bouncing closer and closer to her face and the sheer weight made it harder for Midna to run. "This is so wrong." Midna thought as she tried to stabilize her wild bouncing breasts, close to the point of pouring out of her skin tight top."

I'm not a story person *I can't even pass a English class* so I'm not the best person to ask but try something like I did but better ^^;

05-28-2008

Hm. I'm not sure, but I'll see in the next part. As I said, I'm frightened to cross the line, but I will try to make something better.

It seems that everyone abandoned me for my 4 week break. One week, we were on vacation and the other I had exams, so there was really only a two week break.

04-17-2008	#110
GLaDOS Lurker Join Date: Mar 2008 Posts: 13	Re: Midna BE Story It was a good way to end this section/timeline. I like it my own self. Hope the next stuff goes well.

04-19-2008	#111
theshoelace Guest Posts: n/a	Re: Midna BE Story Okay . Hey, how's this for a small prologue? '' PROLOGUE ?? When time shatters, the pieces go on by themselves, they say. Sometimes they merge again, sometimes they do not. Sometimes there are great differences and sometimes there are not. Let us look at one of those other timelines... one that broke off from the other pieces when Ganondorf was defeated.?? ?? The history of light and shadow shall be written in blood!??, said Ganondorf. A moment later he had a vision of Zant breaking his neck. It was at that moment that Ganondorf died. Link was victorious. Link looked around, as he heard a noise. A blinding light was seen in the distance, and then a dark figure. Link?s hope returned, and he ran towards the dark shape, which he identified as Midna... ''

04-19-2008	#112
cyero Sir Psycho Sexy Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 2,955	Re: Midna BE Story Yippekyeay.

04-21-2008	#113
HungryHobo Process Fan Join Date: Apr 2008 Posts: 76	Re: Midna BE Story i know this isnt BE but there is an option to choose the size of her bust. it just came out so zone-archive released a Midna demo. i think we all know the website. http://www.zone-archive.com/ but if you dont see it heres a website that took it and put it on their website http://www.funny-games.biz/midna-demo.html

04-22-2008	#115
Murasashi Zero M. Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 653	Re: Midna BE Story Hey, they also have it at newgrounds....Already. http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/435312 By the way, excellent story.

05-26-2008	#116
theshoelace Guest Posts: n/a	Re: Midna BE Story Whoa, I'm so sorry I abandoned this. I'm reviving it now, and I'm immediatly continuing the story: '' Link ran. He saw the figure in the distance much better now. In a few more seconds, he stood right in front of her. Midna slowly stood up and looked Link in the eyes. Link gasped at the beauty of her face. But a detail that could not be missed soon became clear. Though seeming more normal, because Midna had regained her true adult form, her breasts were still incredibly large. On her cheeks, the blue skin turned somewhat pink. ??What? Say something! Am I so beautiful you?ve no words left???, asked Midna. Link?s surprised face turned to a smile but he wondered how the other problem could be solved. The black on Midna?s body covered her breasts only just enough, and both Link and Midna didn?t like the foresight of Midna walking around Hyrule like this. And Midna felt that her breasts hadn?t stopped growing. Every second felt like wasted time, yet they had no idea what to spend their time on. It all seemed so exceedingly hopeless, when suddenly Midna remembered something. The spell Zant had cast, she knew which book held the secret of this spell, and maybe a way to turn it around. They made haste for Lake Hylia. After running for a few hours, they finally reached the large Lake. The only way to reach the Gerudo Desert was by cannon. But unfortunately, Fyer wasn?t there. Everything seemed hopeless again, when suddenly Midna felt the energy inside her. She knew she could warp herself and Link to the Twilight Mirror. She concentrated and used the energy inside her, and in seconds they suddenly stood in front of the Mirror of Twilight. Link looked a bit disorientated. They looked at the gate that would lead them to the Twilight Realm. Midna felt her buttocks touched her cloak more than they had done a while ago. She looked at Link. He was staring at the gate. She quickly put her hands on her buttocks. She sighed. They definitely did stick out more than before, and were a bit broader too. Since Link was still concentrated on the gate, she weighed her breasts on her hands. They, as expected, were a bit heavier too. She sighed deeply once more. ?? Link, let?s go quickly! ??, she said, walking up the steps quickly. Link followed, and in a second both stood before the Mirror of Twilight. They were teleported to the gloomy Twilight Realm. It always gave Link a somewhat sad feeling, but for Midna it was beautiful. After looking around for a few seconds, Midna realised that her people were here, and she preferred not to be seen like this. ?? Link, let?s run inside the Palace of Twilight, and head quickly for the throne room.??, she said anxiously. Link nodded, and both started running as fast as they could. They encountered several of the Twili who looked at them in surprise, but they ran by hastily. It was torture for Midna to run with her breasts, that bounced as she ran. Her face became a bit pink again, and she hoped Link didn?t look at her. After several minutes consisting mostly of the same situation, they finally stood before the great gate that lead to the throne room. Midna felt and was sure that her butt was easy to see because her cloak fit tight around it. She tried to stay behind Link for this reason. She hoped that behind these gates would wait a book with a solution to her problem. Would it be possible? '' Tell me what you think.

05-26-2008	#117
Huzzus Bursting From The Shadows Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Everywere Posts: 281	Re: Midna BE Story Getting better but seemed to go by fast. A little more descriptive always helps Add a little flair and make it sound sexy. Describe how her breasts bounced as she ran, what she was thinking and set the mood. This includes the surroundings too. It's a good story but a little positive advise never hurts. Plus Midna bouncing boobs alone is a smile on my face. Oh and glad to hear from ya again. __________________ My DA Account http://zanbon-sengetsu.deviantart.com/ ------- My FA Account http://www.furaffinity.net/user/pikaslaveryn/ ------- My Website http://zanboninfinity.com/

05-27-2008	#119
Huzzus Bursting From The Shadows Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Everywere Posts: 281	Re: Midna BE Story If you want to be more descriptive in things not crossing the boarder like breasts jiggles? Try "As Midna was running through the great halls of the Twilight palace, her massive breasts swayed and bobbed in her cloak. Each stepped sent waves across each breast. Bouncing closer and closer to her face and the sheer weight made it harder for Midna to run. "This is so wrong." Midna thought as she tried to stabilize her wild bouncing breasts, close to the point of pouring out of her skin tight top." I'm not a story person I can't even pass a English class so I'm not the best person to ask but try something like I did but better ^^; __________________ My DA Account http://zanbon-sengetsu.deviantart.com/ ------- My FA Account http://www.furaffinity.net/user/pikaslaveryn/ ------- My Website http://zanboninfinity.com/

05-28-2008	#120
theshoelace Guest Posts: n/a	Re: Midna BE Story Hm. I'm not sure, but I'll see in the next part. As I said, I'm frightened to cross the line, but I will try to make something better. It seems that everyone abandoned me for my 4 week break. One week, we were on vacation and the other I had exams, so there was really only a two week break.