Welcome to Juggalos [BE/Butt/hips Expansion]

[vidgamer85]

Originally Posted by hmmm!

Nice to have someone consistently commenting on this, even if it is just you, Cyero. Far as I'm concerned that makes you about the only reason to bother putting it on here anymore. Thanks.

Pshaw. I may not always comment, but it brightens my day when a new chapter of any of your collaborative stories shows up for me to read.
Espacially love em because, while they may have process materials, it never is presented as being the only noteworthy quality of the story. Instead it's a well crafted plot, multi-dimensional characters in an interesting setting. "Teh bewbs", the like, and your illustrations to go with the chapters and such are the delicious icing on an already pretty durn tasty cake.

[SoylentOrange]

Originally Posted by vidgamer85

Espacially love em because, while they may have process materials, it never is presented as being the only noteworthy quality of the story. Instead it's a well crafted plot, multi-dimensional characters in an interesting setting. "Teh bewbs", the like, and your illustrations to go with the chapters and such are the delicious icing on an already pretty durn tasty cake.

That may be true, but nobody ever says so. ^^;

Did anyone figure out Penelope's gimmick prior to this chapter? I left a few hints- in chapters 5 and 7, Penny never put the moves on Maddi while they were alone or in the back- only when there were people around for her to titilate.

Next chapter is going to be a little dramatic, but there's also gonna be a *ton* of process in it...

Edit: Also, so long as we're talking about our stories, you ever get any farther on Wendy, Dag? Loved that sketch...

[vidgamer85]

Originally Posted by SoylentOrange

Next chapter is going to be a little dramatic, but there's also gonna be a *ton* of process in it...

Edit: Also, so long as we're talking about our stories, you ever get any farther on Wendy, Dag? Loved that sketch...

Now...when you say "*ton*"...

As for the sketch, unfortunately, no. It's the same situation as last time we talked about it. I'm swamped for pretty much the entire month right up to the last day. But oh the feeling of relief when all this crap will be gone and done with...I can bet I'll be in the mood to churn out a few things.

[CaptainSanji]

Well, I thought this story had been left to die shortly before I quit lurking, but since it seems to have re-surged, I shall offer my thoughts!

First, gotta love the story. What seems to be Maddie's slow acceptance of her situation is really making it more realistic as opposed to the types of stories where women are suddenly expanded only to go from terrified to hornier than a rabbit in heat in the time it takes to blink. As Vid said, giving each and every character their own depth and personality makes it even more fun.

The way that the restaurant itself is portrayed as highly respectable, and showing off their processed waitresses at a dignified level, rather than trotting them out as simply cheap tarts to be ogled and groped at also makes this unique from other BE type stories I've read. The way the trouble-makers from the previous chapter were dealt with is solid proof of that.

Finally, the process!!! I personally think many people can write process, but only a handful can write it well, and this story performs admirably in that respect. The illustrations help a lot, but the way it is written could perform on its own if it had to.

Just thought I'd let you know you are appreciated. As a writer myself (fanfiction, no process) I know how much feedback means!