Equine Love - Horse TF Story

splinterfox · 02-28-2011

Good story, you have good writing skills, but if you are portraying an adult subject like sex, leave out silly terms, like how his penis had every odd name in the book. You are very good at describing things, but your dialog and character development is a bit lacking. Planning out a character beforehand can extremely improve your story, if you fully flesh out a character, even for a short story, you will have a better feel of what their dialog would be. And it just makes it generally easier to form dialog and explain actions.

Good job though, I look forward to more stories from you.

02-28-2011	#2
splinterfox Frequent Poster Join Date: Oct 2006 Posts: 132	Re: Equine Love - Horse TF Story Good story, you have good writing skills, but if you are portraying an adult subject like sex, leave out silly terms, like how his penis had every odd name in the book. You are very good at describing things, but your dialog and character development is a bit lacking. Planning out a character beforehand can extremely improve your story, if you fully flesh out a character, even for a short story, you will have a better feel of what their dialog would be. And it just makes it generally easier to form dialog and explain actions. Good job though, I look forward to more stories from you.